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Before I make the sequel, would you mind if it was from Northstar or a different cat? Which cat?

Poll ended at Fri Jan 04, 2013 12:34 am

Northstar
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14%
Different cat...but I don't know which cat
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43%
Different cat (pm or post cat)
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Different cat that we haven't met (yes, there are some)
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29%
(Don't vote for this, it's so I can see the results)
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Total votes : 7

The Last Hope | Warriors Fan-Fic | OPEN~Comments & Critique

Postby Fichester » Mon May 07, 2012 3:02 am

On a high peek, in the falling snow, sat a plump silver she-cat. Her long, willowy fur was blowing around her in the wind. She looked over the land that stretched before her. On the horizon she could see the water of the ocean sparkling in the moonlight. As she watched, patches of cloud continued to cover and uncover the moon, which had hung in the sky for days on end.
"It's not going to get better, you know." A voice rasped. The cat whirled around, happiness and longing glowing in her gaze. Before her stood a white tom. Stars were glowing in his pelt, which appeared to be soaked through his spirit was far from water.
"Wolfcall," she whispered, paddign towards him. "I've prayed for days and nights to see you once more." She seemed stiff, as if pain was throbbing through her. Her breaths were rapid and shallow, showing she was brely able to handle seeing this tom.
Wolfcall rested his muzle on her head, and she shivered as she felt cold water dripping down her face, through she couldn't see any water trickling down her muzzle. "I should've protected you." she whimpered.
"No, Northstar, no. It is not you fault." Wolfcall said firmly, taking his muzzle of her head and looking in her blue eyes.
"But, if I was with you, you wouldn't have drowned!" Northstar wailed quietly. She pressed her silver pelt against his starry white pelt and stared into his glowing gold eyes. "And we wouldn't be alone."
"You never will be alone. I'm always with you and our kits." Wolfcall promised. He was backing away and his pelt was fading. "The res t the land is gone. We are all that's left. The sun's protecter has disappeared, leaving the moon stuck in the sky. The ocena is rising, the land is breaking. You must lead them to safety, you must find the life."
Northstar stared where he was long after he disappeared. She knew the words of tradgedy he spoke were true. Shortly after cats discovered the seperate masses of land in the ocean, the world fell apart. Only one island remained, and it was being eaten alive.
The twolegs were all but gone. The rising tide was eatign away at the land. Volcanoes were erupting and burnign away everything in the vicinity. Hurricanes and tornadoes were destorying the forests. There wasn't much left.
There were Clans scattered the land. Northstar's entire Clan, ArcticClan, was scattered. They lost faith, and left. Many of the traitors were killed. Though who remained, died.
But, Northstar was still alive, and Northstar still had faith. Wolfcall, and the rest or the rapidly growing StarClan, put it in her paws to protect any cat she could find, whether they believed in StarClan or not.
"I will keep my promise."



Warriors (C) Erin Hunter

No, I did not name this after the last book in "Omen of the Stars". No, this does not involve the last book in "Omen of the Stars". It is a coincidence that the last book in that series is called "The Last Hope" just like this.
WARNING: "The Cast" section of this story may reveal spoilers. Read the description at your own risk. "The Cast" page will always be updating to keep up with the current point of the story, and every cat mentioned in this story will be on that page. Most things on "The Cast" page will be revealed later in the story, so you do not need to read the descriptions of the cats. When this has been finished, I will post what hasn't been mentioned in it, so you may uncover all the secrets.


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Re: The Last Hope

Postby redkuchen » Mon May 07, 2012 3:14 am

That is awesome more!!!!!!
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The Cast

Postby Fichester » Fri May 11, 2012 11:32 pm

~Northstar~

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Northstar is a hard-driven she-cat. She was once leader of ArcticClan, but as North America, the last continent, started falling apart, most of her Clan lost faith and abandoned her. She ran off after them, knowing if they escaped over the mountains they'd die. She left Wolfcall, her mate, in charge while she was gone. She found all of them were dead, killed in an avalanche. When she got back, all the cats she had left were killed by a tsunami. All the bodies had been swept out to see, but she found Wolfcall, dieing, clutching to a rock near the higher-than-normal tide. He told her what happened, before a wave snatched him away. Northstar did find 6 survivors, two patrols that had been far inland when the tsunami hit. StarClan has convinced her she must brave the mountains in order to save herself, her 6 surviving clanmates, and her soon-to-be born kits. Guided by Wolfcall, she is willing to put everything on the line to find a safe haven.

~Wolfcall~

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Wolfcall is a wise tom. He was once a warrior of ArcticClan and was driven by a love for it's leader, Northstar. He laid everything down for her to the very end. As North America fell apart, most cats of ArcticClan lost faith in Northstar and StarClan and ran off. Northstar went after them, levaing him in charge. Then a tsunami killed all but 7 cats, including himself. Powerless and on teh brink of death, Wolfcall held onto a boulder and prayed he wouldn't die. Northstar found him and he only had enough time to tell her what happened before he was swept out to sea. The first StarClan meetign he attened was to the matter of Northstar and the tsunami survivors. He volunteered immediatly to lead Northstar.

