• A poet's clouded mind - poems from an aspiring young poet

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Re: • A poet's clouded mind - poems from an aspiring young p

Postby livingdeadhorror » Fri Jun 23, 2017 4:59 am

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Postby livingdeadhorror » Sat Jun 24, 2017 10:50 pm

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Postby livingdeadhorror » Sun Jun 25, 2017 11:11 pm

Bump! Posted a new one on 1st pg!
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Postby Ranger of the North » Mon Jun 26, 2017 1:30 pm

A.u.r.e.u.m wrote:Bump! Posted a new one on 1st pg!
Bring Some Knives, yes? I like it; the imagery in it is really cool!
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Re: • A poet's clouded mind - poems from an aspiring young p

Postby livingdeadhorror » Wed Jun 28, 2017 8:47 am

Ranger of the North wrote:
A.u.r.e.u.m wrote:Bump! Posted a new one on 1st pg!
Bring Some Knives, yes? I like it; the imagery in it is really cool!

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Postby livingdeadhorror » Sat Jul 01, 2017 7:34 am

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Re: • A poet's clouded mind - poems from an aspiring young p

Postby livingdeadhorror » Mon Jul 17, 2017 12:43 am

My way of coping_
Living in a fantasy
Isn't all what it seems.
High expectations- that's all I have.
High hopes;
Active imagination.
The best possible outcome,
As I expect so much from all around me.
I know that it's untrue.
I know that it's unfair.
But whats so bad
about wanting something
good to happen?
Why is it so burdenous
To imagine a better future?
I feel like i'm a villain
In a film,
I need to start
Accepting my reality
From today.
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Re: • A poet's clouded mind - poems from an aspiring young p

Postby livingdeadhorror » Mon Jul 17, 2017 12:44 am

"When I'm wrapped
Late at night
in my bed,
I have these thoughts.."
If I'm not in love with you,
Why does it feel so right when we kiss?
Maybe I just miss,
The old you- the one i used to talk to..
I have these thoughts
That maybe we can get through this,
Though you may kiss me,
Is this love your lie?
Maybe you're my fairytale,
My secret to keep,
My nightmare,
My starlight-
guide me and find me a home.
I have these thoughts
That maybe we can get through this,
Though you may kiss me,
Is this love your lie?
I have these thoughts
That maybe we can get through this,
Though you may kiss me,
Is this love your lie?
This love isn't a Lie.
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Re: • A poet's clouded mind - poems from an aspiring young p

Postby livingdeadhorror » Mon Jul 17, 2017 12:45 am

For a year,
I thought I was in love.
For six months,
I was sure I was in love.
For a week,
I was certain I was in love.
For a day,
all I thought about was you.
For a second,
I thought I was already yours.
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