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Re: Our Aspiring Writers League (O.A.W.L) (New Thread!)

Postby Lasesi » Sat Jan 28, 2012 10:47 am

((Ok so this is SO off-topic but i wanted to squee a little X3 But today, as i was about to go to class, i got in my car and was turning it around when suddenly *POOF* a big black doggie appeared out of nowhere! I opened my door and she hopped right in and just sat there, looking at me with big brown eyes X3 I took her to the shelter to find out where she lived, and contacted the owner, and the owner is out of town for most of the day, so I GET A DOG FOR A DAY! X3 I know that's probably not that exciting to most people - but as it is i can't have a dog in my apartment (i live in a studio with no garden) and I'm quite a huge dog-lover! the fact that i get to hang out with one all days is just SO DARN AMAZING! (I do volunteer at the dog shelter on a regular basis, but it's not the same) She''s currently sitting on my bed and i'm gonna take her to the dog park X3 I R TEH HAPPEHS.))

*ehem* moving on :D

So I have a conundrum with a plot point - and was wondering if anyone could help me out? IN my story there are three races, Lets call them A B and C (cause thats easier than explaining ¬.¬). Now, A and C hate eachother - it's sort of a .. natural instinct i guess? and B is the moderator between the two races (it's why they were created :3) So A has a city in which nobody apart from other A's are allowed in (they're very strict), B also has a city that's open to all, and C used to have a city (hundreds of years ago) that was destroyed in the war. Now, some C's have begun to rebuild that city, and my conundrum is - Who should be allowed in the city? I can't decide if it should be another open-for all or not. And it's sort of a new era of civilization (kind of..) so i don't know if they should try and let the past be...? Any help would be much appreciated :3
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Re: Our Aspiring Writers League (O.A.W.L) (New Thread!)

Postby MBRShorse » Sat Jan 28, 2012 10:55 am

Lassie:

Jealous! No dog ever just jumps into my car! Of course, I also have two doggies, so that might be why. Congradulations on the temporary roommate! :)

As for the story, I guess it really depends on where you are trying to go with things. I personally think keeping it a closed city would result in less comflict than if they opened it up, so if you are searching for another war, keep it open. The A race would come in, wreak havoc, people will be POed, and then there will be fighting. Keep it closed, and it is same-old, same-old.
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Re: Our Aspiring Writers League (O.A.W.L) (New Thread!)

Postby Lasesi » Sat Jan 28, 2012 11:46 am

Oh! AND the dogs name is "lacy" which i thought was really ironic, considering people think they pronounce my username "lacey" X3 Irony, or fate? :o [/offtopic]

Well it's actually a little more complicated.. See there is race D that veryone thinks was wiped out in the great war... But they're actually biding their time waitin to strike back, and the C's that are rebuilding the city happen to be the childhood nemisis of my main char. Now the main char has to go to all three cities to try and unite the races to fight off The D's... Ok this is complicated >.> and because my main char is a C, traveling with an A and a B... If only C's are allowed in I can't see a plausible way to get my main char in there... And the leader of that city may or maynot be the kind of person to allow other races in... *I wrote this on my phone - excuse the horrible spelling xD)

i think my main problem is that if i have the city closed, then it creates more strife between the races than if i have it open, but then if i have it open it might feel like it's a little bit to easy? And ithought about having it open to only race C and B, but i'm not sure if that would work or not, but it might? Haa.. it's confusing and sounds stupid when i explain it like this.. X3
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Re: Our Aspiring Writers League (O.A.W.L) (New Thread!)

Postby violacherry » Sat Jan 28, 2012 12:00 pm

Thanks guys! i'll be sure to check those out!
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Re: Our Aspiring Writers League (O.A.W.L) (New Thread!)

Postby Lasesi » Sat Jan 28, 2012 1:52 pm

((quick update on my doggie friend X3!!