~Icecloud~

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Icecloud is a sweet she-cat. She was on a hunting patrol when the tsunami struck. She was with Talonclaw and Rabbitcatch. When they got back to find what was there, they ran back into the brush. Her and Rabbitcatch tried to pretend none of this had happened, but Talonclaw didn't really allow that. He kept telling them over and over that the Clan was dead and Northstar had abandoned them. But Icecloud didn't believe it. She knew the Clan was gone, but held out hope for Northstar. Icecloud is still haunted by what she saw that day; an empty beach, claw marks on rocks, and bloodstaines the tide couldn't wash away. Ever since that day, Icecloud has been subject to ominous dreams and visions, and has had keen senses. Her shyness was washed away, like her Clan, and she spills out prophecys that, if listened to and understood, could just tell Northstar what she has to do.

~Birdsong~

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Birdsong is a leader-like she-cat. She was leading a border patrol when the tsunami struck. They never knew what happened, but they found Northstar and met up with her again after she returned. Not believing her, Birdsong insisted that she went back and had a look, and Tigersnap and Runningleap agreed. They were able not to panic, but did go franticly searching for other patrols where the found Rabbitcatch, Talonclaw, and Icecloud. Birdsong has always had a dream of becoming deputy, but she knows that Talonclaw is trying to go for it with deadly concentration.














~Runningleap~

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Runningleap is a spitfire young cat. She was with Birdsong and Tigersnap when the tsunami hit. She didn't take much noticed to Northstar's solem return, for she had expected that the betrayers had died. She also didn't noticed Northstar scrambling back towards them. Infact, she was so care-free that she was chasing after a butterfly until she heard everyone was dead. Then started being overcome by shock and demanded she see it for herself. But that day is long gone for her. She still happy-go-lucky, but maybe it's because that one day is a place she dare not go?




~Rabbitcatch~

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Rabbitcatch is a spunky tom. He loves to run, leap, climb, hunt, and play. He was with Talonclaw and Icecloud on a hunting patrol when the tsunami hit. They ran back to the forest, and Rabbitcatch was scared to death. He was just a new warrior, along with Runningleap and his brother Thrushtail. Icecloud tried to confort him, but Talonclaw was no help at all. This sweet little tom was scarred for life. When they met up with Northstar and the other patrol, he now knew for sure that Thrushtail was dead. Only one thign kept him sane, spitfire Runningleap. He had always been in love with her. But now he's to afraid to love her, afraid the tide will take her away from him too.







~Talonclaw~

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Talonclaw is a dark-hearted tom. He knows, what he wants. Talonclaw was one of the cats who lost faith in Northstar. He was going to leave, but when he couldn't convince his brother Tigersnap to come, he stayed. He was leaving Tigersnap and his apprentice Runningpaw behind. He was with Rabbitcatch and Icecloud on a hunting patrol when the tsunami hit. He was horrified what the found on the beach, but when they went back into the forest, he got annoyed by Rabbitcatch freaking out and Icecloud trying to confort him. He was cold-hearted, because he thought the border patrol got back and Tigersnap and Runningleap had been killed. Of course he cared for his brother, but he had a crush on Runningleap that everyone but Runningleap herself could see. hE's never been nice to Rabbitcatch, knowing how close he is with Runningleap.





~Tigersnap~

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Tigersnap is a brave and loyal warrior. When Talonclaw wanted to leave, he tried to convince him to stay. When he couldn't, he told his brother taht he was staying, no matter where he went. And so was Runningpaw. That got his brotehr to stay. He was hunting with Runningleap and Birdsong when the tsunami hit. He somewhat wanted to see Northstar to the camp, to make sure she was safe, but Northstar didn't even wait to see if someone would escort her. When Northstar came back and told them what happened, he didn't want to go back, but decided to go along with Birdsong, Runningleap, and Northstar, not wanting to be left out there alone. He's still nervous abotu going over the mountains, but his strogn belief in StarClan pushes him on.

~Snaketalon~

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Snaketalon is a hard-driven she-cat. She was from RockClan, the Clan that lived in the Valley. Before the disaster that killed all but 9 other survivors, plus the 4 that were to far away to be affected, she was deputy. She was loyal, brave, friendly, and understanding. She was also in love with her leader, Oakstar. But after the Clan fell, she became unfriendly, stubborn, ill-tempered, sharp-tounged, and determined to save what was left of her Clan.










~Foxtrap~

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Foxtrap is a spunky, arrogant, brave young tom. He was a brand new warrior when RockClan fell. He never seemed to take notice to the disasters that happened. His personality never changed, and he still had the same goal-become deputy. He always hated kittypets, and was never friendly to Ozzy, Oliver, and Cleo. But he did try to save Cleo's life in the wolf attack, shoving her ahead and being taken himself. But it was in vain, because they got her too.














~Longfang~

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Longfang is a stubborn, ill-tempered, sharp-tounged, and arrogant old she-cat. She's rather strong for her age. She was considering to retire to the elders den, when the accident brought down RockClan. After that, she knew she had to do everything it took to prove to the remaining RockClan cats that she was strong. She was the first to be killed by the wolves.

