נαу¢ℓαη ✧2.0✧Warrior Cat RP✧

[Jackaboy]

Spiritpaw: Looking upset that he scared her "Sorry I just saw you and wow.wow.wow.wow wait who is this?"

[hxneystorm]

Lostpaw-
"I was just about to ask them that!" She hissed. "Before you so rudely interrupted me!"

[72027]

Spiritpaw: Saw the she-cats Togather hi he bonded up to Lostpaw

To be honest rainbow, I think you need to stop skipping scenes to just to move onto other ones as if your teleporting from one place to another. It gets kinda annoying whenever your characters interrupt during something I would only like me and somebody else to do. Your talking to your mentor one second, then your by the stream another second? Lets just say, unrealistic as heck. Your grammar bothers me too, I don't think your 13 and you have to be 13 to get past the COPPA restrictions. It would be nice if you could use " " when talking, spell stuff correctly, and use proper grammar. It doesn't take long to do, and I will probably start ignoring you if you keep don't do the things I suggested. Your characters don't have to be involved in everything exciting.

[hxneystorm]

Lostpaw-
"And anyway. Wernt you just with your mentor? How could have you gotten over here in a blink of an eye? It took me about 10 minutes to get here." She said, rolling her eyes. Looking at Mint, she says under her breath, "Sorry..."

[72027]

Mint

"Uhh" Mint twitched her ear in slight annoyance.

[hxneystorm]

•Lostpaw•
"Spiritpaw likes to randomly appear everywhere, and you seem to have appeared on Jayclan territory. Might I ask your name and why your here?" She asks

[72027]

Mint

"I'm Mint, and whats a Jayclan" Mint asked.



[Yes I meant for Mint to say "whats a Jayclan' like its an item XD]

[hxneystorm]

•Lostpaw•
"Well, I'm Lostpaw, and I am a Jayclan apprentice" The young calico cat explained. "Jayclan is a clan, where many cats live together as one, where we hunt, sleep, live, die and fight together. Creamstar is our leader. She leads pretty much everything. There are many different ranks that the kits, cats and everyone go under. There are the kits, who are just born until they're 6 moons old. Then they become an apprentice, from 6 moons till about 12 or 13 moons. Then they become a warrior. Warriors do the fighting, most of the hunting and protecting. There are the Queens, who give birth, are pregnant or are looking after kits, and they stay in the nursery. Um... There is the Deputy, who is in line for when the leader dies. Then the Medicine Cat, who looks after all the sick cats and herbs and stuffs. There is a Medicine Cat apprentice who helps the Med Cat with their stuff, and become a full Med Cat when the original Med dies, but they can get their full name while the Med is still alive. The Elders are the old cats... I think that's it... There is also the Starclan where the good cats go when they die, and the Dark Forest, where the bad cats go..." She said, taking a huge breath. Her tail twitched as she glanced around curiously, still looking for that thing- a shiny rock. "There is also a slightly complicated name thing that I'll only go over if you'd like to.''

[DELETE-PLEASE.]

(Currently ill so I won't be posting that much!
Guys, its not rainbow's fault she uses incorrect SPAG. Don't keep shouting at her, because people have already spoken to her. Just leave it be, we can all understand it - but not that clearly. And Rocky, you were saying for her to use it when you're the one not putting punctuation at the end of your speech. You have to use brackets too, you know. By the way, wasn't Mint with Crystalkit? I'm thinking of quitting this roleplay... But not right now.)

[hxneystorm]

(Currently ill so I won't be posting that much!
Guys, its not rainbow's fault she uses incorrect SPAG. Don't keep shouting at her, because people have already spoken to her. Just leave it be, we can all understand it - but not that clearly. And Rocky, you were saying for her to use it when you're the one not putting punctuation at the end of your speech. You have to use brackets too, you know. By the way, wasn't Mint with Crystalkit? I'm thinking of quitting this roleplay... But not right now.)

-what? Aww nuu. I hope you get better soon! ❤️-