And She Hardly Even Notices Me {hunger games pairing.}

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And She Hardly Even Notices Me {hunger games pairing.}

Postby Darius4Ever ~ ♥ » Mon Feb 18, 2013 9:31 am

Do not read if you have not read Catching Fire or Mockingjay to avoid spoilers.

Disclaimer: *Sob* Sadly, I don't own the Hunger Games, or any of the characters in this book besides Todd, Emra, Marissa or any other characters you DON'T recognize.
The story is an AU, and the pairing is Darius x Mrs. Everdeen.




    ...Emra blushes and swats at me. "Darius, stop!" She laughs, her bright eyes focused on me. I'm leaning against her, practically breathing down her neck, tickling her chin with my fingertips.
    ...Her friend, Marissa, doesn't look much better off. She's got a confused look on her face and a clueless grin. I step away from Emra and move in close to the blonde, brushing my slim body against hers. I move to her left side, brushing away a few strands of stray hair and dropping my voice to a seductive whisper. "Ah, don't worry, pretty girl, I didn't forget about you." This sends her into a fit of flustered giggles, and I know I've got her uncomfortable because, despite her olive skin tone, she's quickly turning crimson.
    ...Someone speaks, calls really, making me turn my head. Gale's dark, masculine features stand out as he heads toward me and the girls. "Darius! How many times have I told you not to prey on innocent bystanders? If it's been once, it's been a thousand times!"
    ...Playing along, I grin, force a blush, and shrug. I feel the eyes of my Peacekeeper friends watching from the entrance of the Hob, and a single glance tells me they're amused. Whatever, I'll assure them I was only messing around when I get over there, if one's dense enough to think I'm being serious and acting out of a young heart's lust.
    ...Gale's shaking his head now. "I'm sorry, ladies, if this. . . Pervert, bothered you at all." I pull off a hurt expression, clutching my own chest and opening my mouth a little. I catch his eye, and we share a mini conversation: Gale, how could you?
    ...Whatever, Redhead. I'm just trying to get you out of here before things get out of hand. Definitely don't want you to get the title of Cray's wingman. At least, that's what his intentions seem to say, and his facial expression. And his words. I feel my lips curl into a smile, small and passive, as he reaches out, snatches my hand and jerks me toward the Hob. As we're walking, I turn from my waist up around to face the two partially, nearly tripping myself over in the process. I wink at the girls, making Emra roll her eyes and Marissa blush and look to the sky, the ground, anywhere besides me. I think she likes me, which is awkward since on a normal day I find her rather clingy and annoying. She comes into the Hob with things that she seems to want to trade, and then spends the whole time talking and flirting with me. My friends tease me, saying they wouldn't be surprised to look over and find us making out, but I ignore them. I know where my priorities are, but my feelings are another story. I have someone I'm kind of interested in, but it's not Marissa. That is something I know for certain. I turn around and quicken my pace, prying Gale's fingers from my hand. I wince, flexing my stiff fingers.
    ...He casts me a glance with those warm, steely gray eyes. "You, sir, are a mess," He tells me.
    ..."But a hot one, no?" I reply, lifting my eyebrows and brushing my shoulder against his. When he stops walking to stare me down, I almost run over him.
    ..."Darius," he says in a warning tone. "Knock it off."
    ...I blush, and I'm sure my face is now matching my hair. "What? I was joking!"
    ...Gale grins a mouth full of teeth so sparkling white it's unbelievable. "Doesn't feel so good on the receiving end, does it?" Hew begins laughing, and I join him.