So i returned her home about an hour ago, turns out she belonged to my neighbor over the road!! I returned home feeling slightly sad and empty, wishing i still had my doggie friend. So i sit down and watch some netflix, and an hour later theres this enormous amount of noise coming from outside my door. I open it, and what do i find? My doggie friend sitting there howling to come in, freezing cold! (It's easily freezing outside right now)

I felt so special!! So i called up the owner who again wasn't home, and she's gonna come get her in a while XD I am amused, and i feel special! Until then i'm gonna enjoy my big black fluffy friend who's sitting on my bed )) [/offtopic]
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Re: Our Aspiring Writers League (O.A.W.L) (New Thread!)

Postby Redwall » Sat Jan 28, 2012 3:03 pm

Username: Redwall
What will we call you: Red
What are your goals as an author?
~Complete at least one book, hopefully all
~Get my books published
~Have my books well-known/liked
Can you give us a sample of your writing? Hope this is alright. Just wrote something random I've been thinking of today.

The girl climbed up and over the old, wooden fence with ease, landing on the other side with a soft thump. A herding dog was quick to follow, squeezing through the opening between the wood beams. The dog shoved its graying muzzle into the girl’s hand, begging to be pet. She smiled down at her dog and patted its head. “Ready to go, girl?” The dog’s ears perked up, her two differently colored eyes watching the girl intently. Taking that as a yes, the girl broke into a run, dog right by her side.

She took long strides, running lightly across the damp, vivid green fields. The feel of the ground moving beneath her bare feet, her lungs expanding and collapsing with gulps of fresh mountain air, the pounding adrenaline in her veins, this was what she loved. She worked her way up the steep incline and onto the well-worn forest path. Pine needles jabbed into her skin, but were no harm to the calloused skin on her feet. She ran every day, but only took this route every once in a while. It was special to her, and the hardest to do, but the end result was worth the effort. As she continued along her path, she noticed a saltiness mingling with the pine-scented air. She was close. Just a few more yards, and then she was there.

She emerged from the trees and came to a stop, lacing her fingers behind her head to make it easier to breathe. Her dog, Maddie, soon followed and collapsed at her feet, panting heavily. The girl looked at her dog, her heart constricting. Maddie was getting so old, this climb was getting to be too much for her. She bent down and stroked her dog’s velvet ears, whispering soothing words. After a few moments she stood and walked to the edge of the cliff. She was at the highest point of their little island, and from here she could see everywhere. Behind her, the ground sloped down sharply before evening out into different sized hills and valleys, one of which her village resided. In front of her was a sudden drop into the ocean that spread out as far as the eye could see. She placed her hands on her hips and looked out at the sparkling, deep blue waves. The sky was bright, with small, white clouds about the horizon. As her eyes adjusted to the brightness, the clouds became sharper and clearer, with a more distinct design. She squinted at them, her brow furrowing as her brain scrambled to piece together what she was seeing. Then it all clicked.

“Ships! Ships, Maddie!” She squealed excitedly. The girl clapped her hands, struggling to contain the feelings threatening to burst out. She turned on her heel and sprinted back into the woods, hardly giving a thought to carefully making her way down. All she could think of was the ships, and that her father was on them, finally returning home.

Are you currently working on any books? Several, but I haven’t worked very hard on any of them.
Why do you want to join? I want to start taking my writing seriously and make it more than just an on-the-side hobby. I think surrounding myself with other writers will encourage me and help improve my writing.
Do you have published books yet? Nope.
Do you wish to find a "writing partner"? Not really, I prefer working alone.
What's your favorite genre to read? Write? Almost anything fiction, but I really like fantasy, historical and futuristic with supernatural twists, and adventure. I enjoy romance when it’s a small part of a story, but I don’t like stories centered just on romance, and horror stories scare me so I generally stay away from them.
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Re: Our Aspiring Writers League (O.A.W.L) (New Thread!)

