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Raven's Destiny|~|Warriors |~| Chapter 2 up!

Postby ~♫Hannah♫~ » Sat Jan 14, 2012 11:21 am

This story is going to be told through a young kit's eyes whose destiny is to be a very powerful warrior his mother Graystripe and Silverstream are guiding him along the way but only Ravenkit know's the for told future.The plot is basically a kit trying to discover his future.His mother and father are the oringal characters of Graystripe and Silverstream expect Silverstream lived and joined Thunderclan while she was bearing kits.And in this one the oringal Ravenpaw was killed by Tigerstar and they named their kit in honor of him.So Stormkit and Featherkit are going to be here to;)


Allegiences


Some are oringal characters;some are not.


Thunderclan


Leader-Firestar-Ginger tom with flame-colored pelt.
Deputy-Graystripe-long-haired gray tabby.
Medicine cat-Hollywhisker-long-haired black she-cat
Medicine cat apprentice-Brairpool-Brown tom with green eyes.
warriors-Sandstorm-pale ginger she-cat with green eyes.
Ferncloud-pale gray she-cat with green eyes.
Dustpelt-dark brown tabby tom.
Cloudtail-long-haired white tom with blue eyes.
Pinestrike-Golden brown tabby tom.
Tornear-black and white tom with icy blue eyes.
Blossomsky-Dark gray she-cat
Apprentices-Foxpaw-Russet she-cat with black back paws.Mentor-Tornear
Icepaw-White and lite gray she-cat.Mentor-Sandstorm
Queens-Silverstream-Slender pale silver-gray tabby she-cat with blue eyes.
Whitefeather-White she-cat with patches of gray.
Kits-Featherkit-silver-gray tabby she-cat with clear blue eyes.
Stormkit-Large blue-gray tom with blue eyes.
Ravenkit-Black tom with lite gray patches on chest and paws.
Elders-Dusklight-pale gray tom with white muzzle.


Shadowclan


Leader-Tigerstar-dark brown tabby tom with unusually long front claws.
Deputy-Blackfoot-Large white tom with huge jet-black paws.
Medicine cat-Runningnose-small gray-and-white tom with patchy fur, and a constantly running nose.
Medicine cat apprentice-Littlepaw-very small, brown tabby tom with light blue eyes.
Warriors-Tawnypelt-tortoiseshell she-cat with green eyes.
Appletail-Mottled brown she-cat.
Jaggedtooth-Dark gray tom with jagged teeth.
Ferretleap-Red-and-black tom
Sammy-Ginger-and-cream tom with amber eyes, was a loner.
Ashenjaw-Pale gray tom with a black colored jaw.
Rateye-Black tom with small eyes.
Apprentices-Owlpaw-Brown tom with speck of cream.
Olivepaw-light brown she-cat with amber eyes.
Ivypaw-pale gray she-cat with blue-green eyes.
Queens-Nightsplash-Jet black she-cat with pale blue eyes.
Kits-Crowkit-Long-haired black tom with amber eyes.
Elders-Rainscatter-Mottled black-and-gray she-cat.


Windclan


Leader-Tallstar-black-and-white tom with long tail
Deputy-Onewhisker-Brown tabby tom.
Medicine cat-Barkface-Brown tom with short tail.
Medicine cat apprentice-Kestrelpaw-Gray and white tom
Warriors-Antcloud-brown tom with black feet and black tail.
Breezefall-Black-and-gray she-cat with green eyes.
Heatherflight-light gray she-cat with blue eyes.
Sedgefoot-pale ginger she-cat with blue eyes.
Sunstripe-light brown she-cat with ginger stripes.
Spiderfoot-Dark gray tom with wedded feet.
Apprentices-Grasspaw-Small brown tom.
Harepaw-Dusty brown tom with darker specks.
Queens-Hawkscreech-Dark brown she-cat with blue eyes.
Hollowtail-Small white she-cat with pacthes of brown.
Kits-Rockkit-Small gray tom.
Mothkit-Cream colored she-cat with green eyes.