    ...When we meet my fellow co-workers in the same crisp, ivory uniform as I, they nudge me lightly, smiling. They obviously know I was only joking. A young Peacekeeper, new to Twelve, reaches up and tugs on a handful of my messy red hair, his eyes sparkling with amusement. "How old are you?" I ask him for probably the millionth time since he arrived.
    ..."Uh, eighteen," he replies, azure eyes curious. I can never believe his age, though; he's short, 5'3" or 5'4", and has high, prominent cheekbones, a baby face. If he was a random face off the street and you asked me to place an age on him, I'd estimate him to be no more than eleven or twelve, maybe thirteen. I call him Todd, his last name. Every one else calls him Henry, his first name, Shortie, Pipsqueak, Blue Eyes, Baby Face, or Short Stuff. I nod. He smiles at my recognition, rocking back and forth on his heels. "So," he says nonchalantly, in his soft voice, "what was that over there about?"
    ..."Oh, that?" I laugh, handy flying to my hair. "I was only teasing them."
    ...One of the older Peacekeepers, Jackson, another friend of mine, glances my way. "I swear, Darius, half of District 12's female population fancies you. The other half either doesn't know you or don't trust you, because you're a Peacekeeper."
    ...I grin, even though I'm aware of the exaggeration. "Or they already have a man in their lives." This sends a chuckle through the group.
    ..."What is everyone laughing about?" The voice makes my stomach tie in knots. I swallow, take a breath, then turn around.
    ..."It wouldn't matter to you, Ms. Everdeen," I assure the sixteen-year-old, "just guy stuff." She wrinkles her nose at me.
    ..."Why so nervous?" She asks with a mischievous grin.
    ...All eyes are on me now. I turn red from the attention, but I try to blow it off. "Nervous? What're you talking about? I'm not nervous." I roll my eyes like this is the most ridiculous idea in the world, then turn around, close my fingers around Todd's wrist, and silently begin to drag him over to Greasy Sae's. I know what they're thinking. They're betting that I'm interested in Katniss, which I'm not. It will be any time now that Gale will come over and threaten my life if I try anything with her; even if no one else can tell, I know that Gale's in love with Katniss. No matter how hard he tries to hide it, his incognito love is as clear as Todd's eyes to me. I swear I don't like Katniss like that. My feelings are for someone much older than myself. But. . . I'm not sure exactly how I feel for her, these emotions are too overwhelming, too confusing. It feels wrong, wrong and misguided. But it's not like I can help it. You know what they say, 'you can't help who you're attracted to'. I want to tell one of my friends. . Todd, maybe, or Jackson, but I'm afraid they'll laugh, won't accept it.
    ...I buy myself a bowl of wild dog soup, a Greasy Sae specialty, and Todd does the same. The spoon to my lips, I close my eyes and lean with my back against the stall. I can feel the younger boy's concerned, questioning eyes boring into my face. "It doesn't matter," I say finally. "You don't know her."
    ..."Is she nice?"
    ...I open one eye, my right, to survey him. I can't help but smile whenever I see him. His uniform is about two sizes too big, as is his helmet, which is right now sitting at his feet beside mine. "She's real nice. Heals people. Friendly. . I don't know her too well, though."
    ...Todd watches me eat for a moment. "So she's not Katniss?" He asks hesitantly.
    ...I splutter, spraying broth forward an on two unfortunate women, who squeal in surprise, glare at me, then stalk off, dabbing at the dark stains on their bright dresses. Town girls, those two are definitely not from the Seam.
    ...Greasy Sae glances over, chuckling. "Watch yourself, Darius, that soup'll kill ya' if you don't be careful."
    ...I ignore her comment, staring Todd straight in the eyes. "No, I don't like Katniss." I take him by the elbow and pull him over to a deserted part of the Hob. "If I tell you who it is, you must tell no one."
