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Escape - A Book/Story by FairyPoeline

Postby Pangolin » Tue May 22, 2012 6:21 am

Alright, well, I've gotten back into writing after taking a break for a bit. I've decided that I'm going to start writing a book type thing and I work better if I post it on a Thread like this, because then I have people pushing me to do more and more. When I write, I rarely go back to edit out all the tiny problems,like a comma in the wrong place, or the wrong for of 'to'. If someone wants to go through and edit this as I write, I'd really appreciate it. If you're interested, send me a PM, I might even be willing to give some sort of payment. I'm also going to be looking for critique as I go on as well as suggestions as to better the book as I go on, but I wont stray far from my original plotline. Oh, and I'm also not set on a title yet, 'Escape' was just the first thing that popped into my head. Have suggestions for a better Title? Send me a PM. ^^'

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Escape - The Plotline

Postby Pangolin » Tue May 22, 2012 6:21 am

Don't want to know what happens? Don't read this Post!


Lux, a master assassin, lives in a futuristic setting. She lurks through the shadows and kills off the beasts of the night that have been created over the years. The vampires, werewolves, mutts and night walkers have been trying to get rid of the human race, by planning a rebellion against them. Lux and her group of master assassins must take out the night creatures before the rebellion can take over and kill off the human race. One night, Lux gets a solo mission to take out a head werewolf. As she scales into his smart building, his body guards capture her and decide to torture some answers out of her. Russel, better known as The alpha of the Northern Cape Pack, finds his wolves torturing her and demands she be freed. Lux finds herself strangely attracted to the werewolf, though it's been her life mission to slay them. As time goes on, Russel and Lux get closer and closer and began sneaking around behind the pack and the Assassin Guild. Lux's teams finds that she has been sneaking about with a werewolf and have no choice but to tell the Guild Master. The Guide Master orders that Lux and Russel be brought in. He orders Lux to kill him. Having fallen in love with each other, Lux refuses and she watched in horror as the Guild Master makes it his personal mission to kill Russel before her vary eyes. She tries to stop the GM but then finds herself in a high security prison. She has now learned the secret of the government and why they want the immortals banished from the world. When the rebellion sends planes to bomb the prison, Lux escapes back into the Outlands.

Looks like a lot to put into one book, right? Yeah, I know. the plotline will get tweaked and edited as I write.
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Escape - The History and Setting

Postby Pangolin » Tue May 22, 2012 6:22 am

The Setting of my Book, to help people get a better image of the world these people are living in.

The Destruction began when The Country turned against each other, every Country wanting to be on top. The world as a post-apocalyptic mess for years before a save haven for the survivors arose. As time went on, the survivors of The Destruction began to design a world where everyone was happy, everything was perfect and nothing of this sort would ever happen again. Years of planning, plotting and work brought life to the first City of perfection, simply called 'The City'. As time went on and more and more Cities were put up around the world, more and more people started to rebel against this 'perfect world' the government was trying to create. The nor-believers were banished to roam between the Outlands of the cities, living off the land scavenging for whatever they could use to survive. These people became known as 'Scavengers' and are frowned upon by the Government. Once you become a Scavenger, you can never go back to being a Citizen of the Cities. "Any Scavengers found in the cites are to be taken to Prisons and questions or, if they bring harm to the perfect world, they are to be killed as needed." - To quote The Book of The Cities. A book everyone might as well memorize, it's every single law, reason for the cities, the life people will live. It's like the Bible to the people of the Cities.

As time went on, the government was sure no Scavengers could still be around, because the Outlands were slowly getting more and more barren as the Cities expanded. Little did the Government know, The Scavengers, preferably called 'Rebels' due to lack of a better name and their purpose, had infiltrated the Cities and were working form the inside to turn the government upside down, as well as help the Rebels on the outside of the city walls.

By now, the government is happy with the world they had made, until a problem arose. Rouge Scientists, were making these strange mutations to normal humans, as they tried to create a super species of people. The Government quickly tried to put a cap on these things the Scientists had been making, not knowing that these thing also lived naturally, due to radiation poisoning from the Destruction years and years before. Vampires, Werewolves, Mutts, Nightwalkers. They live secretly, among the Humans and help the Rebels with the Rebellion, due to the fact that they are now being hunted.

In the year 3025, it has been discovered that there are people who have a sixth sense, a sense to detect mutations to DNA. In other words, there are people who are able to sense Vampires, werewolves and other creatures. These people were taken in by the government and given a very special mission. Take out any and every Beast that walks the streets with the normal people of the cities.

Luxus, an orphan from the Outlands finds herself and her best friend, Hunter in the middle of the Northern Cape City with the ability to sense these 'Beasts'. The government finds them quickly and begins to train the five-year-old girl and seven-year-old boy with a group of kids who also have the ability. They are trained in the fine art of how to kill each and every beast they will encounter.


The year is now 3040 and the government has advanced in technology. They now have 'smart' technology. Buildings that can sense people, bridges who only allow specified people across, vehicles that hover above the ground with magnetic waves, and of course, robots who can do the things simple humans can't.

Of course, The government only lets people be together if they allow it, and people can only have children if they have been okayed. We wouldn't want any freaks, mutations or stupid kids in out perfect society, would we? But, there are people who disapprove of this - such as the vampires and werewolves, who go about and do what they want with who they want, always creating more and more flaws in the face of the perfect society.

