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Still working on the name...

Postby Medusa72 » Mon Jan 30, 2012 5:53 am

Hey Guys!!!
If you've seen my other post: Fantasy. Need help with any ideas!!! Then you know about these two kids. If you haven't seen it then allow me to explain.

Leon(Lee) Claire Newman- (girl) twin to Joe.
Joe Kent Newman- (boy) twin to Lee.

These thirteen year old twins, who live in the orphanage, sneak out to find there true mother. However, when Joe and Lee get seperated, Joe finds assistance for a price and finds Lee and there mother. But will there mother want them?
i will not sit down
did you ever make it out of that town

i will not shut up
where nothin ever happened


rivers and roads, rivers and roads
our love ain't nothin but a monster

rivers till i reach you
our love ain't nothin but a monster with two heads
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Re: (I don't have a name yet) Fantasy: 1

Postby Medusa72 » Sat Feb 11, 2012 5:54 pm

Chapter One
The Orphanage


Lee lay on top of the bunk bed in her drafty room in the West Hatterson Orphanage. Listening to cars go by on the street outside her window.
"Lee?" Her twin brother, Joe, asks, "What would it be like? To get adopted?"
"Just what I was thinking," Lee reply.
"That's what you're alway's thinking," Joe say's.
Lee bent over the bed to look at Joe, "Like you would know what I'm thinking," she laughed.
"As a matter of fact I do," he replies, an amused smile spreading across his face.
DING! DING!
The small bell in their room rang twice.
"It's not lunch time,"Joe commented.
Lee raised her eyebrow's at him. They only rang the bell for reminders of meal times or for any announcements.
The dirty intercom made a fuzzy sound, which Lee figured was the director saying something.

Lee and Joe sat next to each other in the rusty seats right outside the directors door. They both silently pondered what the director wanted to say to them. Lee felt excitement and nervousness flutter in her stomach.
"You may come in now," she heard the director call. The director was a middle aged woman with greying hair and cold eyes.
Lee and Joe walked into her office, in front of her desk was a tall man and woman with dark, sharp buisness suits on. Lee felt a shiver go down her spine.
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i will not sit down
did you ever make it out of that town

i will not shut up
where nothin ever happened


rivers and roads, rivers and roads
our love ain't nothin but a monster

rivers till i reach you
our love ain't nothin but a monster with two heads
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Re: Still working on the name...

Postby Medusa72 » Sun Feb 12, 2012 12:59 pm

Chapter Two
The Buttsniff's


Joe shifted uncomfortably in the scratchy seats in front of the director's desk. He didn't like the feeling he got when he looked at the people in sharply dressed suits. To help he imagined them sniffing their butts. He soon stopped imagining that when he laughed aloud and everybody stared at him quizically. Though he continued to call them the Buttsniff's.
"I think you've misunderstood," the director said to them, "I called for Leon, not you to Joe."
"It's Lee," Lee said boldly, "And we would have heard you if the intercom actually worked, beside's if Joe wasn't in here with me I might run out screaming."
The director turned slightly pink but straitened her metal rod back and sternly said to Joe, "You may go now."
"No," he replied coldly.
The director faltered, "I-"
"They aren't very polite," the buisness woman said sharply
"Some punishment could fix that," The man said.
Joe and Lee folded their arms stubbornly.
"Now," the director said in her stern voice, "This lovely couple wants to adopt a girl, in this case Leon."
"No," Joe and Lee said at the same time.
"You," the directory said, jabbing a finger at Joe, "Don't have any say in the matter."
"Yes I do," Joe said, "She's the only family I've got and I'm not just going to let her go."
"I don't even want to go without Joe," Lee said.
"We'll see," the director said evily.
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did you ever make it out of that town

i will not shut up
where nothin ever happened


rivers and roads, rivers and roads
our love ain't nothin but a monster

rivers till i reach you
our love ain't nothin but a monster with two heads
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Re: Still working on the name...

Postby Medusa72 » Tue Feb 14, 2012 12:20 pm

Chapter Three
An Unbearable Decision


Tear's ran down Lee's face as she smothered what little belongings she had in a dusty old backpack. She didn't want to go with the couple, whom she soon figured out was the Quints. Joe sat on the bed next to her backpack. His face was solemn and dry.
"Listen Lee," he said suddenly, "The buttsniff's are just a distraction. You need to focus on our plan."
Lee nodded, tears still streaming.
Then Joe added softly, "Do you remember all of it?"
Lee nodded again, she didn't trust her voice.
"Okay," Joe wavered.
"I don't know how I can leave you," Lee said weakly.
"You're not leaving for that long," Joe said with a small smile.
"But you should have heard the director's voice, she said that you and I were just... just..."
"I know."
"She threatened me Joe," Lee whispered, "She said if I didn't go that something worse would happen, she said if I tried anything..."
"It's okay Lee," Joe tried to comfort her, "Just stick to the plan."
Joe stood up and hugged her. Lee buried her head in his thin shoulder.
She took a deep sigh, tugging on a piece of Joe's dark blonde hair she said, "Get a haircut."
Joe surpressed a smile, lightly tugging her equally blonde hair back said, "Likewise."
"Here," Lee said, wiping the tear's off of her face, "Before I forget." Lee handed Joe a small sphere that was slightly larger than a quarter. Joe took a long look at it. Shaking it, Lee and Joe watched the flakes of fake snow whirl around the words, LOVE.
"A worker here said he found it in my file," Lee said to Joe, "I figure our parents must've left it for us or something."
Lee never bothered trying to learn the names of the workers here. They came and went so fast, she just soon forgot all about them. The only worker she did remember was that man. Nick, was his name. He got sick and had to leave though.
"Here," Joe said to Lee, shoving a folded piece of paper into her hand, "It's the plan, so you don't forget."
Lee nodded. They then walked down to the first floor where Lee would leave with the Quints.
Lee looked out the window as Joe and the director got smaller and smaller away, I love you! she thought.
I love you to, Joe thought back, right into her mind.
i will not sit down
did you ever make it out of that town

i will not shut up
where nothin ever happened


rivers and roads, rivers and roads
our love ain't nothin but a monster

rivers till i reach you
our love ain't nothin but a monster with two heads
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Re: Still working on the name...

Postby Medusa72 » Thu Feb 16, 2012 11:39 am

Chapter Four
The Plan


Joe had been able to hear other peoples thought ever since he was ten years old. He told nobody of it, not even Lee. It was hard to keep in, considering some thoughts were about him.

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This chapter is a WIP!
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