Riverclan


Leader-Leopardstar-unusually golden-spotted,dappled,tabby she-cat with amber eyes.
Deputy-Mistyfoot-Gray she-cat with blue eyes.
Medicine cat-Mudfur-long haired, light brown tom with a pale belly
Medicine cat apprentice-Mothpaw-dappled golden she-cat.
Warriors-Graymist-pale gray tabby she-cat
Mintpool-White she-cat with green eyes.
Minnowsky-Small dark gray she-cat.
Troutstream-Brown tom.
Tidepool-Light gray tom.
Apprentices-Ripplepaw-Gray tom with patchy fur.
Pouncepaw-Ginger-and-gray tom.
Queens-Smokepelt-Dark gray she-cat with lighter specks.
Willowsky-Pale gray she-cat with blue-green eyes.
Kits-Whitepaw-White tom with specks of gray.
Mossykit-dark gray she-cat.
Elders-Cherrybreeze-Dappled she-cat.
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Prologue

Postby ~♫Hannah♫~ » Thu Jan 26, 2012 12:01 pm

Several cat bounded down the misty sloop of Starclan's hunting grounds on there way to different things.Leaves whirled around the swaying Willows and around to Bluestar.Bluestar was sitting on a low hanging branch of a Oak tree waiting for her former clan-mates of Thunderclan to gather in the matter of a small kit."Now everybody knows Silverstream and she is having kits of Graystripes now." Several growls erupted in the clearing.One tom hissed,"Firestar is getting to soft now days.Letting a Riverclan cat join his clan." Bluestar flicked her tail for silence."She is his best friends mate would else would he have done?Told the she-cat to go back were her clan-mates are furious?You would do the same Smallear." Smallear ducked her head."I know."


"Now.." Bluestar continued in a proud clear voice."I have decided I want one of the kit's to behold a special power that could be benafical to Thunderclan in the mear future.That's why I have gathered you all here I want to hear your pro's and con's about this decide and weather or not you agree.I'm open to all suggestion's." Whitestorm stepped foward his tail held high."I think that having a kit with a special power will dearly help Thunderclan with what ever power you choose to give the kit." He looked at her more sternly now."But Wouldn't it cause Thunderclan to have a unfair advantage on certain things?"


Bluestar stood and sighed."Now Whitestorm he wouldn't have a unfair advantage infact his power must be earned.I'm not just going to tell him what power he has.That would be unfair.He must travel far in near and learn from other ancient cats to find the meaning of his power.If I just gave it to him that's a good shot he would use it for bad and not good."


"Now is their anybody else who would like to speak?" Many turned around and glanced side to side and finally a cat approuched her shyly as though she was doing somethign wrong.Moonflower,Bluestar's mother, moewed,"Why does Thunderclan need such a powerful kit?And with Silverstream being such a worryier want it upset her to see her kit gone all the time?Never knowing if he will return?Or if he's safe?I hope your not planning to began his search for his powers today!The day he is born." Bluestar narrowed her eyes."The sooner the better.He must not delay for Thunderclan is being hovered by a dark force and this kit will be their only chance."


Brindleface stepped foward her eye's locked on Bluestar."Why must this kit be so powerful?Thunderclan has dealt with it's problems perfectly fine before why is this one any different?" Her tail twiched impaitenly."A kit doesn't need to bear such a power." Bluestar looked at Brindleface nodding."This kit means life or death for Thunderclan.This power that all the leaders of Starclan see coming is nothing like we have seen before.Everywhere Thunderclan turns they will have no help from other clans only this kit."


The Starclan cats turned and looked at each other uncertain and before they could give their final answer Bluestar nodded her head sharpy."It's settled, when the kit of raven is born, claws will shred and blood will follow, but peace will come after Raven's screech." Several warriors gave uneasy glances at one another, unsure of her quick decision, but then nodded their approval.


