|✘| swindle v.2 [OLD THREAD]

[Silverhart]

I think the rule of thumb is that if you want the audience to remember something, you show it to them three times. So three "hints" to her underlying character may be a good place to start. ^^ But I agree, it can be a delicate balance. You want her to be defensive with Vin of course, but you don't want her to be defensive toward the reader. XP

And no problem. I'm glad I could be of some help. ^^ Some people don't always appreciate honest constructive criticism, but I personally think that every writer, no matter how good, has room to improve. You can always try asking people specific questions when asking for critique - such as if a certain scene works, or how the pacing feels, what was their least favorite part, if the imagery works, if any parts are confusing or dull etc. Sometimes when just asking for feedback in general you don't get the answers that are going to help you the most. If there's a part you don't feel is working, but can't figure out why, that's a good thing to point out when asking for some critique. And of course, you may get different answers depending on who you're asking - a writer's opinion may be different from a reader's opinion, which will be different from an editor's opinion.

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Updated ~
Chapter nine shuffled and completed
[unless I decide to add a storm at some point...]

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Update ~
Chapter Ten added
Warren pls
your opinion is not needed
Warren
Stahp

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Updated ~
Interlude added and completed:
Vin: July-September 1707

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i was previously not a fan of pirate stories.
but i am now.

Yay, thank you! <3
How far have you gotten, out of curiosity? :3
Personally, I think chapter five is where is started to get interesting x]

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Oh, nice! It actually makes me happy that it captured your interest so quickly :DD
I guess the more I write the more I like it and the more the beginning sounds dull lol
but this is only a first draft so I have time to make it better x]
I'm working on Chapter Eleven now!

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AHhhh, so nooow we see how he got on this adventure.

What if i have three favorite characters? xD

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Yiss!
And I suppose I should have added more options to check? Lol
Who are they? x]

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xD I don't, just joking. ;P Although, Sam is very halarious... Anyway, it would be Vin and Scarlet.

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Oh x]
Vin is gettin all the love! Lol
Sam accidentally became that character that I talk through
I was like, of all the characters to channel my thoughts...
It had to be him
Siiiigh

EDIT: New song added to the soundtrack!
I also got the awesomest idea for another picture
[As if I don't draw them enough already...]

Also, if anyone else has song suggestions, drawing requests, fanart, fanfic, anything, I'll add a fan spot ont eh reference post and gladly take ideas <3

ANOTHER EDIT [woooah]: Ok I drew the thing.
Well, I sketched the thing.
It didn't quite turn out how I imagined so idk if I should color it or not since that takes a while x.x
What do you guys think?
http://th01.deviantart.net/fs71/PRE/i/2 ... 83lxyr.png