    ...He nods vigorously. "Don't worry, Darius, I won't tell anyone. I promise."
    ...His innocent face reassures me. I swallow, then lean in and whisper into his petite ear. "Mrs. Everdeen, Katniss' mother." At least, I think what I'm feeling is a crush." I'm blushing wildly now, just the thought of her drives me mad. I pull away from Todd, eyes focused on the ground.
    ...His eyes widen, and he's quick to comfort me. "Oh, come on, it's not that bad." It doesn't help, though. I close my eyes and picture her, laughing, playing with my hair, wrapping her arms around my waist and kissing my neck. I want this to be a reality, my near future. . Of course, these fantasies only make me blush brighter, if that's possible, and feel guilty. I push the thoughts away, then freeze, staring into the distance.
    ..."She's here." My voice is little more than a whisper. She's clutching a few garments of what seems to be Primrose's, a floral shirt, blue skirt, and a lavender dress. She doesn't seem to be struggling, but that doesn't stop me from longing to rush over and carry everything for her.
    ..."Darius!" Katniss yells my name. I turn to look at her. "Come on, let's see what dragged Mom into here." I smile a little; Katniss and I both know that normally Mrs. Everdeen wouldn't step foot in the Hob.
    ...I-I. . . "Alright." Please, Katniss, don't make me do this. . . Todd gives my shoulder a squeeze.
    ..."You'll be fine, just don't freak," he whispers to me. I nod, straighten my posture, lift my chin, and draw back my shoulders. Technically, this is how Peacekeepers are supposed to walk, but this is only my attempt to get her to notice me.
    ...When Katniss and I reach her mom, I'm so nervous I'm literally trembling. Thank gosh, Mrs. Everdeen and her daughter don't seem to notice. "Here, let me carry that for you." I step forward, taking the clothing in my arms.
    ...Mrs. Everdeen stares at me in surprise. She nods lightly to me, smiling. I hope I'm not blushing. "Thank you, that's very nice." She nudges her daughter with an elbow. "You should take notes from this one," she tells Katniss, and I laugh softly, sending my younger friend an I-completely-agree grin.
    ...But Katniss only rolls her eyes, giggling. "You're such a suck-up, Darius. When did you start acting like a gentleman?"
    ...Her mother looks as if she wants to scold her daughter for speaking to me like this, but seems to figure out we're only joking around. "I'm following you," I tell Mrs. Everdeen, and she nods. Looking around for a minute, she decides to go toward the clothing stalls. When she walks by me, she reaches up and ruffles my already messy red hair, smiling warmly. This, naturally, makes me feel dizzy. But I hide it easily, following her. Katniss and I make light conversation, but I can't remember half of what we talk about. My eyes are on Mrs. Everdeen as she quickly pieces together how to maneuver around the old warehouse. She's clever, too, I think. Very intelligent.
    ..."Darius?" Katniss' voice yanks me from my thoughts. I twist my head to face her.
    ..."Sorry, I guess I zoned out a bit," I admit, turning pink.
    ...Katniss snorts, but she's also grinning. "Yeah, no kidding, hm?" She's teasing me, I know, but I make sure to look at either the ground in front of me or Katniss, avoid her mother.
    ...We stop at a stall that sells used linen clothing. The woman is a young widow who speaks so softly, I strain to hear her. She glances my way and practically has a heart attack right there on the spot. Mrs. Everdeen turns her attention to me, and it seems she's only just realized that I'm a Peacekeeper, because she looks startled and is taking in my image with an up-and-down eye sweep. I feel my face heating, and everywhere on me that her sight touches feels like an electric shock. "Don't worry," she assures the woman. "He's with me."
    ..."Besides, no heartless keeper would dare walk around without a helmet," adds Katniss with a smirk. I left my helmet back with Todd.

