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The Little Girl in the Big City { Comments welcomed! }

Postby Roux- » Sun May 12, 2013 8:16 am

"One day, I'm going to be famous." said ten year old Ari, leaning against the roof. Her best friend, Kendall, leaned down beside her, gazing up at the stars. 'So do it. Hollywood is only a plane ride away." He said, looking at Ari. She met his gaze, and tilted her head, "Think I should?" He nodded, "Yes. Promise me you'll do it?" Kendall held out his pinky, and Ari nodded, making a pinky promise with him.


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Main Cast:
Ari Kate Blue - The main character of the story. She is currently nineteen years old, and lives in Hollywood California with her sister, Madelyn. She is from Maxine, Alabama but was born in Bayonne, New Jersey.

Kendall Layne Benjamin - Ari's best friend, and has had a huge crush on her since he was nine. He is currently 20 years old and lives in Maxine on his own, but is from Dublin, Ireland. He is Natasha Winningham's ex-boyfriend.

Logan Cooper - Ari's current boyfriend. He is 20 years old, and lives in a house in Hollywood. He is from Santa Maria, California.

Other Characters

Nadia - Ari's dog, and best friend. Came to Hollywood with her, and hates Logan.

Rodger Blue - Ari's father. Ex- alcoholic.

Deanna Blue - Ari's step-mother

Madelyn Rose Blue - Ari's sister. She is currently 26 years old and lives in Hollywood. She is from Maxine Alabama. Madelyn is also famous, as she is the main star on a hit show.


Chapter 1
Ari
Nothing exciting ever happens in my hometown, Maxine, Alabama. The whole population? About 300. That's counting ALL the adults, high schoolers, middle schoolers, and elementary kids. Yeah, pretty small. That's why I'm leaving. I'm sick of the same old rut everyday since I could walk. Or, when I was five, when Momma cheated on Daddy with some business man from New York at the Country Kicker, the local club. Should I say, the ONLY club. It resulted in a pretty nasty fight every night until I was seven, and they divorced. During those two years were the worse of my life, and that's when my best friend, Kendall saved me. We've been closer than ever since then, and he's the one who encouraged me to go to Hollywood and fulfill my dreams, as long as he gets to visit me, of course. Ha, ha. Anyways, Daddy went into a depression after him and Momma divorced. So, with some help from me and my sister, Madelyn, he remarried when I was ten, to the woman who I call Mom. She was a school teacher for the deaf and blind, so it was cool to have a step-mom to learn sign language from.

So, back to the present. Deanna, my step-mom, bought my ticket to LAX a few days ago. Kendall didn't seem to know how serious I was until he came for dinner yesterday and saw three suitcases by the door. I guess reality slapped him in the face, because that's what he looked like, and I swear I saw tears in his eyes. Today I'm going to talk to him. We have a special spot when something serious turns up. It's an old cherry tree in a beautiful clearing, overlooking a river where a BUNCH a deer come out in the spring, usually with fawns.


A few hours later.


My plane leaves in two days, on Sunday. Kendall was acting worse than Nadia, following me like a shadow. Right now, I'm waiting for Kendall. He should've been here by now, unless he's with Natasha, his girlfriend. I don't trust her, I mean, she's known for being a "troublemaker" if you know what I mean. But, they both look happy, and that's all that matters. I'm snapped out of my thoughts when I see Kendall walk up, dressed rather nicely, his right hand hidden behind his back. Hiding something, eh, Kendall? He walks up, a smile on his face.


Kendall


The minute I laid eyes on Ari that summer day when we were seven, I was in love. I couldn't ever stop thinking about her, and when she told me that she was leaving for Hollywood, I was heartbroken. She was my first friend, I moved to Maxine from Ireland when I was seven. She's pretty much my only friend still, except for Derek, Johnny, and Micheal. Then last month, I met Natasha. She really was beautiful, and I actually began to love her. But, my heart belongs to Ari, and I hope she will be mine. So, I told her to meet me at our "spot" at Shermon's Meadow. I went to her father, and talked to him about my feelings, and hes okay if me and Ari become a couple. So today I went to the general store, and bought her favorite flowers, white roses.


"Hey, Kendall." Ari said, giving me a hug. I smiled, I love it when she says my name. I wrapped my free arm around her, and said, "I got you something." She smiled, her beautiful light blue eyes shining with excitement. I showed her the white roses, and the biggest smile appeared on her face, and she kissed me on the cheek, "Thank you, Kendall! Oh my gosh, you are the best friend ever!" She hugged me tightly, and I hugged her back, picking her off the ground. She's kinda short. But it's cute. "So, what did you want to talk about?" she asked, and I scratched the back of my neck, "Well.."


