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Postby imp. » Wed Aug 17, 2016 9:10 am

    imp//serelathe//goes by seara only//female
    "to have one wish?" she told her child, looking up at her.
    "my wish would be to buy you all the books in the world."
    the kit giggled as seara put the book back with the other
    three and kissed them goodnight. closing the door, seara
    made her way to go make herself dinner, something to eat. -- -- -- her child loved
    fairytales, favoring the ones her mother made up. seara had been asked, out of
    the blue, what she would do with one wish. her answer was simple; to buy her
    child all the books in the world. for their father had disappeared, and they barely
    have enough money. of course, the child thought nothing of it, but seara really
    did mean it. every night she would go to the bookstore hoping, wishing, praying
    that a fairytale book was on sale. one lucky day there was.

    this is a tryout for a kalon if they had one wish.
    viewtopic.php?f=53&t=3156725&p=101284446#p101284446
    please tell me if i should change or add anything <3
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