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☠I never thought I would Die like this☠

Postby Mrs.Electric » Wed Jul 04, 2012 1:15 pm

So I've come up with the idea to write a book with a combination of different movies/tv shows- Alice in Wonderland, Heroes, and Golden Compass. I have the entire story line planned out, all I have to do is add in the details.

Who-
Name:
Alice:
Kiwi:
Parker:
Peyton:
Hayden:
Zamora:
Lamarcus:
Noah:
Jonah:
Griffin:
Falcon:
Spencer:
Meaning ~ Desire
Truthful, Noble ~ Recognition
Song, Guard ~ Responsibility
Hard Working ~ Success
Noble, Warrior ~ Spiritualism
Peaceful, Strong ~ Solitude
Praised ~ Love
Warlike ~ Freedom
Rest, Peace ~ Adventure
Entertainer, Alone ~ Stability
Protective, Cruel ~ Generosity
Hunter, Laughter ~ Expression
Wise, Skilled ~ Friendship

What- Twelve teenagers come together by fate. All of them have powers, even though some may not know yet. While discovering what they are capable of, friendships are made, promises are broken, and evil arises. The 'bad guys' form attacks on the group of teens -who don't exactly know what to do- and try to consume their powers.

When- The present day (In the year 2012, but not the same month as right now.)

Where- Acindina (meaning safe) Eden (meaning paradise). Or more familiar, Wonderland.

How- By the goddess of Acindina. She continued her father's work by searching for humans with special gifts. Her name is Filia, and she is a great leader. All she wanted was recognition from her father. Now that he has passed, she is determined to find and befriend every Talli meaning hero there is in Acindina Eden. She does this in hopes of creating an army that is unstoppable.

I just got my book with all my idea's back, so I will start writing C: Hopefully I will have it up soon. I will be putting up one chapter every time I post. Remember that I am planning on making this a novel, so the chapters may be longer than on other forums. Enjoy!!
Chapter one is called Alice and the Cherry Tree

Happy Fourth!!

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Postby Mrs.Electric » Wed Jul 04, 2012 1:30 pm

ABOUT THE CHACARTERS

Most people would want to know how old everyone is, what they look like, and, of course, what their power is. Well, I can't find pictures for most of the characters, but I will describe them throughout the story. As people start to discover their power, so will you. I'll post it along with the ages. If you have any question about something you may have missed, please let me know C:

17 years old
Spencer Kyle
Falcon Ulysses
Hayden Fawn
Power~Daemon
Unknown~Scarlett
Unknown~Isabella
Healing~Aria


16 years old
Lamarcus Onyx
Parker Iris
Peyton Iris
Power~Daemon
See's 15 seconds into the future~Declan
Unknown~Cayden
Unknown~Miles


15 years old
Griffin Ulysses
Jonah Randy
Power~Daemon
Unknown~Leah
Unknown~Collin


14 years old
Noah Harrison
Zamora Onyx
Power~Daemon
Control's Water~Ethan
Control's Fire~Kathryn


13 years old
Alice Valarie
Kiwi Adams
Power~Daemon
Super Speed~Violet
Apporation~Braden
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Postby Mrs.Electric » Wed Jul 04, 2012 2:36 pm

RELATIONSHIPS

Lovers-
He likes her-->
Noah-->Alice
She likes him<--
Like each other<-->
Dating ♥

Best Friends-
Alice, Kiwi, Zamora
Jonah, Griffin, Noah
Falcon, Lamarcus
Hayden, Peyton
Spencer, Parker


Family-
Names--Relationship
Parker, Peyton-- Twins
Falcon, Griffin-- Brothers
Lamarcus, Zamora-- Cousins
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Postby shadows~light » Wed Jul 04, 2012 3:45 pm

hey this seems really cool! im kinda confused though... if chapter one is about alice, then why is she so young? i feel like she would be at least 16 if she was going to be a main character... anyway, im excited for you to start posting the story :)
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Postby Mrs.Electric » Wed Jul 04, 2012 4:05 pm

Thanks! Well, Alice wasn't going to be young at first. But then she started acting more like one of my cousin's. My cousin is 11 though, so I bumped her age closer to one of the other characters. Hope that helped C:
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Postby Mrs.Electric » Mon Aug 06, 2012 1:34 pm

