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Re: Pinnacle

Postby AngelInWaiting » Fri Feb 25, 2011 1:00 pm

*attempting to scare Alex off by waving hands crazily* SCARE SCARE!

xD jk, jk
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Re: Pinnacle

Postby Trick; » Fri Feb 25, 2011 1:01 pm

AngelInWaiting wrote:*attempting to scare Alex off by waving hands crazily* SCARE SCARE!

xD jk, jk

I'm no trouble :( just that shes meannnnn
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Re: Pinnacle

Postby AngelInWaiting » Fri Feb 25, 2011 1:03 pm

haha xD you guys sound like you're good friends
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Re: Pinnacle

Postby King Abi » Fri Feb 25, 2011 1:05 pm

AlexGateau wrote:Honestly, it's a very good plot line, and a very good writing style, but your sentence structure is horrible. (i would know, you write kinda like me. Sorta) And it's not very catching in the beggining, I got rather bored and had to force myself to keep reading. Constructive Critiscm, anyone?


To be quite honest i like a lack of sentance structure :P if its broken up too much it gives me a headache :/ and actually i liked the beggining of the story :L tis what hooked me so meh *casually sticks out tongue in ultra-mature insult* ;)

@Dragonsrule: i think someone's getting a little scared that someone's story doesnt quite match the awesome factor- am i right ;) *steals mr.pointy just incase AlexGateau decides to attack like a rampaging bull* (tis just meant as a competitive jest chuck)

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Re: Pinnacle

Postby Ser'reth » Fri Feb 25, 2011 1:17 pm

*travels back in time for a moment*

*foams at mouth* Hiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiisssssssssssssssssssssssssssss

Pinnacle is the best! omnomnom

What? I'm not obsessed. What could've given you that obsurd idea? ;]

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Re: Pinnacle

Postby DRdoctorlady » Fri Feb 25, 2011 1:39 pm

I laugh in enjoyment and joy.
:D
Yeah, she's a pretty good friend of mine. Just we're currently having our spat.
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Ser: *pats on the head soothingly but you teleport away* Ah, well, I'lll give you Ser treats later :D
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Re: Pinnacle

Postby DRdoctorlady » Sat Feb 26, 2011 12:10 pm

I haft neglected poor Pinnacle long enough.
Eet needs love and affection to grow into the maniacal, soul sucking monster it will be.
*pats Pinnacle on the head*

Chapter 2e
-------->Continuation
After a while grocery shopping, Ice and I had three nice boxes full of preserved food, good enough for a week or two of food.
So three heavy boxes=three people needed to carry them, and by last count, I observed two people and went to find Dagger.
I poked my head out the door and noticed that Dagger wasn't by the puke stain he had created. Ughh.
Trotting around the corner of the building, I see him sitting against the cement wall, staring at the sky, quiet for once. I pause and observe him quietly, waiting for him to notice me. When he doesn't move, I clear my throat.
"Dagger-" he snaps his head towards me and fixes me with a pointed stare and I falter, wondering why he's all serious all of a sudden. Do toxic fish fumes change a person or something?
"Uhmm... We've got food in there..." I say. He's still glaring at me.
"Its all gone," He murmurs after a while, moodily setting his chin on his knee.
"What?" I ask stupidly.
"What do you think?" He says, for once not smart alecky. He sweeps his arm at the general area around us.
"Everything. My family. My friends. My life. And you know what? There aren't others to really care about in this s***hole, and the human race as a whole has been obliterated," He says quietly. "The ones I care about, the ones you care about-" I wince and shut my eyes. He speaks a bit faster. "They are gone, and aren't coming back. You know this, I know this, but we ignore this. And while the lingering remaints of our society are being taken back by the wild, we're sitting here thinking about our own lives, not our place in the world... So what's the point?"
Okay, a moment ago I was in a good mood. Now I'm being forced to...
Dagger seems to take my silence as an invitation to keep speaking.
"Why? Why? What happens next? We're going to live for a while, then we're going to die. Nobody will be there to know we died, and we'll be no different from the other six billion people on earth. Which makes me wonder. What happens to the last one left? And then I wonder... Am I going to end up insane?" He looks back up to the sky.
"And the thing is, this is unavoidable. You can run away from most other things... But you can't run when everywhere else is the same. So..."
"Why?" I ask, struggling to keep my mind out of the pit of despair Dagger's was occupying.
"Why?"
"Why now? Why think about this?"
"I don't know. Why live in ignorence? What else is there to do now?"

((woah, deep... Sorry XD I'm in one of those moods today))
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Re: Pinnacle

Postby King Abi » Sat Feb 26, 2011 12:22 pm

awwwh Dagger :'(

Dagger, oh fictional charecter you- i am hugging you with my mind, feeeeel my brainy embrace, feeeel iiit
*does voodoo dance around my amazing gold dented spoon*


you should include that in the story, like-

Dagger shivered suddenly
"cold?", i asked, still feeling slightly awkward from the previous convosation,
"no, i- it felt like i was being hugged O_O"

teehee, anywhoo... *runs off to avoid being slapped by Dragonsrule* :D
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Re: Pinnacle

Postby DRdoctorlady » Sat Feb 26, 2011 12:29 pm

I lol'ed like a person having an epileptic seizure of happiness :'D
I would so do that XD
I can imagine it now.
"OH MY BAGEEZUS I"M BEING HAUNTED BY HUGSSSSS"
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Re: Pinnacle

Postby King Abi » Sat Feb 26, 2011 12:33 pm

yeah imagine- "...the ghost hugger again huh>"
"...yeah, it doesnt seem to get the idea of PERSONAL SPACE" *Dagger does crazy jig like he has spiders all over him to attempt to rid himself of phantom hugger* tehe XD
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