~Leopardpaw~

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Leopardpaw was the braver one between her and her brother Cactuspaw. She was determined, stubborn, yet friendly deep down. She always stood up for what she believed in, and always defended her brother, even if she agreed he did something wrong. She was a RockClan apprentice, and was always keeping Cactuspaw in place. During the flood, the debris she shared with her brother started to break, and she shoved Cactuspaw onto the larger half, and her piece was destroyed completely. Cactuspaw tried to save her, but a large branch came up from behind her and swept her under the waves, never to be seen again.






~Cactuspelt~

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Cactuspelt was a spunky, playful, brave, determined, happy-go-lucky young tom. His sister, Leopardpaw, always had to keep him in line, even after RockClan was wiped out. The demise of RockClan didn't affect him that much, and he always was able to shake off tradgedys like that without it dragging him down. But when Leopardpaw saved him, killing herself in the process, he hasn't been the same. He's quiet, friendly, obedient, and kind. He's taken the responsibility of watching out for Larkpaw and Cinderpaw. He doesn't know why, but Larkpaw is always in the back of his mind.




~Darkmask~

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Darkmask was a brave, stubborn, rather unfriendly tom. He had determination to blaze all the way through the ranks of his Clan to become leader. Snaketalon always questioned his loyalty. She knew that Foxtrap wanted to be leader too, but not like this. He was killed in the fire and rain storm. He knows he'll always be thought of as the cat who's loyalty might not be as firm as it seems. Though the one cat he loved, Bluelight, never doubted his loyalty, everyone else in RockClan did.
















~Bluelight~

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Bluelight was a gentle, kind, and understanding. She hated fighting, and was always trying to think of a way to talk things out. She always was keeping her mate, Darkmask, from leaping into battle. Her brother, Oakstar, was the only cat he left alone. She also died in the fire and rain storm.





















~Snowpatch~

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Snowpatch is a quiet, reserved she-cat. She shared a close bond with her brother, Ravencall, that can't be broken. Not even by her death. Snowpatch died in the avalanche, which was caused by a volcanic eruption. Since it was only shortly after the survivors of RockClan and ArcticClan joined together, she never knew how it would work out. She was optimistic about it. She was sucessful in her attempt to save her brother, but unable to save herself too. There's more than one reason why she did everything in her power to save Ravencall. First of all, they were siblings. She would loose her life for him in a heartbeat. But also, because he is the moon.















~Ravencall~

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Ravencall is a quiet, reserved, friendly tom; just like his sister Snowpatch. Even though they'd do anything for eachother, there was an unspoken pact between them. When in danger, and only one can live, make sure it's Ravencall. This was because he is the moon. He's kept it a secret from everyone. When Snowpatch was to go with the patrol to investigate the safe haven Heatherfur recieved an Omen about, she took the blood necklace with her and hid it there. He didn't realize that this would mean he had no control over the disasters that would destroy ArcticClan, and allow the Valley's disasters to run oot of control. He never found out the location of the blood necklace, and since she died, he's been hunting solo whenever he can, so he can try to find the necklace. He also has a crush on Icecloud, even when she starts acting...what he can only describe as, strange.

~Owleye~

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Owleye is a loyal, brave, playful, and friendly tom. He always tries to take care of his clanmates, and helps Northstar by keeping an eye out for Larkpaw and Cinderpaw. He was one of the few cats that were in camp when RockClan was destoryed. He's never been good at keeping secrets, and he always trys to think about what he could do in situations before he reacts. He has a crush on Northstar, and always trys to keep an eye out for her as well as her kits. His body was found at the drop-off. His death is still unknown.














~Cleo~

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Cleo is a friendly and brave she-cat. She was a kittypet and shared an abandoned twoleg nest with Oliver, Ozzy, and Angel. She always found herself as the one who kept the peace. She even had to stop Oliver a couple of times. There has only been one time when she couldn't get her friends to see reason, and that's when Angel leaped off the roof of the twoleg nest onto debris in one of the floods. She always blamed herself that Angel died, and swore she'd do anything to protect Oliver and Ozzy. In the wolf attack, she tried to save Oliver, but both of them were caught.





~Oliver~

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Oliver is a happy-go-lucky cat. He was always the nicest kittypet between himself, Cleo, Ozzy, and Angel. He always would play-fight with Cleo and Ozzy, but fighting could never stay tame between him and Angel. It was always a mystery on why Oliver and Angel were bitter enemies. Oliver died in the wolf attack, along with Cleo.













~Ozzy~

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Ozzy is a playful, friendly tom. Though he loves to kid around, he can act serious and focused in situations needed. He's a former kittypet. He used to live in a twoleg nest with Cleo, Oliver, and Angel. He was in love with Angel, and was crushed when she abandoned them, and when they found her when she was killed by a fox. Other than Cleo and Oliver, who were there, Northstar is the only cat that knows about Angel. And since Cleo and Oliver died in the wolf attack, he's been rather quite, focused, depressed, and lonely. Northstar is the only cat who tries to consol him, but he's keeping her, and every other cat, at an icy distance.