Pinestar stood, his steady gaze met her challenging blue eyes, he turned to face everybody else, unconviced by their approval. "Bluestar has gave excellent procheys before that have helped every clan why do we question her now?" The concerned cats glanced around unsure what to do. Soon Whitestorm stood and yowled his approval the other cats followed.


Pinestar turned back to Bluestar and dipped his head."Thank you." Bluestar mumbled as she dipped her head back.


Bluestar flicked her ears as though dismissing the meeting and headed down the slope. She vanished from the clearing and began her journey to Silverstream and Graystripe.


Though she was nowhere to be seen her voice was clear around the clearing."The Raven is coming and peace will follow."
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Re: Raven's Destiny|~|Warriors |~| Prologue up!

Postby ~Feather*Tail~ » Fri Jan 27, 2012 11:17 am

I love it! I can't wait to see more!! <3
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Re: Raven's Destiny|~|Warriors |~| Prologue up!

Postby Ourpawprints » Fri Jan 27, 2012 11:22 am

Sounds good although it sounds a little like Thunderclan will be fine and all the other clans will die.
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Re: Raven's Destiny|~|Warriors |~| Prologue up!

Postby ~♫Hannah♫~ » Wed Feb 01, 2012 6:45 am

I'm glad you all like it! :D I'm working on the first chapter right now but it might not be up until Sunday night or Monday because I'm going to be very busy.
Ourpawprints-I guess you will have to keep reading to find out.^^
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CHAPTER 1!

Postby ~♫Hannah♫~ » Wed Feb 01, 2012 8:09 am

Silverstream yowled out with impatience. Her first litter was slowing making its way to being greeted by Thunderclan's cheerful warriors. She flicked her ears as she began to think about how she ended up in the nursery of Thunderclan but she remembered all too well. About six months ago a handsome gray tabby named Graystripe had fallen in to the river dividing Thunderclan and Riverclan and of course she saved him. She remembered how when she got him out of the chilling water and looked him over something struck she and she realized she had a crush on the tom.


They returned every night at river's edge to talk and cuddle together and a few moons later Silverstream was bearing kits of Graystripe. She decided to move to Thunderclan because her clan-mates weren't being helpful through her hard time and Thunderclan welcomed her with warmth and compassion. Though some warriors weren't happy about a Riverclan Queen moving into Thunderclan they quickly got over it and thought of it as a chance for more warriors Riverclan will never get.


Silverstream found it hard to adjust to the life as a Thunderclan cat and hunting in such dense bracken when she was use to sitting at the water's edge waiting for a silvery fish to swim by. Though her mate is patient with her and is spending all his extra time adjusting her to hunting habits and fighting techniques, it was hard and still is. With Silverstream bearing kits she learned very little but she hopes once her kits are about two moons old she will be able learn from Graystripe again.


Her thoughts where brought back to the nursery when pains rippled through Silverstream's belly like the surging waters of the river. She looked around the nursery to see Whitefeather glaring at her.


Whitefeather looked at Hollywhisker, the medicine cat, with excited eyes. "Are they almost here?" She was only a moon along her-self and should still be carrying out warrior duties but her mate, Pinestrike, had insisted that she moved into the nursery.


Hollywhisker glanced up at Whitefeather with herbs stuffed into her mouth. "Yes, just a few more pushes and the first kit should be here." She dropped the herb bundle softly on the ground then padded through them silently as she sorted out the borage and the other herbs.


Graystripe stuck his head into the nursery then meowed quietly to Hollywhisker. "Is there anything I can do?" Hollywhisker continued sorting through the herbs as she mumbled to Graystripe. "Yes! You can stay out of my fur and stop worrying! But before you do I need a thick short stubby stick for Silverstream to bit on when the pains come." Graystripe nodded and ducked out of the den.