A/N: So, what do you think? Should I continue?
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Postby I'm Not The Only One » Sun May 12, 2013 8:57 am

Ooh! Love it so far, but one thing is really confusing me. In Ari's perspective, you say that Kendall's in love with Natasha? But then you say in Kendall's perspective that he's in love with Ari? Other than that I'm looking forward to reading more of this!
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Postby Roux- » Sun May 12, 2013 9:01 am

Oops! Forgot about that. I'll edit it.
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Postby Roux- » Sun May 12, 2013 10:10 am

Here's Chapter 2~
Natasha

Previously on Little Girl in the Big City....

I showed her the white roses, and the biggest smile appeared on her face, and she kissed me on the cheek, "Thank you, Kendall! Oh my gosh, you are the best friend ever!" She hugged me tightly, and I hugged her back, picking her off the ground. She's kinda short. But it's cute. "So, what did you want to talk about?" she asked, and I scratched the back of my neck, "Well.."


Chapter 2
Kendall
"Uh...Uhm... How much I'm gonna miss you?" I said, though it came sounding like a question more than a statement. Ari looked at me weird, and nodded slowly. "Okay. Your lying, I can tell." she said, looking me in the eyes. Augh, she hates liars. Dang it, Kendall! You idiot! I was going to spill it, when I heard the rumbling of thunder in the distance. I looked up, and saw gathering storm clouds. "We should head home. It'll start raining." I said, and turned to walk back. I felt the collar of my shirt being jerked back, "Fine. But we are going to talk about this when we get home. Okay, Kendall Benjamin?" I nodded, and said, "We gotta run, or we'll get caught in the storm -" "Run?! I'm in flats!" Ari said, pointing to her shoes. I sighed, and bent down, "Get on my back." Ari got on my back, and I walked back home.

When we arrived home, Ari and I were nearly soaked. That storm was moving fast. I let her off my back, and she hurried into her room to change into dry clothes. I hung my coat on the coat hanger, and took off my sneakers. I walked into the kitchen, and saw Rodger, Ari's dad. "Do you have any extra clothes?" I asked, and he nodded, disappearing into his room, and came out with a pair of sweats and a sweatshirt. "Thank you." I said, and changed in the bathroom. I came out, and Ari was sitting on her couch, watching T.V. Her long brunette hair reached her waist, and she was wearing an over-sized sweater and leggings. Her eyes were glued to the T.V, not even acknowledging my presence.

I crept up behind her, and gripped her shoulders tightly, and said, "Rawr!" Ari jumped probably five feet in the air, and glared at me. "You jerk!" she snapped, yet was smiling. She threw a pillow at me, and I caught it in mid-air. "Nice try, Ari Kate." I said. She hated being called by her middle name, and she rolled her eyes. "Blue Collar Comedy is on, wanna watch?" she asked, changing the subject. "Sure." I said, and settled beside her.


A/N: Sorry this was a dry and fast-paced chapter, I needed a filler. I promise a better one will come soon!
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Postby I'm Not The Only One » Sun May 12, 2013 10:20 am

I felt the collar of my shirt being jerked back, "Fine. But we are going to talk about this when we get home. Okay, Benjamin?"


Who's Benjamin? I think you meant Kendall? Oh well, though, it was still a very enjoyable chapter :D
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Postby Roux- » Sun May 12, 2013 10:23 am

His last name, Kendall Benjamin. I'm gonna proofread this chapter.
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Postby I'm Not The Only One » Sun May 12, 2013 10:29 am

Catori wrote:
His last name, Kendall Benjamin. I'm gonna proofread this chapter.


Oh, sorry xD Didn't realise that...
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Postby Roux- » Sun May 12, 2013 11:24 am

It's alright, I should've said that was his last name.


Previously on The Little Girl in the Big City
I crept up behind her, and gripped her shoulders tightly, and said, "Rawr!" Ari jumped probably five feet in the air, and glared at me. "You jerk!" she snapped, yet was smiling. She threw a pillow at me, and I caught it in mid-air. "Nice try, Ari Kate." I said. She hated being called by her middle name, and she rolled her eyes. "Blue Collar Comedy is on, wanna watch?" she asked, changing the subject. "Sure." I said, and settled beside her.


Chapter 3
Ari
Today is Sunday. The date? April 9, 2013. The day that I will arrive in hopefully my new home. My plane leaves in 30 minutes, and I'm waiting with Kendall, since Daddy had to help deliver a calf or something, and Deanna had to help. After some time, I watched the plane pull up, and Kendall stood to help me up. I waited for the passengers to get off, then hugged him goodbye, staying like that for a minute, then let go. I started to walk, and looked back one last time at Kendall, his blue eyes fresh with tears.