I Never Thought I Would Die Like This
Written By: Mrs.Electric


Prologue


I have been many places, and seen many things in my life time. It use to be difficult for me to say which of the places was my favorite, but now I have no doubt about it. Acindina Eden in the most magnificent place I have ever been. The meaning of its name is “safe paradise” even though most humans know it as Wonderland.Every where you look, it is everything you could ever want to see. Most of the landscape is different for each individual. One person may see a waterfall surrounded by flowers, another could see a field of wheat, or one might even see their childhood neighborhood. Whatever your heart loves it what you will see. You, the reader, can imagine your favorite place in the world while reading this.

However, notice how I said most of the landscape is different. There is about a fifty mile radius until the land is the same for everyone. On the outskirts of the area is forest of trees, with dark creatures hiding inside. Most people would think it is stupid to go into the forest, and leave the beauty, but it’s not stupid at all. Once you get through the forest, you will see that you are on an island with gorgeous white side, and clear blue water. If you follow the beach around the island, eventually you will come upon the castle of the princess. Her name is Filia, and she has run the kingdom ever since her father died when she was only ten years old. Now she is in her early twenty’s, but she still carries out her father’s work- finding the Talli.

Talli means “hero” in the world of Acindina Eden. The Talli all have a power and daemon that suits their personality. Daemons are animals that are attached to a Talli’s soul. If the Talli dies, so does the daemon. If the daemon dies, so does the Talli. Luckily for both of them, it is harder to kill a daemon than it would be to kill a mortal animal. Talli’s can die like a normal human, accept that they have powers to protect themselves, and even others around them.

The Talli are going instinct on the island, but there are still some left. Filia’s father use to look for Talli’s when he was alive. He searched in hopes of creating an army that was unstoppable. When Filia asked to help him, he was discusted to think that his daughter could ever be strong or wise enough to find humans so powerful. He had always wanted a son, and he was very disappointed the day his queen brought home a baby girl. When she grew to be the beauty she is, he died of sorrow. Even though he didn’t treat her well, Filia still wants to carry out his work and find all the Talli’s left in her kingdom.

I know all this because I have lived here for over half my life. I use to travel around the globe. I’ve seen all 7 wonders of the world, I’ve been to the Pyramids and the Great Wall of China. I’ve lived through what you know as History. I was there for the Boston Tea Party, both World War I and World War II, and everything else that was a big deal to the world.

You see, I am a spirit. My age is 753, and through all those years, I have never been seen. Today I write in a journal, telling the story of the Talli’s in Acindina Eden. I have followed and protected them throughout their journey, without them knowing. One day I hope that Filia will read this, and realize just how amazing her army truly is.

Remember that as a spirit, I can read people’s minds. So even though this will be from my points of view, I know exactly what they’re thinking. I’m not just guessing. Also, I have taken some journal entries from a few of the Talli’s, and I put them in my own journal to share their emotions with their own words.

Even though I know the Powers of the Talli, they don’t know their powers until the universe is ready for them to know. I will share their experience of figuring out what they’re power is with you when they experience it for themselves. Also, in a very rare case does a Talli not know that they have a daemon, but it does happen. The daemon will always know who it’s owner is, even if the owner doesn’t of their daemon. Usually the daemon will follow their owner until they are ready to meet each other, or until the daemon has to protect their owner. Sometimes a Talli will be in trouble and need rescuing, and the daemon will save them. After that, they must meet each other, and stay together.

If a Talli and it’s daemon are separated between thirty miles for more than an hour, they will both become weak and sickly, and die before the next sunrise. This is why Talli’s and daemons must stay together and fight beside each other. The connection between a Talli and a daemon is so strong that they can talk to each other. They are capable of speaking to each other through thoughts in their minds. They can also sense each others sadness and happiness, and they will share their emotions with each other. If one is happy, so is the other. If one is scared, so is the other.

When humans hunt down Talli, it is because the humans consider them the creation of the devil. When humans hunt down daemons, it is because they consider them a gift from heaven. No one on the island of Acindina Eden understands why, because they are all mystical creatures, not Humans.

