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★ Cho - Story of a CS Dog ♥ / you may post!

Postby ri bird. » Sun Feb 03, 2013 9:39 am

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Welcome to the story of Cho ♥
Cho is a dog in a all species high school (their term for 'public' school) who's
thinks she knows what she wants. She has her whole future planned out- her career,
her dream wedding, how her garden will be arranged once she has her own house. But one
day she meets a very mysterious guest who turns all of that upside down.


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Chapter OneChapter Two
Chapter ThreeChapter Four
Chapter FiveChapter Six
Chapter SevenChapter Eight
Chapter NineChapter Ten
Chapter ElevenChapter Twelve
Chapter ThirteenChapter Fourteen
Chapter FifteenChapter Sixteen
Chapter SeventeenChapter Eighteen

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Feb. 12.13 - I'm interested to see who's really into this- if you like the story so far please
comment and let me know your critique/suggestions, or any feedback! <3
Feb. 23.13 - Hey everyone! c: I've been getting mixed results on my poll- if you have any critique,
or want to see improvement, just let me know how I can make it better! Your votes would be much
more helpful if you let me know what you didn't like about my story. ^^
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★ Cho - Story of a CS Dog ♥

Postby ri bird. » Sun Feb 03, 2013 9:51 am


I shut the car door, the rain spattering my eyes and soaking my jacket.
"Bye mom!" I reached into the car trunk and grabbed my violin quickly, slamming the trunk shut
and watching my mother drive away.
I hurried to the school doors and fumbled with the handle. "Stupid rain," I muttered, my paws
slipping. Why couldn't my school switch out the doors with the push and pull ones?
A cream paw reached over and deftly twisted the handle open. "Need help?"

I glanced up and saw my friend. "Hey, Evelyn- thanks!" I ducked inside the building and
made a face. "The forecast channel said it would be sunny today."

Evelyn laughed. "You expected them to be right everytime?"

"They should be." I waved good bye to Evelyn as she left for her class and put my
violin away in my locker. It's so gray today, I thought. Kind of depressing.
I trotted into my science class, still a little wet, but dry enough that I didn't smell of wet dog.

Annalise leaned over and poked me. "Hey!" She whispered. "Did you finish the sun diagram due today?"
"Yeah."I proudly pulled mine out of my notebook. It was carefully labeled, each description precise.
Annalise rolled her eyes when she saw me admiring her work. "It's just an assignment. I don't
understand why you have to try so hard for everything."

I shrugged. "I just want a good grade."

"Alright, class!" Mr. Kinnard, the science teacher, clapped his hands for the students' attention.

"Pass your diagrams up. If you don't have it, bring it in tomorrow or after class."

I passed mine up and looked out the window. Still gray and overcast. Today was just another
school day.


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Postby ri bird. » Sat Feb 09, 2013 3:36 am


I gazed out the window, the rain splattering it with a steady rattle. I shivered.
A crawling feeling was creeping up my spine, and I felt like someone was...watching me.
I turned back to my desk, reluctantly directing my attention towards Mr. Kinnard.

"...homework due Wednesday. Page 882!" He shouted, the bell drowning out his voice.
I gathered my books slowly, filing out of class behind the other students.
No one was watching me...it's just my overreactive imagination.

"Hey, Cho."

A voice snapped me out of my reverie.
Mitch walked past me, looking back and grinning.
"Hi Mitch." I rolled my eyes.
He was a grade above me, a sophomore. I had a class with him, and we sometimes joked
around with each other. It's not like we were friends though. He was popular, and I wasn't,
so I didn't really think that gap could be bridged. He only talked to me because there weren't
any other girls in our small class.

I walked into my language arts class just as the bell rang.
Laura, the girl next to me, gave me an odd look.

"What?"

"Your face is really red," she remarked. "Are you blushing?"

"No," I snapped. "It's just hot." I tossed my hair back and adjusted my notebooks.
I was confused, though. Why was I blushing? It's not like I liked Mitch.
In fact, I liked Will.

"Sure, Cho. Cause it's hot. You're such a bad liar." She smiled coyly and leaned forward.
"Come on. Tell me who you like."

"I don't like anyone!" I insisted. I'd liked Will for two years, yet I haven't had a single
class with him- I saw him only in the hallways and at lunch. Sometimes I dared to think
he maybe liked me back.

Mrs. Elroy swept into the class, her stern gaze searching for someone to scold.
"Laura, Cho!" She barked. "Stop talking. A.J., don't lean on your chair and Chrissie,
spit that gum out! Right now!"

I sank into my chair, relieved. Hopefully Laura would just forget about it by the end of class.

Mrs. Elroy passed us a sheet of paper. "Today we'll be analyzing a bit of Alice in Wonderland.
I want you to read the quotes and look at the pictures, then write your responses below.
Use details, examples and reasons. If you don't finish, then this is homework."