When he returned to his mate with the stick, Hollywhisker was gingerly speaking to Silverstream. "That's it keep pushing, I can see its head now!" Silverstream let out a desperate push and a small dark shape slipped out.


Silverstream picked up the small kit then gently dropped it beside her belly. She the licked the kits fur in the opposite direction and once the kit started mewing she purred tiredly. "It's a little she-cat! I think I will name her Featherkit." A few minutes later two large toms emerged to join their sister.


Hollywhisker scooted a few borage leaves towards Silverstream. "Here, eat these. They will help your milk to come." She bent down towards the mewing kits and purred. "Welcome to Thunderclan little ones." She then padded out of the den quietly and stopped in front of Graystripe. "Go see your kits Graystripe, their beautiful."


He nodded to Hollywhisker then parted the bracken to the nursery to see three small kits kneading their mother's belly. He purred and walked up to Silverstream who lifted her head to lick her cheek. "Are they not just gorgeous?" She purred happily.


Graystripe nodded then laid down next to his mate. "What are their names?" He looked down at the largest tom that looked a lot like him. She pointed towards the little she-cat then meowed. "I named her Featherkit and this one Stormkit." She pointed towards the tom that looked like Graystripe.


Graystripe looked at the littlest tom. "What about him?" He pointed his tail at the tom. Silverstream purred. "I wanted you to name one." Graystripe thought hard while he looked over the small Black and gray kitten. It was jet black with very lite gray paws and chest. Pain shot through his heart. He looked like his late best friend Ravenpaw.


The young tom was best friends with Graystripe and Firestar when they were just ‘paws’. He was killed shortly after Tigerstar figured out that he knew his scheme to take over the clan. He launched back to the present as Silverstream nudged him.


Graystripe sighed and looked at the kitten. "I think we should name him Ravenkit after my best friend that died shortly after he discovered Tigerstar's scheme." Silverstream brushed her tail over Ravenkit and licked her mate's cheek. "I think that's an excellent name."


Graystripe looked around the nursery to see a faint starry figure standing in the middle of the nursery. He knew insistily hat it was Bluestar, Thunderclan’s former leader, but why had she come to see his kits be born? Bluestar slowly turned and padded out of the nursery but turned her head to nod to Graystripe. He saw her mumbling something but he couldn't make it out.


Graystripe shrugged it off and focused on his new born kits and his amazing mate.







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Re: Raven's Destiny|~|Warriors |~| Chapter 1 up!

Postby Ourpawprints » Wed Feb 01, 2012 8:33 am

pretty good. Is Hollywhisker meant to be Hollyleaf?
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But I can't hear a word you say
I'm talking loud not saying much
I'm criticized but all your bullets ricochet
You shoot me down, but I get up

I'm bulletproof, nothing to lose
Fire away, fire away
Ricochet, you take your aim
Fire away, fire away
You shoot me down but I won't fall
I am titanium"
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Re: Raven's Destiny|~|Warriors |~| Chapter 1 up!

Postby ~♫Hannah♫~ » Thu Feb 02, 2012 1:11 pm

Thank you!:3Hollywhisker is meant to be Hollywhisker.Hollyleaf wasn't even been born yet.xD
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Re: Raven's Destiny|~|Warriors |~| Chapter 1 up!

Postby Ourpawprints » Mon Feb 06, 2012 7:54 am

ah. Got a little confused XD
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"You shout it out,
But I can't hear a word you say
I'm talking loud not saying much
I'm criticized but all your bullets ricochet
You shoot me down, but I get up

I'm bulletproof, nothing to lose
Fire away, fire away
Ricochet, you take your aim
Fire away, fire away
You shoot me down but I won't fall
I am titanium"
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Re: Raven's Destiny|~|Warriors |~| Chapter 1 up!

Postby ~♫Hannah♫~ » Wed Feb 08, 2012 12:04 pm

ourpawprints-Thats okay!;)
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