Slaves Of the Full Moon (Critique and comments wanted)

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So,basicly this is just a story about a bunch of dragons and slaves and full moons....

Prologue:

''Arij! Hurry up!'' A beautiful black dragon called, as she flew through the midnight sky, her long wings outstreched and tail straight, she seemed like a swam flying in the sky.
''Sorry, Shasta!'' Another dragon, this time a red male answered back and dove next to the female.
''Why are you so slow? Do you think that they will wait for us?'' Shata growled and flew even faster, feeling the wind on her scales.
'' Are you talking about that old scrap of fur?'' Arij rolled his eyes, ''She is such a.....''
''What is it? Did you slwallow a fly Again?'' The black dragoness laughed, her deep laugh ringing through the cold night air.
'No,Shasta look!'' Arij dived down and just then Shasta noticed some dark, stones beneath them. it was like a cave, with a tower what it seemed to be, thin and tall going on the top. Shasta felt like there was a sword pierced through her heart, she felt something was wrong. Very wrong. ''Arij!'' She called the red dragon but he ignored her and flew inside the cave. Shasta followed cautiously.

Inside the cave, Shasta quickly blocked Arij's way and growled silently, ''Wait! Don't go, there is something wrong here. I can feel it in my scales...'' Arij pushed past her and Shasta looked infront of her, as Arij was walking forward like hypnotised. A moment later a blinding golden light made Shasta wince in pain and then when she opened her eyes again she saw Arij next to her, and infront of them a mountain of various golden treasures. Bracelets, Neclases, earrings, vases, and other gold objects amde by the ancient creatures that vanished from Earth long ago, they were called...Humans.

Shasta gaped at one thing only, not the treasures or anything else but at one thing, a painting of a fierce golden dragon on the wall of the cave. It had whiskers, a long body, mane and furry tail, and firece red eyes. His scales seemed to move and glimmer but Shasta thought it was her own imagination. but she was wrong. The painting suddenly blinked and growled, making the two dragons bunch and crouch like scared mice infront of a cat.
A golden dragon stepped out of the painting, stretching. It was the same draogn from the painting!

The golden creature glared at Shasta and her friend and hen said, ''Do you know who am I?'' His voice was deep and choking.
Arij shrugged, ''...No...'' He whispered.
The golden dragon puffed out his scaly chest, ''I am Komodo, the God of the dragons!'' He let Shasta and Arij hang there for a moment then added, ''You have been blesed with my presence, now, do you want to serve the God of the dragons and have everything you could ever want?''
Shasta wanted to abck away but froze as she caught Komodo's gaze and nodded. There's no other way to get out alive! She thought, digging her claws into the ground.

Komodo smiled, revieling his black and white teeth and said, ''Good. You will serve me by getting what you want! You will have to hunt for dragons...''
Shata gasped, ''Hunt dragons? But we are dragons ourselves!''
Komodo ignored her, '''You will hunt dragons every full moon and takethem to a secret island called 'Skull Island.'' You will train them if they are good enough and make an army of dragons over the time, keeping them hidden from unwanted eyes and the ones who are too weak to be part of an army...Bring them to me....''

The black female winced as pain took over her and felt the cold metal touch her legs, and her power increasing.Shasta gulped. There was no way back now....

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Chapter 1

I rocketed past the snowy mountains, down to the ground and up again. The refreshing wind blew at my icy scales, I shivered and smiled at the same time. I just loved the cold! Spinning and twirling, and diving and flying, spinning and growling and smiling and laughing was all the things I was doing in those few minutes of my flight.

I only decided to land when I was out of breath and my ribs hurt so much I thought I'll die! Looking around slowly, I noticed that I landed next to a small river, and I could hear the splashes of the waterfall against the cold rocks. grass surrounded me, and oh,look! Flowers, vivid and bright of all kinds were in sight in the grass! Flowers! I nearly squeeled with excitement, I never saw so much summery beauty! I lived in the mountains, full of snow and cold, and the peaks were always snowy so I rarely saw a river, grass and flowers.

I closed my eyes and sighed, listening to the lovely tune of the singing of the birds, the splashing of the water, the buzzing of the bees.....
''Waaaatch out beeeeelooow!'' A scream made me open my eyes.
''What the --'' I never finished the sentence. Crash! I fell into the river, with the creature who screamed at me there too. Shaking myself like a dog and getting out of the river I looked at the creature who pushed me in the river through narrowed eyes. It was a dragon! A creamy one, with a few redish scales and amber eyes. He had small horns, a horny tail and along his spine spikes that looked very,very sharp.

The dragon shook himself and looked at me apologeticly, ''Sorry for that....''
''Umm...What are you doing? And who are you?'' I asked, uncertain of what else to say.
''I'm really bad at landings,so yeah..crash!'' The male dragon grinned, ''Oh, and I'm Chapter! You?'' His amber gaze watched me and I felt myself blush under my scales, in the mountains there aren't any other dragons so I wasn't used to males at all.
''I'm Icicle.'' I answered.

''You seem to not be used to this place...'' Chapter pointed out after a few seconds of silence.
I nodded and replied, ''I live in the mountains.'' I gazed longingly at my snowy shelter, in hope to get away form the other dragon and go home.
''Oh! I live in the forest next to here! The mountains are soo cold, how do you survive there?'' Chapter's eyes were round.

And we kept on chatting about things for ages, I found out that he was not used to flying as he was never tought how and only found out that he could fly a few days ago. That's weird isn't it?