~Angel~

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Angel was a stubborn, ill-tempered, insulting she-cat. She was unfriendly and rather rude. She put up with Cleo, but the "play-fights" between her and Oliver always turned violent. She had been born a stray, but when the twolegs found her as a kit they took her to the Valley, to live with a family. She hated all of them when she first came. But she slowly came to terms with Cleo and Ozzy. And she had to admit, she was starting to crush on Ozzy. But then came the flood. She was sick of having to jump onto the roof like a kit, and she still wanted to escape the kittypet nest. So she took her chance, and jumped onto the debris. She had looked back at the roof, expecting (and slightly hoping) Ozzy would follow her. She was crushed when he didn't, how he just watched her float away. Once the flood waters died down, Angel almost simulateously ran into a hungry fox, and she didn't stand a chance.

~Oakstar~

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Oakstar was the leader of RockClan, but was killed in the disaster. Sometimes you can hear Snaketalon mention his name once or twice. He always knew his Clan was suffering from the Valley's disaster, so when Meadowflower suggested that they send a group of cats to search for a new place to stay. Snaketalon hated the idea. She was always going on how this would only hurt the Clan. When they came back, knowing a place, Snaketalon was furious and barely spoke with Oakstar. She made no argument, or any comments, about it when he sent Heatherfur, along with Thrushfeather, Meadowflower, and Cloudshadow, to see if there enough herbs there. She eventually exploded, hissing horrbile things at Oakstar ahd saying he was killing his own Clan, sending three warriors and his medicine cat away. He was oblivious to the fact that Snaketalon loved him, because Meadowflower was his mate. She was one of the four cats that weren't there when the disaster occured. He realized he should have listened to her only when all but 10 members of his Clan, lead by Snaketalon, escaped.





~Larkpaw~

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Larkpaw is a playful, brave, spunky, defiant young she-cat. She's never serious, and pretends to be afraid of nothing, though even she falls victim to the horrors of the Valley. Larkpaw is Northstar and Wolfcall's kit. She usually bugs her brother, Cinderpaw, with always trying to get him to play with her. She also teases him by saying her has a crush on Heatherfur, and calls him "the cat with silver claws". She doesn't want to make him feel bad, she just likes to mess with him about Heatherfur and his silver claws. She also likes to mess with Cactuspelt, and always loves it when he agrees to play with her when Cinderpaw refuses. Larkpaw was there when Owleye died, and she knows the means of his mysterious death.




~Cinderpaw~

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Cinderpaw is a defiant, serious, stubborn, sharp-tounged young tom. He's not very friendly and is rather rude, though he always watches what he says when he refuses to play with Larkpaw or when she teases him, so he doesn't hurt her feelings. He's always glad to have Cactuspelt around, since he can always get Larkkit to play with him when he doesn't want to. Ever since he met Heatherfur, he's been fascinated with being a Medicine cat and StarClan, and always tries to help her out. He's glad that he has the excuse that he's got medicine cat duties too. He's the only one who knows what happened to Thrushfeather, Meadowflower, and Cloudshadow.














~Thrushfeather~

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Thrushfeather was a member of RockClan. He was one of the cats chosen to go with Heatherfur to their new territory. Though no one knows this, they was murdered by a cat, not a horror of the Valley. He was killed, along with Meadowflower and Cloudshadow, on the way back to RockClan.









~Meadowflower~

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Meadowflower was a warrior of RockClan, and was Oakstar's mate. She never knew Snaketalon loved Oakstar, and was always hurt by her hate. She was one of the cats chosen to go with Heatherfur to their new territory. She was murdered by a cat, alongside Thrushfeather and Cloudshadow, on the way back to RockClan.









~Cloudshadow~

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Cloudshadow was a senoir warrior of RockClan, and was one of the chosen cats to escort Heatherfur to the new territory. He helped Heatherfur escaped before the cat that killed Thrushfeather and Meadowflower got to him when they were heading back to RockClan.

























~Heatherfur~

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Heatherfur was the medicine cat of RockClan. She insisted that she needed to go to the new territory to check if there are the right herbs there. She still wakes up screaming at night for her clanmates to run; for Cloudshadow to turn around, having nightmares from the attack on that night when they were heading back to RockClan. She's only told one cat that a cat murdered Cloudshadow, Thrushfeather, and Meadowflower. Sometimes the nightmares get to her, so she's glad to have Cinderpaw around to set her mind straight. Cinderpaw is the one that knows.











~Bless~

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~Jabber~

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Icecloud found him on the shore. It's unknown how he found the crystal necklace, and how he knew who the sun cat was. That's all that is known about him.
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Chapter 1

