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Re: A Horse's Life

Postby Saphira344 » Sat Jan 21, 2012 1:13 pm

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Re: A Horse's Life

Postby Ourpawprints » Sat Jan 21, 2012 1:25 pm

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"You shout it out,
But I can't hear a word you say
I'm talking loud not saying much
I'm criticized but all your bullets ricochet
You shoot me down, but I get up

I'm bulletproof, nothing to lose
Fire away, fire away
Ricochet, you take your aim
Fire away, fire away
You shoot me down but I won't fall
I am titanium"
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Re: A Horse's Life

Postby Ourpawprints » Sun Jan 22, 2012 5:33 am

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"You shout it out,
But I can't hear a word you say
I'm talking loud not saying much
I'm criticized but all your bullets ricochet
You shoot me down, but I get up

I'm bulletproof, nothing to lose
Fire away, fire away
Ricochet, you take your aim
Fire away, fire away
You shoot me down but I won't fall
I am titanium"
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Re: A Horse's Life

Postby Ourpawprints » Sun Jan 22, 2012 8:38 am

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"You shout it out,
But I can't hear a word you say
I'm talking loud not saying much
I'm criticized but all your bullets ricochet
You shoot me down, but I get up

I'm bulletproof, nothing to lose
Fire away, fire away
Ricochet, you take your aim
Fire away, fire away
You shoot me down but I won't fall
I am titanium"
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Re: A Horse's Life

Postby Ourpawprints » Sun Jan 22, 2012 9:33 am

bump
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"You shout it out,
But I can't hear a word you say
I'm talking loud not saying much
I'm criticized but all your bullets ricochet
You shoot me down, but I get up

I'm bulletproof, nothing to lose
Fire away, fire away
Ricochet, you take your aim
Fire away, fire away
You shoot me down but I won't fall
I am titanium"
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Re: A Horse's Life

Postby Ourpawprints » Sun Jan 22, 2012 12:10 pm

bump
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"You shout it out,
But I can't hear a word you say
I'm talking loud not saying much
I'm criticized but all your bullets ricochet
You shoot me down, but I get up

I'm bulletproof, nothing to lose
Fire away, fire away
Ricochet, you take your aim
Fire away, fire away
You shoot me down but I won't fall
I am titanium"
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Re: A Horse's Life

Postby jessamina. » Sun Jan 22, 2012 2:57 pm

    I suggest you change the red color of your font. It can turn off a lot of people since the color red is bright and it doesn't really look appealing when on paragraphs. It hurts the eyes.

    But so far I think the story is nice.
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Re: A Horse's Life

Postby [Braveheart] » Sun Jan 22, 2012 3:07 pm

I like it I feel bad for Amber.
Last edited by [Braveheart] on Tuesday, August 18th, 4008, edited 8000 times in total.
Reason: Nobody wants to hear that much about horses.
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Hello! I am a
lady
who
wants to be
called
Ellie,
please? I am
a Leo and a Gryffindor.
I love all
horses, and
animals
(except for hippos)
but my
heart belongs
to my cats and horse Cheyenne.
She\Her or they\them.
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Re: A Horse's Life

Postby Ourpawprints » Sun Jan 22, 2012 3:33 pm

its not a very bright red although the blue on the Index I should probably fix
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I'm talking loud not saying much
I'm criticized but all your bullets ricochet
You shoot me down, but I get up

I'm bulletproof, nothing to lose
Fire away, fire away
Ricochet, you take your aim
Fire away, fire away
You shoot me down but I won't fall
I am titanium"
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Re: A Horse's Life

Postby [Braveheart] » Sun Jan 22, 2012 3:39 pm

this is my own horse story, thanks for you I decided to create my own!!


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Reason: Nobody wants to hear that much about horses.
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Hello! I am a
lady
who
wants to be
called
Ellie,
please? I am
a Leo and a Gryffindor.
I love all
horses, and
animals
(except for hippos)
but my
heart belongs
to my cats and horse Cheyenne.
She\Her or they\them.
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