No human has ever lived in Acindina Eden for more than a month. They are scared off by all the people who live here. There are creatures like Cyclopes, dragons, unicorns, fairy’s and mermaids that live in hiding in the forest and ocean. Centaurs, trolls, giants, elves, and satyrs walk the streets of the villages in Filia’s kingdom. Filia herself is a litteral Angel. Her mother was also, even though she died at child birth. Filia’s father was an physical Angel, but his soul was formed by the devil’s hands himself. Spirits also roam around here, but most do not stay. I am the only one who has stayed for over five years, and I hope it will stay that way for a very long time. Spirits don’t like each other, they aren’t impressed with one another. We are mostly attracted to things that we aren’t familiar with, and that is why I’ve stayed here- to find out more about this island.
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Postby Sʈɑrry Ɲɩght Skɩə » Mon Aug 06, 2012 2:18 pm

This seams like a very interesting story. I loved the His Dark Materials series so I hope this turns out well. With this start I bet it will be a great story.
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Postby Mrs.Electric » Mon Aug 06, 2012 3:08 pm

Thanks, I really appreciate it! I'm hoping to have the first chapter up by the end of the night. I'm not very far on it right now, but the idea's keep coming to me as I write. Hope you like it!
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Postby Mrs.Electric » Mon Aug 06, 2012 4:42 pm

Chapter One
Alice and the Cherry Tree

Thunder- Boys Like Girls


Alice Valarie and Kiwi Adams have been best friends since they were in Kindergarten. Now they are grown up, thirteen to be exact, and they have made it through thick and thin together. Both of them are orphans, and have no siblings. They use to wander through the woods alone, just the two of them, until they found out their abilities. Alice has the power to run faster than a jet plane at full speed. Even though she can’t run for a long amount of time, she can still use her powers to get away from something that could harm her. Kiwi has something called Apporation. She can make anything that she can lift appear in her hand or arms. She is the reason why the two young girls haven’t starved or frozen to death.

Even though they could survive, they felt weak. They heard the stories of what lived in the forest, and as twelve year old girls would be, they were scared- even with the company of their daemons, Alice a tabby cat named Violet and Kiwi a bearded collie Braden. One day they even though they were being attacked. However, it turns out that the attackers were people just like them. Their names are Zamora and Lamarcus, or Lamar for short. Zamora’s daemon is a chinchilla named Kathryn that rides on her shoulder, and Lamar’s daemon is a snow leopard named Declan that walks by his side. They are cousins, so Lamar’s power of seeing fifteen seconds into the future works better on her than it would if they weren’t related. He see’s blurs of the future with most people, but he can see everything very clearly when it involves her. Zamora’s power is to control fire. She’s not a mean person, but she has a fiery personality when you get to know her.

Alice and Kiwi are friends with Zamora almost immediately after they meet, but they have trouble warming up to Lamar. He’s the first boy they’ve met with powers, and he’s three years older than them, so they’re a little scared of him. Zamora is now fourteen and has known Lamar for a very long time, so she trusts him. It took Zamora almost a month to convince the girls to trust Lamar like she does. The four of them have been traveling together for the past year and a half, and they haven’t gotten into any major trouble so far.

“We should find a place to start a fire soon,” Zamora says to Lamar. “If we wait too long, it’ll be dark and we won’t be able to see where we’re going.”

Lamar shrugged and said, “Ladies?” looking at Kiwi and Alice. They both nodded in agreement, and followed Lamar into a cave. “Everybody get comfortable,” he “We may be here for awhile if this rain doesn’t clear up.”

Kiwi raised her eyebrows and asked, “What rain?” Just as she said that, thunder boomed, lightning struck, and rain started pouring down. She rolled her eyes and through gritted teeth said, “I hate it when you do that.” Lamar just smiled and threw his backpack on the floor of the cave, the three girls doing the same.

Zamora started a fire with ease, and got out her sleeping bag, laying it next to the warm flames. Kathryn hopped off her shoulder, and joined sleeping Violet. Declan sniffed Lamar’s backpack, then walked over to Violet and Kathryn and fell asleep.

“Are we safe in here?” Alice asked Lamar with scared and innocent eyes.