Postby Fichester » Thu May 17, 2012 11:29 pm

Northstar padded down the mountain. She half-slid half-fell onto a ledge. "Northstar!" a white she-cat with black tabby stripes bounded over to her. "You alright?" she asked, her amber eyes full of concern.
"I'm fine Birdsong." Northstar assured her. "Do you think the others are ready to go?" Birdsong looked at the five other cats, her eyes specifically falling on a young golden tabby tom, then back at her leader.
"I don't know if Rabbitcatch is up to it. He wrenched his shoulder pretty badly." Northstar nodded, then looked at the young tom. He still had a slight limp, but a rust-colored tabby was helping him. "But," Birdsong brought her attention back. "We shouldn't wait in one spot for too long. Every second we spend here, is a better chance there'll be a disaster." Northsat nodded thoughtfully.
"He's had time to recover. Plus, he has Runningleap." Northstar realized she sounded defensive, but was glad when Birdsong didn't mention it. She just nodded. Birdsong bounded off to wake up a white she-cat who was curled up under a rocky outcropping. "Alright everyone!" she called.
Northstar would normally call them together as ArcticClan, but the pain of what happened to the rest of them was still to real. Plus, it was too heavy for Northstar, for she knew they were approaching the place where the cats that had lost faith had been killed in an avalanche. Northstar still held out hope some cats had made it, but she doubted it. Birdsong padded over with the white she-cat, Rabbitcatch slightly resting on Runningleap came over, then from the edge of the mountain ledge came two brown tabby toms.
"Sorry to wake you Icecloud." Northsatr meowed sympathetically. The white she-cat dipped her head. "Alright, we're going to head off. We've almost made it to the top, meaning we're halfway through the danger.
"Plus there is suppossed to be an abandoned twoleg nest at the bottom of the mountain we can shelter in!" Runningleap added, mostly directed to her injured clanmate.
"StarClan willing. Tigersnap, Talonclaw," Northstar turned her attention to the two tabbys, "you'll bring up the rear." The two nodded. Nirthstar turned and with a flick of her tail started to bound from rock to rock, slipping a few times. She frequently looked back, but with Birdsong and Icecloud to lead him, Runningleap to support him, and Talonclaw and Tigersnap to catch him, she was sure Rabbitcatch would make it.
Eventually they made it to the highest peek. They stopped and looked down. "The Valley of the Kings," she heard Birdsong murmur. The valley they looked into was known as the Valley of the Kings, mostly because the animals that could survive there were worthy to be kings. Northstar turned to look at what remained of ArcticClan.
"We will be kings!" Northstar yowled.
"To the Valley of the Kings!" Her Clan yowled. Northstar joined in, raising their voices to StarClan.
"Hey!" The cats froze. They looked at one another as a wave pf silence smashed down on them. "Up there!" the voice came again. Finally Northstar broke the standoff. She whirled around and looked in the direction of the voices. Suddenly more cats appeared, at least ten, at the edge. A ginger tom looked ack at them triumphantly and stated "I told you there would be cats!"
"I geuss you were right Foxtrap." A calico she-cat meowed. Foxtrap! These cats were warriors! "Who are you?" The calico asked.
"I'm Northstar." she meowed. "The black tabby is Birdsong, the white she-cat is Icecloud, the rusty tabby is Runningleap, the golden tom is Rabbitcatch, the long haired tom is Talonclaw, and the brown tabby is his brother Tigersnap." she introduced her six clanmates.
"I'm Snaketalon and this is Foxtrap." the calico meowed. "Longfang is the long-haird golden tabby. Leopardpaw is the spotted she-cat. Cactuspaw is the spikey tom. Darkmask is the black tom. The grey she-cat is Bluelight. Snowpatch is the grey and white cat. Ravencall is the black and white tom and Owleye is the rusty tabby."
"Nice to meet you." Northstar meowed formally. "What are you doing here?"
"Our Clan's dead!" Cactuspaw blurted out before Longfang could close his jaws. Snaketalon gave the apprentice a look but nodded.
"We are the only ones left. We came to see if any cats were left."
"Our Clan was killed off as well. We are looking to make a home in the Valley of the Kings." Northstar replied.
"What if we joined eachother!" Foxtrap suggested. "We could be, um, we could be... LightClan! Yeah! Since we met under the Northern Lights!" Northstar looked up and realized it he was right. Night had fallen and the lights were dancing in the sky.
"I don't know about LightClan, but we'd be willing to join you."
"Then it looks like we got a deal." Snaketalon meowed.