Author's Note: I'm not going to post any certain length, just what I've got done at the time that I've posted. Should I keep going? ^3^
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Re: And She Hardly Even Notices Me {hunger games pairing.}

Postby Darius4Ever ~ ♥ » Mon Feb 18, 2013 1:44 pm

    Bump! pleasereadsomeone unu
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Re: And She Hardly Even Notices Me {hunger games pairing.}

Postby cece. » Mon Feb 18, 2013 4:06 pm

Um..please! I had to read this three times because it was written so beautifully! Wonderful job ^^
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Re: And She Hardly Even Notices Me {hunger games pairing.}

Postby Darius4Ever ~ ♥ » Tue Feb 19, 2013 4:43 am

    Aw, thank you so much! ^^
    I'm deciding what should happen for the next part.

    I didn't like the choppy look, so I made it paragraph form. It was still in the fanfiction.net formatting :3
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Re: And She Hardly Even Notices Me {hunger games pairing.}

Postby AninaAna » Tue Feb 19, 2013 1:18 pm

I know I said I'd do a review real quick, but teacher started talking and took more note of who was and wasn't paying attention than normal, haven't gotten a chance till now.

This is really good, it paints a picture in your mind, even when I had to start reading again mid-sentence (teacher telling me to pay attention interruptions) I could still picture what was happening, you have a style of writing that I find hard to come across, and I love it. Your characters personality, even if it is exetremely early in the story, has already been made quite apparent, i can see him perfectly, and clearly in my mind.
I did find I had to re-read a sentence once or twice, but that was on my own fault, not yours, but other than that, I find nothing wrong with this story so far, the grammar was fine, and so was the spelling, if I had to rate this, and I'm going to compare it to published books that I have read, I'd give it a four out of five! A job well done! :clap:

(And just a quick note, it was only last year, near the end, that I even read the hunger games books)
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Re: And She Hardly Even Notices Me {hunger games pairing.}

Postby Darius4Ever ~ ♥ » Tue Feb 19, 2013 3:34 pm

    I don't mind it being later than expected, I was running errands with my mom and grandmom c:

    Thank you so much for the review, by the way, I was really nervous people wouldn't like it. ^^
    You gave it a four out of five when comparing it to published books... self esteem + 1,000,000,000,000,000,000 I have no idea how to respond to this review, just that I was smiling the whole time I was reading it. I had a bit of a crappy day today, and I've been moody, but this just made it great, even if it is 9:30pm here. Thank you so much for taking the time to read. <3
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Re: And She Hardly Even Notices Me {hunger games pairing.}

Postby AninaAna » Tue Feb 19, 2013 6:12 pm

I'm glad to have made your day ^_^ and its no problem, this was really good, I would definetally recommend it to other people to read.. In fact, I think I'll go do that now!
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Re: And She Hardly Even Notices Me {hunger games pairing.}

Postby wolves+horses » Wed Feb 20, 2013 9:29 am

Wow, I feel pretty stupid. It's only been about a year or less since I read the Hunger Games, and half-way through or so, I remembered who Darius was. Wow. *facepalm*

As for the story itself, I really like the way that it seems to have a similar style of writing that the real books do, so it gives it the same atmosphere. :) I also marvel that you can write so much about such simple daily stuff. I hope that doesn't sound like I'm saying that this part is boring; In fact, I'm saying the opposite, because it takes real skill to be able to keep things interesting no matter what. I salute that. *salutes [lol] * I also like that you made everything clear from the very start: the characters, their appearances, their relations, social statuses, etc. That sort of stuff is very helpful! (Yay!) Hmm, I'm trying to think of a nice way to conclude but I can't think of a good way to do that, so... um... The end? :lol:
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Re: And She Hardly Even Notices Me {hunger games pairing.}

Postby Darius4Ever ~ ♥ » Tue Apr 02, 2013 10:56 am

    Ah, don't worry about it. My friends at school ask me who my favorite character from THG trilogy is, and I say Darius, and when they say "who???" I just tell them to go to page ten of Catching Fire. :'3

    Aw, thank you, I try to keep the story moving and as interesting as possible. c: One of my favorite pieces of writing advice ever is "Enjoy every minute of your story. If you don't, no one else will.". It makes me always remember to keep it from just wasting space, to make something of every little area I've got. ^^

    I'm writing chapter two, I got a few paragraphs done at school today<3


    EDIT: Either chapter two, a / a few more Darius pairings or all of the above should be posted in the next few days, sorry for the wait! cx


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