The Ugly Princess(es)

[ratsy]

Cool!

[Roonil Wazlib]

Bump

[Just Artemis]

Very nice!~

If I may, from one writer to another, make a few suggestions?

I like the style you've used, and you don't put 'So-and-so said, "this" "That" So-and-so said back.' Which I've seen in a lot of people's writing. In some parts, however, things are incorrect in grammar and punctuation. Try not to use too many nouns/overstate them. It's alright to use "it, his, her, etc" sometimes, just don't let it completely fill up your page!~

Hope this helps!~

TRJ

PS: When is the next part coming out?

[scootercore]

*le stalk* XD I need to stalk this now k thanks!

[Roonil Wazlib]

@Frozen and Jackal
Thank you both :3 I can't promise to update it on a regular schedule, but I might every now and then. Thanks for giving it a look!