They had been travelling all night, and still they hadn't reached the valley. Northstar was still burstign with energy, wanting to get to the valley as soon as she could. "How much longer are you going to have us treck across seasons worth of rock before you let us take a break?" Longfang complained. Northstar sighed.
"We'll stop here." Northstar meowed. Most of the cats collapsed onto the ground once she said that. Northstar realized how worn out the cats were. Rabbitcatch was panting, and both him and Runningleap had scrapes from stumbling so many times. Leopardpaw and Cactuspaw clearly had strained their muscles to be walking so long. Even Talonclaw, Tigersnap, Birdsong, and Owleye were wiped out. Northstar knew they were the ones who could handle the most.
''May I speak wth you Northstar?" She turned to see Icecloud. Northstar nodded and the two she-cats padded away from the cats as they fell asleep.
"Oh, Darkmask, can you keep watch? You can wake someone else at moonhigh." Northstar called. Darkmask looked up and reluctantly found a place to keep watch. Northstar and Icecloud padded behind a stretch of raised rock, where the would be concealed from the rest of the Clan. "What's wrong?"
"You know nothing about the Valley of the Kings." Icecloud stated. Northstar didn't object. Icecloud lashed her tail in frustration. "You're pushing them too hard!"
"I realize I should pace myself but-"
"That's not what I mean." Icecloud meowed, claming down.
"Then what do you-"
"It takes longer to go down then it does to come up."
"How is that possible?" Northstar inquired. It discouraged her when Icecloud shrugged.
"Why do you think all the survivors of the Clan that came from the Valley survived coming up? Why do you think the traitors made it up the mountain but were wiped out by an avalanche almost immediately on the other side? Why do you think the Valley of the kings is the most dangerous place in North America?"
"I, uh, I-"
"The mountains protect the Valley from the growing tide," Icecloud stated. "But without the Northern Lights to protect them, the Moon may do as it wishes. Including make thoose who travel into the Valey of the Kings pay for protection." Northstar started at the white warrior, surprised. "Just keep that in consideration." Northstar watched as Icecloud padded back towards the rest of the Clan.
Northstar padded after her then leaped onto of the stretch of rock. "You can rest Darkmask. I'll keep watch. I'll wake you up if I think I can sleep." Darkmask nodded gratefully then bounded down and curled up with his sister, Snowpatch. Northstar looked at Icecloud, their puzzling "conversation" flahsing back in her mind. Maybe she's right.
Icecloud was wiped out herself. She had already fell asleep next to Birdsong and Tigersnap. All of them were wiped out. Except Northstar. But now, she was scared to keep moving, instead of being scared to stay. She looked up at the Northern Lights, which still danced in the sky.
Unlike now, the North Lights only flashed in the tundra. But now the Aurora Borealis lit up the entire Northern Hemisphere, staying in the sky longer. The whole of the Southern Hemisphere was filled with the Aurora Australis, but there was no one there to see it. Northstar had always wondered about the world ever since the cats discoverednthere were other masses of land. She never thought the anwser would be proposed to her by Icecloud. Northstar peiced together.
The Northern Lights is what protected us. Wolfcall told me the sun spirit abandoned the Aurora Borealis and Aurora Australis. Before, they could keep the world safe from just the North and South Poles. But they needed the sun spirit. She started remembering more about what Wolfcall told her.
The sun spirit was on Earth, in the form of an animal, to keep a tab on breaches in protection. But they needed the crystal necklace; a loose, thin collar with hawk talons hanging on the end with a blue crystal clutched in it. It gave the sun spirit the power to keep the world safe yet remain on the planet. But, the last sun spirit, was done with it. He threw the crystal necklace in the ocean, and ran. He abandoned not only his duty, but the planet.
After that, the lights stretched over the planet, trying to protect it, but all it did was keep the disasters form happening right after another. The sun spirit duty was still passed on, but not being told their duty, they are oblivious to the fact they can stop the madness. The moon spirit, with the blood necklace, which was the same thing as the crystal necklace but with a blood red crystal instead of a blue one, only wants peace. But he can't help the cause, for he causes the disasters, but doesn't know he is the moon spirit, and can't stop it.
Wolfcall said it was up to her to find the current sun spirit, whether it be a cat or a bear or a horse, or some other animal, then get a hold of the crystal necklace, restoring peace.
The terms she never understood, now made sense. The pieces that seemed useless, not fit into the puzzle, and it felt like there was a huge weight on her shoudlers. Northstar then noticed something out of place in the lights; a lighter colroed feline shape with brighter glowing eyes. Wolfcall!
"Is this what I must do?" Northstar asked.
Wolfcall nodded then faded.
"You won't want me to fail."
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Chapter 2