Lamar chuckled looking behind him at his Snow Leopard and answered, “With Declan here, I’m sure we’ll be fine.” Alice looked behind her, and then smiled as she turned back to Lamar.

He always knew what to say to the girls to calm them down, even though you wouldn’t guess he’d be the type of person to be good with that kind of stuff. When you first meet him, he’s rude and will always pick a fight. He’s very blunt and doesn’t care if he insults people, but if you’re close to him and on his good side, he’ll be nice and lay off with being so open with his opinion unless you ask for it. On the outside, well, don’t even get me started. He’s completely different from Zamora. He has black shaggy hair, with deep brown eyes, and clear skin. He’s almost six feet tall and has very broad shoulders. However, Zamora has wavy red hair that reaches her waist, bright green eyes, and a bridge of freckles across her nose. She’s barely over five foot, and she’s very thin- Lamar can wrap his pinky and thumb around her upper arm.

If you looked at the group, you’d notice that all of them are very different from each other. Alice is a few inches taller than Zamora, and has a runners body- made for her power. She has big blue eyes with long eyelashes, long almost golden hair, and an oval face. Kiwi is only a little shorter than Lamar, and is noticeably taller than Alice. She has long dark brown hair, deep hazel eyes and dark skin.

“Hey Kiwi?” Alice whispered.

“Yeah?” Kiwi whispered back.

“When do you think we’ll find our way back home?”

Kiwi sighed in despair. “Alice, I don’t think we have a home anymore.” She turned her head towards her best friend, and continued with the painful truth. “If we both randomly woke up here, we were obviously supposed to be here. Besides, we haven’t been able to go more than a few feet into the forest without running back out. If home is on the other side, there’s no way of through there- even with Lamar. I’m sorry Alice.”

Alice nodded saying she understood, and then said, “Do you think Zamora and Lamar have a home to go to?”

“Yes,” Lamar said sitting up. “We both do.” He looked at his sleeping cousin who’s snoring lightly. He then looked back at the girls, the shadow’s from the fire dancing on their faces. “But there’s no reason for us to go back. Both of our parents hate us. They know about our powers, and they don’t want anything like us near them. That’s why the two of us ran away. That’s why we’re not going back.” He lay back down and turned away from the girls.

Kiwi looked at him with sympathy and said, “I’m sorry Lama-“

“Just forget it,” he interrupted. “Forget it, and go to sleep.”

Kiwi and Alice both nodded and looked at each other. Kiwi fell asleep in an instant, while Alice stayed wide awake. Her eyes burned, but she couldn’t’ close them. She felt around next to her until she found Braden. She stroked his soft fur, and felt his breathing. Any other night, this would have soothed her and she would be in dream land in no time. But tonight was different. She could feel it. They’re in a cave, it’s a full moon, and it’s raining cats and dogs. She doesn’t know why she feels so unsafe, until she hears them. In perfect time with each other, a wolf and bear howling in the night. She’s heard them every full moon ever since her and Kiwi woke up here that night. She’s always thought of running towards the sound to find them, but never got the courage- until now.

She slowly got up out of bed, and walked to the opening of the cave. She walked towards her backpack, got out her rain jacket and boots, and put them on.

She looked at Braden and said, “Stay here. If I’m not back in fifteen minutes, wake up Lamar and lead him to me.” She was about to turn to leave, when she turned back to Braden and said in a very stern voice, “Do not leave the cave alone. If something happens to you, I couldn’t live with myself. Now promise me. Promise that you’ll wake up Lamar before searching for me.” He looked at her sadly with his puppy dog eyes, but nodded a promise. She smiled a thank you and turned towards the rain.

Walking to the opening of the cave, she could hear the wolf and bear still growling at the moon. She waited quietly, trying to figure out where the sound was coming from, and was close to giving up hope. Suddenly, lightning struck in the distance and she could see four figures. It was only a glance, but she knew it was the bear and wolf. The only question was what else was with them?

“Is it too dangerous to go out there, Braden?” She asked her loyal bearded collie. He pleaded with her to stay, but she was about to leave anyway, until the sound of the wild animals stopped. And it didn’t come back.
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Postby Mrs.Electric » Sun Sep 02, 2012 11:01 am

((Bump, next chapter coming up soon- I've been caught up with school stuff))
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