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Re: { INKLINGS } A Thread For Writers

Postby safe at shore. » Mon Jan 19, 2015 11:31 am

    What is your least favourite character to write?
    you see i don't have these problems because i don't have a story yet so xd

    What do you think of the word 'said'?
    yawn. aha what can i say i find myself crossing it out and having to replace it because i have said written it too much xd do that a lot at school.

    What's your favourite flaw to give one of your characters?
    that they are stubborn or bossy. or really aggressive and have a low temper. is it bad that i find it fun when my character argues? xd

    Quick! You have ten minutes to write a (small) scene about a character called Raymond!
    "hello my names raymond and today i am going to do the whats on my phone tag and yes--"
    "raymond it's tea time!"
    "mom go away!!"
    "but raymond..."
    raymond turns off his camera as he hears his mum stomping up he stairs. could he not record a video in peace?
    "now you listen to me raymond"
    he'd had enough of being shouted at every day by his not-even-my-real-mum mum and was going to fight back.
    "no"
    "i have made you you're tea"
    "not hungry"
    "raymond it took me ages to make that!!"
    "it took me ages to make this script"
    "you're not meant to script videos raymond"
    "well... i do"
    "eat your tea"
    "fine"
    probably best saving the fight till another day. it wasn't over yet...
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Re: { INKLINGS } A Thread For Writers

Postby Silverhart » Mon Jan 19, 2015 12:58 pm

What is your least favourite character to write?
I have this one character I first wrote when I was young who is always angry. And back then I thought she had to be angry, but nowadays that just gets on my nerves. I would've abandoned her completely by now if I hadn't decided to make her a part of a larger story. I've been working on her these past few days to make her a more developed character; figuring out why she is what she is. I think I've made some real progress, but I've discovered I don't like writing characters with weak motivations, are stereotypical, or angry in the process. Or pointless. I hate pointless characters as well.

What do you think of the word 'said'?
A perfectly fine word when used correctly. People seem to either go in two wrong directions with 'said'. Those who use it too much, and those who replace every single 'said' with some other word; "groaned", "huffed", "laughed", "sighed". Both are extremely annoying. I tend to err on the side of "don't use any instance of 'said' or it's synonyms". Challenging yourself to write dialogue scenes without them makes you a much better writer. You're much more aware; paying attention to what the characters are doing, looking for interesting sentence structure, looking for ways for the characters to express and acknowledge each other in interesting ways, and it makes statements much stronger when you don't attach more then is necessary. In fact I've found that when you have two characters in a scene there's rarely any reason to use a synonym of 'said' at all.

I don't think 'said' and it's synonyms should be ignored completely by a writer, but it's very easy to fall into the habit of using it as a crutch, so I always try to cut down on the use of it in my stories, and also encourage others to do so. I also just like to use plain old 'said' when I do use it. That's not always the case, especially if there is emotion behind the words; but if there is none, or the emotion can be made clear without it, then plain old 'said' works just fine.

What's your favourite flaw to give one of your characters?
Pride - always fun to write. XD

Quick! You have ten minutes to write a (small) scene about a character called Raymond!

Ahh... I don't have ten minutes. Spent about ten minutes writing about 'said'. XD
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Re: { INKLINGS } A Thread For Writers

Postby ''' » Mon Jan 19, 2015 1:07 pm

Do any of you prefer to write with a male as your main character?
I like female characters, but there is something about male characters
that just draws me to the book. It all just depends on the author.
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I have also noticed a pattern in a lot of teen novels; they are very stereotypical.
I have moved on to more adult novels, since they seem to portray life at a more
realistic level. I understand that there has to be books for all age levels, but I
just thought I would share my opinion on that. I just don't have that great of an
imagination, so reading things that are more realistic makes it easier for me ~
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I have another question; what genre of book are you guys getting most sick of?
Mine has to be romance. Or more "teen romance", it just gets so boring. ~~~
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Re: { INKLINGS } A Thread For Writers

Postby empunich; » Mon Jan 19, 2015 1:18 pm

What is your least favourite character to write? In my opinion I always find the "villan" the hardest to write as I find it hard to switch to what their mindset might be.
What do you think of the word 'said'? I usually write in first person present tense and I would rather use says as opposed to said
What's your favourite flaw to give one of your characters?
I always give them a bad mouth and a feisty sort of attitude, I never, ever will make a perfect acharya tee when I am writing, I find a character like that ruins the feel of my stories.
Quick! You have ten minutes to write a (small) scene about a character called Raymond! ah... Ok.