Postby Fichester » Sat May 19, 2012 9:33 am

Northstar was running through a forest. She was panting hard, yet still running as if she slowed just a bit for a moment she'd condem herself to death. She was crashing through the forest, but her enemy made absolutely no noise. She then felt something force their wieght onto her shoulders, forcing her to flip around in the dust with a white tom. "Wolfcall!" Northstar gasped, mrrowing with laughter. She laid on her back, her StarClan mate pinning her to the ground.
Then smoke wafted into her nose. "Wolfcall! What is, is StarClan on fire?"
Northstar then leaped to her paws. "It was just a dream." She looked around and saw the rest of the Clan was sound asleep, then she realized she had fallen asleep on her watch! But then she noticed Owleye was sitting on the watch ledge Darkmask had been posted on before she dismissed him. "Thank you," Northstar mouthed the words.
Owleye dipped his head. But then Northstar realized something. When she awoke, Wolfcall, the forest, everything she saw went away. But the smell of smoke hasn't. Northstar leaped up beside Owleye. "Do you smell that?"
"What?" Owleye asked, clearly puzzled.
''The smoke!" Owleye sniffed the air.
"I geuss I can smell it." Northstar looked around, then saw it. Not far away on the mountain chain, was a somewhat pointed mountain, smoke rising from the top.
"Volcano," Northstar whispered.
"What?"
"The volcano is erupting!" Northstar yelled.
"Clam down," Owleye soothed. "It's far away. The lava won't get us."
"Of course it won't!" Northstar snapped. "Because the avalanche will get us first!" A flsh of realization flared in his eyes. Northstar leaped down and ran towards the sleeping cats, calling "Everyone wake up! Wakpe up! We have to find shelter!" Most cats had already woken up from when she first started yelling, and were now charging down the side of the mountain. Rabbitcatch was getting to his paws slowly. Northstar shoved hsi side and screamed "Get moving!"
Owleye ran over and said "We have to work together! You support him on that side, I'll support him on this side, and we'll run down the mountain togther!"
"I don't need help!" Northstar hissed.
"I do!" Rabbitcatch put in.
"I'm not a rabid traitorous rouge! I'm not going to run ahead, leaving my prenant leader and my tried, injured clanmate tof end for themselves with high chances of an avalanche!" Northstar bit back an argument and pressed against Rabbitcatch. She and Owleye half-led half-carried Rabbitcatch down the mountain.
"Look, in there!" Rabbitcatch pointed to a rock cleft, just big enough for a cat to squeeze through. Once they reached it they broke away from Rabbitcatch. Rabbitcatch was able to fit through easily, Owleye had to duck down but once he got inside he said there was tons of room. Northstar almost got stuck, but pulled through the opening.
"You ok?" Owleye asked. She saw a glint of amusement in his eyes, and her fur started rising on her back. She snarled at the rusty tabby and stalked off, heading into the tunnels. The system of tunnels was clearly twoleg made, the entrance covered with fallen rocks.
"Northstar, I'm sorry!"
"Give us a break! He didn't know you were sensitive about it!"
"I didn't mean to irritate or hurt your feelings."
Northstar ignored the toms and kept walking. She stopped once she couldn't hera them anymore. She sat down then started hearing a rumbling noise. "The avalanche," Northstar whispered. Then she realized it; they lost track of the Clan. Northstar went charging back. "Owleye! Rabbitcatch!" she was calling.
"Whats wrong Northstar?" Owleye asked.
"Did either of you see what happened to the Clan?" Her spirits plummited when she saw them give one another a realizing look. "This is your fault! What if someone gets hurt?" Owleye nodded.
"I should've kept my mouth shut about the cave and had us catch up with the Clan.''
"What! It was not Owleye's fault!"
"Well, it wasn't mine, I had my sights set on the Clan, helping you. So it's either his, or yours." Northstar growled grimly. Rabbitcatch shrunk away, revealing the opening leading back out onto the mountain top. Northstar shot past the two toms and through the entrance to the cave. Thw rumbling had stopped, and the rocks were displaced everywhere.
"Northstar!"
Nothrstar come back!" She heard the two toms calling her as they both tried to get through the hole at once. She ran down the mountainside, calling the other cats.
"Northstar, over here!" She recognized Snaketalon's voice. Northstar half-ran half-slid down to a rocky outcropping. Hidden below the ledge, pressed against the rock, was her Clan.
"Is everyone here?" Snaketalon shook her head.
"Owleye, Rabbitcatch, Ravencall, and Snowpatch are gone."
"I found a hiding place with Owleye and Rabbitcatch."
"Then that leaves Ravencall and Snowpatch." Birdsong said, padding over.
"Do you hear that?" Icecloud asked. Northstar pricked her ears. "Someone calling for help!" Icecloud broke out along the rocks. Northstar looked after her then back at the Clan.
"Stay here." Northstar ordered before she ran after Icecloud. Eventually she could hear it.
"Help! Anybody! Help, please!" Northstar sped up to meet Icecloud, and that's when she stopped. Northstar skidded to a hault.
"See them?" Icecloud asked. Northstar shook her head. "There's Ravencall!" she called after looking around. Northstar looked over at her and bounded over to her, where she stood over the black tom. "He's trapped under the rock!"
"I think she knows that!" Northstar ignored him.
"We'll lift it off together." As if on que, the two she-cats pushed the rock off the black tom. Ravencall struggled to his paws. Northstar supported him. "Let's get you to the Clan."
"What about Snowpatch!" Ravencall wailed.
"What about her?" Icecloud inquired.
"She was burried under rocks next to me!" Northstar and Icecloud looked at one another in horror then started digging through the rocks. Sure enough they found her body under the boulders. Northstar and Icecloud quickly forced Ravencall away. "What are you doing!" he broke the silence once they got to the rest of the Clan. Northstar looked at him, and the rest of the Clan. She noticed Owleye and Rabbitcatch had joined them.
"Snowpatch is dead."
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Re: The Last Hope

Postby Dessy » Tue May 22, 2012 1:24 pm

this is really good, please add more chapters soon!
Hello, I'm Dessy.I haven't been active for a long time,
but I'm trying to get back into it.
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Re: The Last Hope

Postby Fichester » Wed May 23, 2012 8:56 am

I finished Chapter 2! I'll be starting Chap. 3 soon!

P.S. I switched Darkmask and Ravencall...so Darkmask is the black tom and Ravencall is the black and white tom with Snowpatch as his sister. I just think Ravencall suits him better than Darkmask.
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Re: The Last Hope

Postby redkuchen » Thu May 24, 2012 7:54 am

I love it as I said earlier more!!!!
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Chapter 3

