I found an old poem I wrote and I am wondering what you think.
Darkest hour
Reaching from the biggest flame,
Down to the smallest flower,
To the friends who are aleays true,
There to guide us in our darkest hour,
Thank you
{Rainbow Dash} wrote:http://www.chickensmoothie.com/Forum/viewtopic.php?f=57&t=1989622
Please critique,
Thanks!
Cadin Araceli wrote:Heart and Hooves Day Magic (MLP fanfic)
Very good piece when it come to direction and focus. I would see if you could do a little more do add to the girls thoughts beyond just finding their special pony. And maybe in later chapters explore a bit about the influence their special pony has on them. There wasn't many spelling errors, one or two, but go ahead and read through to fix those up. I can't say much for keeping to character as I don't watch the show, but the characters you have laid out are consistent. Beyond that, I don't have anything. Feel free to ask me any question or concerns you have with your piece of course!
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