Started at 12:08

"Come on Skink, keep up!" Twig calls from a head of everyone else, I could tell he directs a that at me, as I am lagging behind while everyone else sped ahead of me along the beach. Every time an AMMA plane flew over our heads we'd speedy as and hide behind rocks, not half bad training if I'm honest. A laugh emo area from the group in front of me as he teases me. I roll my eyes and try to pick up my lace but end up falling onto the sand. I curse, quite loudly, which earns me a kick to the head. I look up and there he is, Jack. He extends his hand to help me up and I take it.
"You've got to at least try to run," he says mockingly "unless you've change your mind about being a Street Warrior?"
I shake my head and stand up, brushing the sand of me.
"Shut it," I demand angrily, punching him in the shoulder lightly "just cause we are mates, doesn't mean you have to emphasize my flaws."
"Like, poor fitness, stupidity, bad looks-" he starts before I cut him off by punching him in the ribs, he laughs.
"I hate you," I say running off, he catches up.
"Don't worry," he says "I hate you too Ray."

This is a bit of background info since I didn't write a lot (ps. This info is writen from Twig's second in command Caleb's perspective.:
Hell's soldiers* (duel bladers, aka: the Rebels, the Street Warriors)


Guild of Jooters (Armada and the Mindel's Army Alliance, aka: the AMAA )


The Flankers • (the commoners that stay out of the street wars)


The Embalmers ^ (the Basic Health and care of Soldiers of the AMAA)


The Messengers (the Street Warriors that are trained to send secret messages through the tunnels that the Tunnellers dig)

The Tunnellers + (they are Street Warriors that are trained to dig tunnels that Messengers travel through to transport materials and secret messages)

The Barkers (they are the Jooters in charge, they spend their time in an office telling all their soldiers what to do.)

The Serpents ~ (they are the Street Warriors that have been sent on a spying mission.)

* that's just what the Jooters calls us, we calls us the Street Warriors and the Flankers calls us the Rebels


^ we calls 'em Embalmers 'cause that's what Twig says them Egyptians calls them people who makes those mummies. So we calls 'em that 'cause it's basically sayin' that the Jooters in the Embalmers care are as good as dead


• we says they is Flankers 'cause the Jooters rounds up some of 'means they flank the army when they is planning somethin' big like burnin' down our old HQ (which they actually did)


+ them Diggers is secretive 'bout their work. They don't say nothin' 'bout what they do and where it all goes.


~when Twig gets all suspicious 'bout a Street Warrior he sends off a few messengers to follow him 'round, eventually Twig finds outs they is a Serpent and then he punishes 'em. We calls 'em Serpents 'cause they manage to pass the tests and get all the information they needs, so they is as bad as serpents
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Re: { INKLINGS } A Thread For Writers

Postby girl with wifi » Mon Jan 19, 2015 1:28 pm

What is your least favourite character to write? I tend to find the love interest.
What do you think of the word 'said'? it tends to get annoying when used over and over again.
What's your favourite flaw to give one of your characters? shyness, not very confident.

Quick! You have ten minutes to write a (small) scene about a character called Raymond!
the nails of my fingers dig into my palms as I clench them into fists. I am leaded to a small room with equipment in it.
the room smells of copper and metal. a long dim grey chair stands in the middle. to me it feels like a dentist office.
The male who lead me in walks over to the computer and tells me to sit in the chair. I do so and fix my long hair while
waiting for more instructions. He hands me a clear glass with green liquid inside and tell me to drink. I do and once I finish the
liquid I feel dizzy. "You must control your breathing and heartbeat. The simulation will end once you've witnessed all of your fears.
Be brave."
and
with that the male's face is gone and I'm on a high pier looking over the city of Chicago.
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Re: { INKLINGS } A Thread For Writers

Postby vanilla kitten » Mon Jan 19, 2015 3:08 pm

hey all. i'm looking for some critique.

i'm looking for someone who would be willing to critique the first chapter of something i'm
working on. i just feel that i need some feedback; not just on grammar or anything along
those lines (although, obviously, that's appreciated c:), but on my storytelling/storyline. i
kind of just really want a second opinion.

if anyone is down to help me out, or is willing to read it chapter by chapter as i write the
story, don't be shy, PM me c: thank you.
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Re: { INKLINGS } A Thread For Writers

Postby Megaguirus » Mon Jan 19, 2015 3:38 pm

What is your least favourite character to write?
I don't have one? LOL, I write all kinds, so I really can't answer.
What do you think of the word 'said'?
Okay, it just needs to be used sparingly. I tend to juggle it between a few other variations, like replied or stated, for example.
What's your favourite flaw to give one of your characters?
Oh, hard one. But I think I'd have to go with someone who has an evil within them. Could either be a literal evil (like an actual demon) or just a darker side.