I got to my seat, which luckily was in the front, so I'll get off earlier. I was settling down when I heard a loud chatter coming towards my seat. I peeked over, and saw a couple loudly arguing over some brand of fried chicken. Please don't sit by me... please don't.. I prayed to myself, and covered my eyes, then heard the woman's annoying high pitched voice, "CARL! WE GOT 7A!" Dang it. I felt someone move beside me, and saw the woman, sitting to my left by the window, and the husband sitting on my right, completely blocking the aisle. They started arguing again, and I covered my ears, missing what the flight attendant was saying. Oh, well. Nothing new.

Sometime during the flight, the couple again started arguing about a pimple. Gross. The woman, wanting to prove she was right, stuck her arm in my face, exposing an ugly black.. thing. It wasn't even black... Just different colors that I didn't know existed. "IS THAT INFECTED?" she yelled, shaking it. IT HAS A HAIR! I doubled over, cupping my mouth with my hands, and reached for the doggy bag, and breathed in it, trying to keep from losing my lunch. As if the angels were saving me, the intercom said, "Please buckle your seat belts, we will be landing in LAX shortly."
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Postby Roux- » Sun May 12, 2013 1:56 pm

Previously on The Little Girl in the Big City...
I doubled over, cupping my mouth with my hands, and reached for the doggy bag, and breathed in it, trying to keep from losing my lunch. As if the angels were saving me, the intercom said, "Please buckle your seat belts, we will be landing in LAX shortly."


Chapter 4
Ari

As soon as the plane stopped, I literally jumped from my seat into the aisle. I quickly grabbed my carry-on, and probably was the third person off the plane. I looked around, bumped into someone, resulting in my phone falling. We both bent down to pick it up, and the person's hand touched mine. I looked up to meet a pair of the most beautiful green eyes I've ever seen. "Uhm.. Here's your phone.." He murmured, standing up and handing me the phone. "Uh-huh.." I said, still staring into his beautiful eyes. "My name's Logan. Logan Cooper." he said, sticking out his hand. "Ari... Ari Blue.." I murmured, shaking his hand. I felt sparks. I snapped back to reality when I heard someone shout my name. I turned, and saw my sister, Madelyn.

My sister, Madelyn came to Hollywood to be an actress, and has made it big since 2009 when she auditioned for No more, no longer, a popular show. She starred as Geraldine Kyle, the main character. Anyways, she never seemed so happy. Maybe because this is the first time I've seen her since August of 2009. "I've missed you so much! We have so much to catch up on the way home! Let's go get your luggage." Madelyn said, talking a million miles per hour. She grabbed my wrist and pulled me towards the luggage place. I looked back at Logan, waving.

Logan

I've never seen any girl that her before... Just.. Wow. I felt sparks like never before when I touched her hand, and I blushed. Thank goodness she wasn't looking up, my face was red as a tomato. When my face returned normal, she looked up. Oh my, she had the most beautiful blue eyes I've ever seen. They were the color of the sky, something I've never seen before. She was so unique, usually girls her age would be flirting with me and what-not. It gets annoying, and to find a NORMAL girl.. "I'm Logan. Logan Cooper." I said, sticking out my hand. She shook my hand, and sparks flew. "Ari.. Ari Blue.." she said. Beautiful name, for a beautiful girl, I wanted to say, but she probably had a boyfriend.

I heard someone call her name, the person who was picking her up. When I looked at the girl, she seemed to glare at me, then turned her attention to Ari. After a rushed reunion, she literally dragged poor Ari away, and she waved at. WOAH THERE! She waved! Stunned, I waved back. I felt a hand grip my shoulder, and I turned to meet my twin brother, Axle. "Hey, brother!" he said, and we hugged. He could my mind was on something else, and like twin telepathy, he said, "What's her name? Is she pretty? Does she have a sister?!" he said, getting excited.

"Uhm.. Her name is Ari Blue, she's so pretty, and yes, she does have a sister who is off limits!" I said, when Axle smiled at the end, then frowned. "Come on, bro, let's go get her number. She obviously was on the same plane!" Axle said, and we power walked to the baggage claim, his backpack slapping his back the whole way.


A/N: Oooo, Ari's in love! But wait! How is Kendall going to react? Who do you support? Ari x Kendall, or Ari x Logan? Oh, and this is what Logan looks like: Click
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Postby I'm Not The Only One » Sun May 12, 2013 5:11 pm

Young love xD But I'd have to say, probably ArixKendal?! Nice next chapter
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