Postby Fichester » Fri Jun 08, 2012 1:20 am

Northstar picked her way down the mountain face. Snaketalon was at her side, leaping from rock to rock. The calico looked back at the rest of the Clan then whispered, "What's the plan, here?"
"Get down to the valley as soon as we can and stay in the twoleg nest until we're fit to leave," Northstar replied, focussing on where to put her paws, not looking up at her.
" 'Once we get back in the valley, everything will be fine!' Look, the moutain is safer than the valley is. I would know," Snaketalon told her. "It's a free-for-all."
"Snowpatch is dead, along with half of my Clan! The other half of my Clan drowned. So, right now, valley, safe; everywhere else, not safe." Northstar retorted, trying to pull ahead, but Snaketalon matched her paw for paw.
"You couldn't have it more wrong," Snaketalon said under her breath. Norhtstar ignored her and kept moving. She looked back at everyone else. At first, she was afraid they'd lost someone, but then she saw Owltalon bringing up the rear. She turned and saw it, the ramshakle of a twoleg nest ahead.
"The nest is up ahead!" she called, picking up the pace. Snaketalon wasn't ready for the new pace and fell behind. When Northstar looked back, most of the ValleyClan survivors had fallen behind the ArcticClan survivors.
Eventually she reached the nest. There was a piece of wood that stood over the entrance, but there was a space between the entrance and the wood just big enough for a cat to get through. She looked back, and saw all of the cats had fallen behind.
"Northstar!"
"Northstar, don't go in there!
"You don't know what's there!"
"It might be dangerous!"
Northstar ignored their calls and turned back to the nest. She slipped through the space, spitting with rage when she thought she had gotten stuck. She leaped away when the wood started to slip, but it didn't fall. The silver she-cat looked aroud warily, not considering the number of things that could be here that could harm her. She heard something that made her jump, but she couldn't identify what is was.
"Don't go out there," she heard a voice whisper.
"We don't know what she wants," another voice said.
"Just look at her! She's jut a poor stray queen who's scared out of her mind!"
"Wait, Cl-" Northstar whirled around as a brown she-cat padded out.
"You're no danger, are you?" Northstar shook her head silently. The she-cat looked back at the hiding place she had come from. "See! I told you she wasn't here to hurt us." A black tom and a golden tabby tom slipped out. The black one, pretending as if he hadn't been afraid of her, padded up to stand beside the she-cat.
"Yeah Milo," he said. "Who are you?'' he asked, turning towards Northstar.
"I'm Northstar," she responded.
"Wow, that's a name..." the black tom said. The she-cat cuffed him over the ear. "Ow! Hey!" Northstar knew the tom wasn't insulting her, or at least not trying too, but she couldn't help but smile in statisfaction.
"Nice to meet you Northstar. I'm Cleo, the tabby's Oliver, and this pain is Ozzy." Ozzy shot a glare at Cleo as she padded towards Northstar. Oliver padded after Cleo, and Ozzy warily followed. He was still wary of Northstar-with good reason.
"So, are you all alone?" Cleo asked her. As if to anwser, there was the pounding of paws outside. Snaketalon and Owleye were the first to burst in. They rushed over to Northstar's side. Cleo, Oliver, and Ozzy started backing away as the rest of the cats filed in.
"I told you she wasn't alone," Ozzy growled to Cleo, though it seemed it was directed at Northstar.
"Wait!" Northstar yowled, turning to her Clan. "These kittypets are no threat."
"Kittypets!" Ozzy snarled indignantly, "We- ow!" Northstar judged that Cleo cuffed him over the ear again.
"This is Cleo, Ozzy, and Oliver. Guys, this is my Clan." The kittypets looked at one another, then Cleo and Oliver stepped out.
"Nice to meet you all." The Clan swarmed over to them, greeting them. Eventually they seemed to split into groups and talked. Northstar wa glad to see Oliver and Cleo had been welcomed in. Wait, where's Ozzy? Northstar looked around and saw a black tail disappear behind a wall of the twoleg nest.
Curious, Northstar followed him up what she could only describe as wooden ledges. Northstar was confused in this different world. "Shouldn't you be with you Clan?"
Northstar whirled around to see him laying on a ledge, looking at the cloudy sky. "Well, I...um..."
"Um what?"
"What's wrong?'' Northstar asked. Ozzy paused, looking as if he was considering something.
"Northing." He replied eventually.
"It's just that, everything's changing. Our housefolk died, the world was falling apart, and now we get swamped with a bunch of lucky crowfood eaters." Ozzy's head shot up and whirled around to look at Northstar, realizing he would be referring to her too. "Sorry."
Northstar shook her head with a slight smile, and leaped up to sit beside him. "You know, sometimes change is for the better."
"I don't know...''
"Ozzy, your kittypet life will never be the same. Have you ever felt trapped here?" Northstar asked, studing the strangem transparent material infront of her.
"Well, yeah, but-"
"This is your chance. You can either live here on your own, or you can come and live life wild."
"I wouldn't be alone.'' Ozzy corrected her. "I'd have-"
"Cleo and Oliver are coming with us." Northstar told him.
"They are?" He asked, sounding rather defeated, finally meeting Northstar's gaze. Northstar nodded, and Ozzy looked back at the grey clouds as rain started coming down. Eventually her broke the silence. "I'll join them."
"You will? You're going to... you're going to come with us?" Northstar asked in disbelief. Ozzy nodded. Northstar fixated her attention back on what stood between her and the open air.
"It's called a glass, by the way." Ozzy meowed with a slight purr, sitting up.
"What?" Norhtstar asked, looking up at him.
"This," he placed his black paw on it. "It's called glass." Northstar glared at him and he let out a mrrow of laughter. Northstar couldn't help but smile.
'Once we get back in the valley, everything will be fine!' Look, the moutain is safer than the valley is. I would know. Snaketalon's words echoed in her head. It's a free-for-all.
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Re: The Last Hope

Postby redkuchen » Fri Jun 08, 2012 9:32 am

awesome, your great at writing
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