Quick! You have ten minutes to write a (small) scene about a character called Raymond!

He gasped for another breath before diving underwater for the third time. He needed to save her. Raymond kicked his legs fast, as fast as he could. Soon, she came into view and he swam even faster, reaching for her falling hand. He was able to touch her fingers until he ran out of breath. His instinct overpowered him and he swam back up, hauling himself onto the boat once he reached the surface. He lost her, he couldn't believe it. He promised her that he'd never loose her and he broke it. He sobbed, falling back on the boat.

Raymond knew he'd never see her again, and now thought about what he should do. Continue living? Or join her beneath the waves. After a moments thought, he was so distressed, that he chose the latter. With another sob, he dove into the water, swimming down and never stopping. He saw her body again and swam towards it. His breath was running low, but he forced himself to continue to swim. Soon, he reached her and embraced her cold body. He then took a breath, a breath that gave no oxygen. He began to slowly drown, along with his love. The wonderful memories he shared with her began to move through his mind as his life slowly left his body.

He wouldn't even have a proper grave. He knew the both of them would be "lost at sea" and forgotten. I'm sorry. He thought sadly as more water began to fill his lungs. He wished it could be peaceful but his body began to twitch and struggle from the lack of oxygen. There was nothing he could do about it. He shut his eyes and hugged his girlfriend's body tighter. He gave her one last kiss on the lips before falling unconscious and dying. Never to be seen from again.
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Hmm, that took a turn for the dark. Nice challenge though, I was actually surprised to see how fast I had typed it. I actually timed myself, LOL.
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Re: { INKLINGS } A Thread For Writers

Postby toadstool » Mon Jan 19, 2015 4:21 pm

      What is your least favourite character to write?
      My least favorite character to write about is a chirpy and cheery. Like a character who is fearless. I feel like they are Gary/Mary sues. .__.
      What do you think of the word 'said'?
      'said' is dull and overused. it's not very descriptive, and you can't tell what the character is feeling with its talking.
      What's your favourite flaw to give one of your characters?
      I have to say either self conscious and hesitant or short temper and insecure

      Quick! You have ten minutes to write a (small) scene about a character called Raymond!

      (started at 8:10)

      There was no moon.

      Short quick breathes came in forcefully. Low-hanging branches whipped the dark haired boy harshly, but he ran with no hesitance or halt. Heavy footsteps echoed in the dense forest. Growls filled the air threateningly, closing in on the skinny boy with wide blue pools of fear. Small beads of sweat specked his long hair despite the cool air blasting his face. A silent scream choked his throat as a stubborn bramble snatched his foot menacingly. His body fell with a thump, and terror flooded his chest. Dark yellow eyes gleamed in the undergrowth, and sharp teeth glinted in from the little light of the stars, spread as if it was a smile.

      Raymond jerked awake. His throat was tight, and his hands trapped a fist of his sheets. The dark haired boy was gleaming with sweat, his mouth gaped. He rolled onto his side, ripping away his fingers, and thumping onto the cold hardwood. Raymond was having this dream continuisly every night since he had moved here two weeks ago. It fine at first, but it had gotten worse. The dark demon haunting his dreams uncomfortably. He turned to the alarmclock on his nightstand. 3:30 am.

      (ended at 8:20)

      *oh god that was horrible xc*
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Re: { INKLINGS } A Thread For Writers

Postby iWonder » Mon Jan 19, 2015 4:27 pm

vαnillα kitten wrote:
hey all. i'm looking for some critique.

i'm looking for someone who would be willing to critique the first chapter of something i'm
working on. i just feel that i need some feedback; not just on grammar or anything along
those lines (although, obviously, that's appreciated c:), but on my storytelling/storyline. i
kind of just really want a second opinion.

if anyone is down to help me out, or is willing to read it chapter by chapter as i write the
story, don't be shy, PM me c: thank you.

I would love To help you out. Editing I one of my favorite parts of writing... besides making things explode and describing it in extensive detail. PM me with your draft, I have the resources to help out.
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Re: { INKLINGS } A Thread For Writers

Postby qwill. » Mon Jan 19, 2015 4:27 pm

    Previous Username:
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    What you'd like to be called now:
    quill, or qwill is fine c;
    lena also is okay
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