Now, you can kind of get a feel for what's happened and how things work.
Also, since this hasn't been completely ironed out, this may confuse you and change. But, got a question about something? Send me a PM, I don't mind. There may be other people who don't understand and that way I can make things more clear. Since I suck at explaining things when I write. XD
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Escape - The Characters - Still Editing

Postby Pangolin » Tue May 22, 2012 6:22 am

Full Name: Luxus(Lu-cex-us) Hayben(Hay-been)
Nickname(s): Lux
Gender: Female
Age: 20
Weapon of Choice: A dagger,with a black blade and silver hilt with mysterious carvings in it.
Specialty: Stealth
Appearance:
Hair: She has long blonde hair, that she keeps pinned up most of the time.
Eyes: Large, unnaturally green eyes, which she disguises with lens when she's on a mission.
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Full Name: Hunter Xaine(Zane)
Nickname(s): Hunt, but only Lux calls him that
Gender: Male
Age: 22
Weapon of Choice: He prefers his prototype 'Star Gun'. A gun, which takes the general essence of a star and turns it into a bullet like projectile. It, can also shoot out a burst of flame.
Specialty: Weapon specialist
Appearance:
Hair: Dark brown hair which he leaves shaggy and kind of long
Eyes: He has dark blue eyes
General:

Full Name: Bo Burck(Brrr-kuh)
Nickname(s): Just Bo
Gender: Male
Age: 23
Weapon of Choice: A silver bladed sword with a black hilt. It's like the opposite of Lux's dagger.
Specialty: Strength
Appearance:
Hair: Dark red hair that he keeps shaggy like Hunter, but shorter.
Eyes: He's got chocolate brown eyes
General:

Full Name: Tacka(Tok-uh) Miskin(Miss-kin)
Nickname(s): Mainly goes back Tak and Indian Jones
Gender: Male
Age: 25
Weapon of Choice: A silver, electrified whip.
Specialty: Intelligence
Appearance:
Hair: Short cut black hair
Eyes: Hazel eyes with soft flex of dark brown in them
General:

Full Name: Raylynn Black
Nickname(s): Only goes by Raven and nothing else.
Gender: Female
Age: 21
Weapon of Choice: Prefers hand-to-hand combat
Specialty: Disguise and trickery
Appearance:
Hair: Long black hair, that almost goes down to her waist.
Eyes: She has natural golden eyes, almost like a cat, without the silted pupil
General:

Full Name: Fawna Burck(Brrr-kuh)
Nickname(s): Fawn and Bambi
Gender: Female
Age: Almost 20
Weapon of Choice: The bow and arrow
Specialty: Stealth and her sight gives her an advantage
Appearance:
Hair: Short soft brown hair that she never lets grow past her shoulders.
Eyes: Ocean blue eyes.
General:
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Escape - Extra Post

Postby Pangolin » Tue May 22, 2012 6:22 am

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Escape - Prologue

Postby Pangolin » Tue May 22, 2012 6:23 am

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Escape - Prologue


Run.
Run.
Run.
Blonde hair flew out from behind her as she ran through the streets, her old sneakers squeaking against the wet pavement. She ran as fast as her short legs could carry her, "Stop! Scavenger!" Snarled the Uniforms as the chased after her. She hugged the bundle closer to her chest as she neared the Border to the Outlands. She needed to get over the fence and into safety before the Uniforms caught up to her, "Stop! Or we fire!" Screeched the other Uniform form behind her as she raced past one of the Towers, signaling that she was close to the Border.

"This way, Luxus!" Hollered a familiar voice and she quickly jerked as she made a sharp turn. The black figure waved her close to the Border, where they had picked a small enough hole that it would be undetected by the Uniforms. The Uniforms drew their weapons and began to fire toward the young girl and the dark shadow. Back-up moved in quickly and one of the Uniforms got hold of the girl's hood. She twisted, choking in the grasp.

Another Scavenger broke away from the border to save the young girl, getting hit in the process by one of the Uniforms. the girl twisted away and ran for the other Scavenger who had been hit, "Kane!" She screamed, only to get jerked toward the Border by another Scavenger, "No! Kane!" She screamed as she was trust through the hole in the fence.

"Run Lux!" The fallen man cried as he was tackled to the ground by a Uniform, vanishing under the dark blue suits they wore. She started to call out tot he man but she was ushered into silence as another Scavenger put a hand over her mouth and pulled her along as they ran through the Outlands, back toward the Camp they called home.

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She jerked into a sitting position, choking and gasping for air as the dream replayed over and over in her head, "Lux. What the hell?" Growled a female voice form the other side of the dark room. At the sound of voices and sensing motion, the room quickly flicked on the lights, "Gah!" The female on the other side of the room covered her eyes and rolled over, "Again, Lux? Third night in a row." She grumbled, then piped up, "Goodnight, Room!"

"Goodnight, Ladies." The robotic voice chirped back and the lights died out once again.

"Sorry." Lux whispered into the darkness and as wiped the sweat from her face. She stared down at the flashing light from the Smart Ring on her finger, keeping track of everything that had to do with her. She ran her hands over her face and into her hair, tying to calm herself from the dreams of her past that still haunted her.

She threw her legs over the side of her bed and slid her ring off her finger, tossing it onto the bed so the room and building couldn't sense her moment. She drew her dark sweater over her head and quickly slipped into the hall, going to the only person who could help her. Hunter was the only one who had been there with her when it all happened and he seemed to be the only one who could calm her when she had one of these dreams from the past.
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