Mins' Stories and Poems!!

[splity]

I write what's in my mind and write a bunch of sad stuff me thinks..
don't be afraid to complement<3 you're allowed to comment!!

[splity]

I graze my fingers against my desk,
suddenly hearing the booming voice at the door
that drowned every other chatter in the school.
At first, I didn't notice,
but then I looked.
Your eyes all over me.
So poisonous,
such lying eyes.
You watch me.

Why?

I don't get it.
I gulp the air,
my skin growing cold.
I tried to look away,
but you never did.

I remember those nights,
those days.
Your eyes aren't the only poisonous thing.

Maybe I'm just pretty.

[GoldenDevotion]

Hi !! Love your writing, hehe I can imagine them in my head Can you teach me how to do like yours?? I love the rhythm yet visionary writings. It's like you know which to pick to create an imaginable scenery !!

I will try mine:

Please, spare me some ice changes, For I, am feeling clouds in my head but the anvil weighs down my heart. What is it that I am not satisfied with? I'm laughing at them for thinking I'm arrogant but I'm actually doing that to a mirror.

I only drink from tears of regrets and revenge but it never avenges my angsty downfall. I wear the crown with a title even lower than a jester.

I don't bloom, I only doom.
The curious watch me, so I hatch the void.
I'm reflecting on the worst, So I ended up deflecting everything around me.

These are actually from a few months ago. But I thought they fit this theme cause atm I got nothing in my mind !! What do you think I could adjust to make for a more readable poetry? IDK if it's even poetry I just write whatever I liked !

[splity]

Hi !! Love your writing, hehe I can imagine them in my head Can you teach me how to do like yours?? I love the rhythm yet visionary writings. It's like you know which to pick to create an imaginable scenery !!

I will try mine:

Please, spare me some ice changes, For I, am feeling clouds in my head but the anvil weighs down my heart. What is it that I am not satisfied with? I'm laughing at them for thinking I'm arrogant but I'm actually doing that to a mirror.

I only drink from tears of regrets and revenge but it never avenges my angsty downfall. I wear the crown with a title even lower than a jester.

I don't bloom, I only doom.
The curious watch me, so I hatch the void.
I'm reflecting on the worst, So I ended up deflecting everything around me.

These are actually from a few months ago. But I thought they fit this theme cause atm I got nothing in my mind !! What do you think I could adjust to make for a more readable poetry? IDK if it's even poetry I just write whatever I liked !

Hello!! With my poems, I put together my feelings and how I imagine them in my head!! For instance the poem here, I explain how it felt to me in that instance, how I see those thoughts into objects or descriptive words.

I also organize mine into stanzas! I always make sure to split some of the long sentences up, especially comas, and skipping a line to make it feel more bouncy. I always make sure to end a complete sentence nonetheless.

Your writings are good, and I see the idea, its just a bit messy if you're going for a poem!! That's just how I write them!