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Postby ~Dark Angel~ » Tue Jul 30, 2013 2:58 pm

This is my first time sharing my work on CS I am a horror short story author. I very much hope you enjoy my story and that they send chills and creeps down your spine! please post what you think about my story, if you don't like it be honest and don't be shy to give your opinion up front. if you like my story well of course post what you think about it.
if I get good reviews expect to see more of my short story's posted.
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The KIlling of Jane

Postby ~Dark Angel~ » Tue Jul 30, 2013 3:00 pm

The doll was in a pink silk dress with white lace trim, her porcelain face was smooth and flawless and the most beautiful cream color with eye lashes that gave her checks butterfly kisses when her lids closed to hide her glass eyes that were the bluest blue sky. Her hair was a golden halo framing her face with curls. My mother hummed behind me her soft hands brushing my own soft gold hair, as she braded flowers and pearl beads through it. I touched the white lace dress, its sleeves when just past my shoulders, puffing out ever so softly. The dress hugged me to the torso before flowing out after a silk ribbon into two layers the first reaching just to my knee and the second drifted just off the ground. The embroidery looked like silver vines twisting up, with flowers made with sparkling glass beads and silk ribbon. My mother turned me to the mirror and smiled “so beautiful you are.” She kissed my cheek before touching her nose to mine “I love you.” She whispered, I giggled “I love you more mama.” She pulled away giving me a warm smile, before she could reply there was slamming footsteps on the stares. My mother turned to look and see the man that emerged at the door way his face red with anger and his voice dripping with poison. He pulled a knife from behind his back. He started toured to my mother and she let out an ear splitting scream. He slammed into her chest cracking bone and stopping her scream with a gasp as the dagger plunged through the soft flesh under her rib cage. He twisted it making the rose grow from the gash and bloom on her white dress as he slowly pulled the crimson blade from her body. Her face was pale and her breath was gurgling as blood dripped from the corners of her mouth. Her knees hit the floor with a crack as the rest of her body followed. The man turned to me closing the space in seconds and the world whet fuzzy with a fiery pain that exploded from my chest and the shatter as my doll and body hit the floor. Cold creped in throughout me as death made it harder to breathe but before the world went black I heard my mother’s gasping gurgling voice as she choked out “I love you most.”
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Postby ~Dark Angel~ » Tue Jul 30, 2013 3:07 pm

OK that's really it. It is a very short and quick story but I hope you like it and make posts about it I would be really happy if you did
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The True Story of the House in the Forest

Postby ~Dark Angel~ » Tue Jul 30, 2013 3:35 pm

The whole house gave off creecks and protests as the three boys climbed worped steps to the porch. The wooden front door was hanging off only one hinge, and was tipped to the side. The boys looked around hearing no sounds from the woods, as if the trees were holding their breath for what was to come. The two oldest boys looked at the smallest one with evil smiles as he shook with fear. "Go on, you want to be a man and join our group you got to pass the test, or are you to chicken!" The little boy looked up at the older two boys who were snickering to each other "h-h-have you two passed the test?" The boy asked in a quivering voice. The boys looked at him "well no dip! We don't look like dorks do we, we hang out with the cool people. You want to be like us you have to go in first." The little boy nodded and took a deep breath as his shaking hands grabbed onto the cold medal handle. The old wooden door creeked and screamed in protest and half way open the hinge disconnected from the rotting wood and landed with a thundering slam as it hit the deck. The three boys jumped but the two older ones pulled back on the cool act before the smaller one could see. "Come on it was just a little sound you look like your about to pe your self! What a baby!" The little boy shook his head I'm not a baby he whispered but the other two didn't hear. With the smallest in the frount they all steeped inside. It was a single room with green light filtering in from the windows that were covers with vines and a layer of dirt. The two older boys pushed the smaller one. He was shaking with fear "I don't want to do this anymore I want to go home!" The two boys laughed "stop being such a baby there's nothing here to be scared of its just an old stupid house." With that he turned away from the boy "now to pass the teast you have to walk from one end of the house to the other how easy is that." the little boy noded and started to step forword. once he reached the middle of the empty dark room the floor started to creack and with a splintering crash the floor caved in sending the boy into a tumbuling fall, landing hard ong the ground on a pitch black room. the only light came from the hole that he had fallen through. the two older boys let of a scream and crawled on there hands and knees to the edge og the hole. the boy looked up and started to cry and scream "HELP ME, HELP ME, PLEASE GET ME OUT!" the two older boys reached down but he was in to deep. they pulled away for a second to try and find something to help pull him out with. the boy let out a blood curtiling scream and when the two older ones looked back they saw why. three sets of bloods shot eyes stared out from the darkness, they were pail as death with there white skin pulled tight over jaged bone, their teeth were yellowed and pointed, and they had little hair on there heads. the boys watched in horror as the creachers lunged at the still screaming boy biting into his flesh and chewing on bone, the boys screams continued to cry for help as he was slowly disenbowled by the monsters. the two older ones terned away lisening to the riping, snaping sounds from below. as the boy screamed for his brothers, they walked out of the house and into the woods vowing to never tell a soul the true story of what happend in the house in the wood.
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Postby ~Dark Angel~ » Tue Jul 30, 2013 5:01 pm

omg i hope you guys enjoy it!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! i was geting the creeps as i was thinking about it :D anyway sweet dreams right please coment!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! bump
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Postby ~Dark Angel~ » Tue Jul 30, 2013 5:04 pm

bump bump bump please read and please comment :D :D :D :D :D :D :D :D :D
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Postby ~Dark Angel~ » Tue Jul 30, 2013 5:05 pm

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Postby ~Dark Angel~ » Tue Jul 30, 2013 5:12 pm

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Postby yuketsu » Tue Jul 30, 2013 5:13 pm

Nice! I love the adjectives you put! Very detailed. I need to make mines like yours! So jelly!
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Postby ~Dark Angel~ » Wed Jul 31, 2013 4:25 am

Omg thank you soooooooooo much :D
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