Postby Kitty12156 » Sat Jan 28, 2012 3:07 pm

(( for you idea Lassie, I think that it would make a great story thingy if the new leader of C is trying to fix things with A. so C is being nice with A, but A is still being hostile.. Unless that totally colliides with you plan ~ ))
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Re: Our Aspiring Writers League (O.A.W.L) (New Thread!)

Postby MBRShorse » Sat Jan 28, 2012 3:10 pm

Yay! Doggie friend came back! You need to become really good friends with your neighbor so you can become the offical dog sitter. ;)

As for your city, have it closed off. It will make things harder for your main character.

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Re: Our Aspiring Writers League (O.A.W.L) (New Thread!)

Postby Lasesi » Sat Jan 28, 2012 3:13 pm

Kitty12156 wrote:(( for you idea Lassie, I think that it would make a great story thingy if the new leader of C is trying to fix things with A. so C is being nice with A, but A is still being hostile.. Unless that totally colliides with you plan ~ ))


Hmm.. I'll think on that, but it's not like the character to do that (which is where my conundrum lies i think...?). He kind of goes power crazy and wants to rule the world :roll: . Though I guess theres no real hurry - this is way later in the book and it can change i guess X3

MBRShorse wrote:Yay! Doggie friend came back! You need to become really good friends with your neighbor so you can become the offical dog sitter. ;)

As for your city, have it closed off. It will make things harder for your main character.

And welcome back, Redwall!


As if things aint hard enough already X3 But then i don't want it to be repetitive with that city and A's city when she gets there, considering they're both closed? and from a logistical sense of trading and whatnot, their city is between the other two, and it would make sense for them to be open... BLAH! *twitches* I'm so indecisive! Though i think it will be probably closed..

And i would so love to see the doggie again!! But unfortunately the owner seems to be a little bit of a .. female dog.. :( she wasn't even that happy i returned her!! The dog didn't even have any tags!! :evil:
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Re: Our Aspiring Writers League (O.A.W.L) (New Thread!)

Postby Tussle » Sat Jan 28, 2012 4:46 pm

Username:
Zigzag.Zirk

What will we call you:
I prefer Zirk, but I will anwser to Zigzag as well, which ever you're more comfortable with

What are your goals as an author?
Improvement! I want to improve!
Does be able to write at least 1,000 words a day count as a goal?
Now, for my er, big dream!
To write for a TV show! Bonus points if it's a TV show based off of my own characters!

Can you give us a sample of your writing?
Ebb grits his teeth as to not turn around and snap at the green, skirt clad idiot. With a quiet frustrated sigh, he left to go outside.

Outside, the fall breeze was whipping dead dried leaves and petals, scattering them across the garden like confetti. The smell of autumn was one of his favourite smells; it reminded him of when he and his siblings would play about in the leaves, under the watchful eyes of the older residents. He’d remember them warning them not to go into the forest, coming up with elaborate stories of monsters that inhabited it, ready to gobble them up.

He plucked a large apple off of a tree in the garden as he walked past it, biting into it with a crunch. The cool autumn air chilled his chin where the juice dribbled down and he wiped his face with the back of his sleeve. He ate it as he walked.



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Mostly fanfictions at the moment. And also the above story there. But... I think it counts as fanfiction...? I'm not sure. I'm using ChickenSmoothie pets as the characters?

I've also been attempting to write a plot arc with my OCs that may eventually become a webcomic, if that counts :)

Why do you want to join?
I am totally itching to make new friends and learn about how some of you guys write. :D You guys seem like a friendly bunch<3

Do you have published books yet?
Nope D:

Do you wish to find a "writing partner"?
No thanks, I already have a partner in real life and that'd feel like... cheating or something XD

What's your favorite genre to read? Write?
I read mostly fantasy and horror. Though, I'm up to read pretty much anything if it's recommended or loaned to me.
I'm not sure what genre I write XD But my favourite things to write are characters that have anxiety and torture scenes XD
So... I guess you can say horror! XD

Were you a member of the old thread?
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