Laura groaned. "This is stupid."

I ignored her. She could get a D for all I care, I thought secretly.
People should take their schoolwork seriously. I looked at my paper, staring at the quotes.

“Begin at the beginning," the King said, very gravely,
"and go on till you come to the end: then stop.” 
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I rubbed my forehead. Normally I would've been able to pull something out of this quote,
but my mind seemed frozen. All I could think about was that sinister feeling of being watched.
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Re: ★ Cho - Story of a CS Dog ♥ / you may post!

Postby ladybug5 » Sat Feb 09, 2013 4:00 am

This is amazing! :D I love the story so far!
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Postby ri bird. » Sat Feb 09, 2013 4:01 am

ladybug5 wrote:
This is amazing! :D I love the story so far!


Aww, thank you so much! ♥ I've been dying for a comment! XD
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Postby ladybug5 » Sat Feb 09, 2013 4:07 am

ria, wrote:
ladybug5 wrote:
This is amazing! :D I love the story so far!


Aww, thank you so much! ♥ I've been dying for a comment! XD

I know how you feel, I've been writting a warriors story and it's 4 chapters long with no comments. xD
well, I'm writting the forth chapter right now because I'm bored...lol

I saw the link in your signature. And I agree that the bird in your sig is adorable! xD
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Postby ri bird. » Sat Feb 09, 2013 4:11 am

^^ I'm glad my siggie is working! I love warriors, I'd love to read yours <3
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Postby ladybug5 » Sat Feb 09, 2013 4:16 am

ria, wrote:^^ I'm glad my siggie is working! I love warriors, I'd love to read yours <3

the link is in my signature. It's the last link inside the quote. :D The story is called Flamefur's Journey.
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Postby ri bird. » Sat Feb 09, 2013 4:19 am

My phone cuts off your signature >.> but I will check your recent posts for the story! :)
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Postby ri bird. » Sat Feb 09, 2013 5:46 am

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It was still raining. A dull, dreary gray rain, gray and unending.
I pressed my face to the window, leaving a foggy cloud imprinted on it. The
cars on the street below drove by, splashing up waves that sloshed into the gutter.

My Friday afternoon seemed to have a very dreary future. I turned from the window.
I better do my homework now before it piles up on Sunday.


My parents were out on some adult dinner with their friends, and my sister was on
a school orchestra trip- she wouldn't be back until next week. I was all alone in
the house except for my fluffy excuse of a bird who couldn't protect me if she tried.
I shuddered. I don't need protecting. This house is safe, all the doors are locked...this
is a safe neighborhood,
I told myself firmly.

I returned to Mrs. Elroy's assignment and tried to form a response, but the words
didn't come. All I could think about was how I was alone in the house, and how the
scratching of my pencil seemed to sound rather loud in all this silence. The only sounds
that punctuated my studying were the woosh of cars driving by. I couldn't even hear my
dog downstairs.

I repeated the quote over and over in my mind, desperately trying to find a detail,
an example, a response.

"Begin at the beginning, and go on till you come to the end..." I muttered. "Then stop..."

"Just what it says, my dear!" A high and chortling voice floated out of the air behind me.

I shrieked and dropped my pencil, spinning around in my chair.

A strange looking dog wearing a worn suit was sitting on my ceiling fan, laughing
down at me. "Just what it says! Don't read any more to the meaning, it's says what it
says and it means what it means!"

I gripped my chair and took a deep breath, steadying myself. "What do you want?" I
asked. My voice sounded bold, but inside my heart was pounding a million beats a
minute. "And get off my fan," I added. "It's going to break."

He leaped off the fan and flew at me, paws outstretched. I ducked and rolled to the
floor. The strange dog cackled and perched precariously on the top of my chair.
"Get off your fan, you say? You say what you said- did you mean what you meant?"

If this weren't real, this dog would just be a major irritation. But it was real, and
I was frightened. Who was he, and how did he get in? What did he want with me?

"What?" I whispered.

He laughed. The dog seemed jolly enough, but there was something in his amber eyes
that pinned mine, chilling and unstable.

This dog was crazy, I thought. I ignored the puzzling words he had said. "How
did you get in?"

"Cho, Cho, Cho!" He adjusted his polka dot bow tie and winked. "I know who you are.
Do you know who I am?"

He tipped his hat towards me and jerked open my window. Rain spattered my bed, the
wind tugging at my fur. "Mr. Maple, my dear!" He called. "The name is Mr. Maple!" He
leaped out my window, slamming my window shut behind him.

I ran to the window and looked down. There was nothing but clogged leaves in the street
gutter and cars rushing by. He was gone.
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