My songs

[Angel-of-music]

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[Angel-of-music]

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[broker]

Mehhh..
Okay, you are now cool sauce. These songs are wonderful! How do you do it? And add me to that fan list or I'll steal all of your Chicken smoothie pets.

[$cratch]

Very good,nice writing.

[Angel-of-music]

Thank you both another song is up, by the way

[anarchy, inc.]

These are very nice, I'm a songwriter too. I have to say, though, they may be a bit wordy. No offense intended, I support you!

[Angel-of-music]

Yay, a critque for once! I've been looking for someone to actually say something other than the fact that they are good Thanks 3 to go

[anarchy, inc.]

^^ no problem. I liked the first one, but see, the thing is, if this came on the radio,I would love it, I would never be able to remember all the words, if I say, bought your album. That's what I mean. Maybe if you cut out a verse and added a chorus repeat. Picture people singing your songs, that's what I do. If I think they'd trip over the lyrics too often, it's too wordy. If they get bored, you need more. If they headbang/rock out, it's perrfect!
Sorry if I confused you.
-White

[Angel-of-music]

It's fine I'm working on fixing up my songs to make some shorter and fit a tempo better, since some of the longer sentences don't fit with the rest of the beat unless they are very fast.

[Angel-of-music]

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