Queen of flames wrote:Name: Damian Cooper
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Name: Sierra
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Name: Xanier
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Name: Zara
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Name: Eleanor
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Name: Kazimir
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All accepted, but is that one named meant to be Xanier, or is it meant to actually be Xavier or Xander?
Furrydogs12 wrote:**Name:**
Shade
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**Role:**
Second Leader, Moon Pack
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Okay, for this would you mind making him the same age as Shadow please?
Also, they formed Moon pack together, it wasn’t already an existing pack. And Shadow is the second alpha so you need to change Shade to the main alpha please.
**Name:**
Rory "Ro" Blackthorn
**Role:**
Warrior, Sun Pack
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Warrior is not a role for this RP. I need you to go read all the roles again please.
He’d need to be the beta’s child, since the beta’s are meant to be older like the alphas, so he couldn’t be the beta either.
**Name:**
**Kairo "Kai" Thorne**
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Hunter, Mountain Pack
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Again, that’s not a rank. He needs to be one of the heirs or the healer. Probably better if he’s the healer, since if he’s one of the heirs he’d probably have to be the older one and then he’d have to be betrothed to the one vampire in the list,
**Name:**
Cassian "Cass" Wilder
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**Role:**
Tracker, Zen Clan
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Tracker is not a vampire role. He needs to be the other heir or the second in command’s child (or he could be the male helper I guess, but we’ve been making some of the helpers and horse caretakers as humans or former humans.)
**Name:**
Selene "Lena" Winchester
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**Role:**
Heiress of the Moon Pack
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She’s fine, so she’s accepted.
But you do need to edit in Riia as her mate since they are engaged.
**Name:**
**Valeria "Vera" Duma**
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**Appearance:**
Valeria’s appearance is a striking combination of elegance and strength. She has long, deep crimson red hair, cascading in soft waves to her lower back, often left loose but with delicate gold or silver clasps keeping strands in place. Her blood-red eyes are sharp and intense, glowing faintly when her emotions are heightened, and her skin is pale with cool undertones. Her regal, aristocratic features — high cheekbones, defined jawline, and full lips — complete her almost ethereal look. At 5'8", she stands tall with a dignified presence, her attire often dark, opulent, and meticulously chosen, a mixture of luxury and practicality that reflects her high status.
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Vampires have human looking eyes in this RP unless angry or hunger. So would you be able to give her a normal eye color, and then say they turn red at times?
Otherwise she is accepted.
But you also need to put Renai as her mate since they are betrothed.
**Name:**
**Luca Westfall**
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**Role:**
Member of Scarlet, Diplomatic Liaison
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Diplomatic liaison is not a rank. Please change him to second in command’s child (since that’s closest to what you put him as)
**Name:**
**Vespera Voss**
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When in her vampire form, Vespera’s beauty becomes even more otherworldly—her eyes glow brighter, and her presence becomes almost overwhelming. Her aura exudes power and authority, emphasizing her status as the heir to one of the most influential vampire families in the Maroon Faction.
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She’s good, but vampires don’t have two different forms. Would you mind editing that out? You just need to give her an eye color (green, brown, blue, amber). Then say her eyes can turn red when she’s angry or hungry/thirsty.
Other than that, she is accepted.