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Re: The Little Girl in the Big City { Comments welcomed! }

Postby Ice Flower » Fri May 24, 2013 1:28 am

◕ ‿ ◕ wrote:Oh yeah i kind of thought they would meet, but she'll get so bossy he'll eventually end up smacking her as well! this story is getting better and better!

Well if that happens to her I wouldn't be surprised
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Postby Roux- » Fri May 24, 2013 2:00 pm

Chapter 15

Ari

It was only two in the afternoon when our movie marathon ended. I really enjoyed it, although only three minutes into Children of the Corn, the third movie, Kendall and I ran out of popcorn and couldn't get more because it kept interrupting the movie, according to Madelyn. "Hey, why don't we practice for your Robobank Arena performance?" Madelyn asked, getting up. I shrugged, and she led Kendall and me to a room the back of the house, and it was the game room. There was a small karaoke stage, an xbox, wii, pool table, and so many other things. It was awesome! "So.." Madelyn said, hooking up the microphone, "What song?" I thought for a moment, then knew which one. "Leave the Pieces." She nodded, and pulled up two chairs and Kendall sat down.
I walked up onto the stage, and took a deep breath, imagining myself at Robobank. I began to strum the guitar, and began.

The song. Play it while you read, this is what she sounds like.

You're not sure that you love me
But you're not sure enough to let me go
Baby it ain't fair you know
To just keep me hangin' 'round

You say you don't wanna hurt me
Don't want to see my tears
So why are you still standing here
Just watching me drown

And it's alright, yeah I'll be fine
Don't worry 'bout this heart of mine
Just take your love and hit the road
There's nothing you can do or say
You're gonna break my heart anyway
So just leave the pieces when you go

You can drag out the heartache
Baby you can make it quick
Really get it over with
And just let me move on

Don't concern yourself
With this mess you've left for me
I can clean it up, you see
Just as long as you're gone



You not making up your mind
Is killing me and wasting time
I need so much more than that
Yeah, yeah, yeah, yeah, yeah



Leave the pieces when you go
Oh, yeah
Leave the pieces when you go
yeah, yeah, yeah, yeah, yeah
yeah, yeah, yeah, yeah, yeah
Leave the pieces when you go
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Postby mouse? » Fri May 24, 2013 2:08 pm

Another good chapter! :clap: SO exited for next chapter! ;)
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Postby Luna~tic » Fri May 24, 2013 4:51 pm

Can't wait for the next chapter.
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Postby Jimmy Neutron » Sun May 26, 2013 5:04 am

Indeed good chapter!
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Postby Roux- » Sun May 26, 2013 5:16 am

Chapter 16 will be posted sometime today. Sorry for making y'all wait, life has been a little hectic!
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Postby Jimmy Neutron » Sun May 26, 2013 11:38 am

Catori wrote:
Chapter 16 will be posted sometime today. Sorry for making y'all wait, life has been a little hectic!
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Cool can't wait to read it!
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Postby chickenz. » Fri May 31, 2013 11:31 am

◕ ‿ ◕ wrote:
Catori wrote:
Chapter 16 will be posted sometime today. Sorry for making y'all wait, life has been a little hectic!
~ Catori

Cool can't wait to read it!

Me too!!!!

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Postby Luna~tic » Fri May 31, 2013 1:56 pm

Soon, my little chapter, soon you will appear. . . *Strokes invisible chapter 16*
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Postby Roux- » Fri May 31, 2013 2:21 pm

Chapter 16

Ari

Before my alarm clock could go off, I shot out of bed like a ninja. My feet hit the floor, and I was met by a zombie in the mirror of my room. I was still in my outfit from last night, and my hair was all over the place. Something smelled funny, and I smelled my arm, and cringed. I checked the clock, it was 6:30. Good, no one hasn't taken a shower yet so all the hot water is still on. I grabbed some clothes, and rushed to my bathroom and showered.

I got out, dried my hair, and dressed in one of my favorite outfits. The shorts were a light blue, and I put on black flats. Then I put on a pretty floral shirt, and a black quarter sleeve jacket that flowed to my bikini line. Then I put on some mascara and eye liner to make my eyes stand out. Today I was going to impress. Yes, today was the first I were to perform at Robobank in Bakersfield! When I walked out, a clattering noise from the kitchen. Curious, I crept downstairs to see Kendall pacing and whispering something to Madelyn when he noticed me.

"Kendall?" I asked, reaching the stairs. I was met with a pair of arms wrapped around me, Kendall's chest blocking my view. "Hey, Ari-boo!" he said, "Let's go shopping!" Madelyn suddenly said, and whipped me around and dragged me out the door, not letting me see the living room and kitchen. For wearing heels, Madelyn sure has a grip! I wonder where she's taking me...


A/N: So, there's your chapter 16! I am so so so sorry for not updating.
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