Need a name (please read)

[Caster_HD]

No more story?

[AninaAna]

No there will be more of me story I was just grounded for the hols so I couldn't post anymore, or write anymore for that matter, I've been writing it on my iPad. Hopefully will have some more done soon though! And the names are good I like 'unknown days' so far anymore suggestions?

[LEAVING]

No offensive, but it's a bit like a giant wall of text. It's hard to read, and you probably need to add a bit better grammar, spelling and punctuation. But it has lots of potential!

[AninaAna]

Yes I will admit I'm terrible with my paragraphs though I have been trying to remember to put them in, and I've been writing it up on my iPad so there's really no grammar correction that I know of but I thought the spelling was fine, I'll try better from now though I promise thanks! I like all feedback wether its positive or negative, as long as its constructive because all feedback helps me to learn where my faults are so I can correct them and be a better writer! Thank you, I shouldn't be too long with posting my next bit.

[FREE PETS300]

Its really good!

[AninaAna]

Thank you!

[Caster_HD]

I was thinking of a new name..what about Freaks Are Us?...Or maybe The day my life went up in flames?

[AninaAna]

Yeah they're both pretty good but not quite what I'm going for sorry, I do like them though when I get enough book name suggestions that I like I'm going to put them up in a poll and see which gets the most votes, and maybe use that one. I'm working on the next bit now.

[AninaAna]

Okay this isn't all of the next bit, but I figured I'd give you guys something to read while you waited for the rest.



"Mike?" I looked around me, I still lay in the hospital bed, and I was still covered in bandages, the tv on the wall had offered no comfort, and so I had long switched it off, and began reading a magazine that had been sitting on the table beside my bed, Mike looked up, he had been leaning on my bed with his head in his arms, trying to make a deal with sleep,

"yeah?" he asked groggily, I felt guilty about the bags under his eyes, as if it were my fault that sleep was refusing to find him, I looked towards the door,

"I think I heard someone knock" Mike listened for a moment before shrugging,

"I don't hear anything" I shrugged back at him

"I was so sure I heard something" Mike looked at me and I remembered him telling me about his 'bird-like' hearing, he said he can hear things no human could, so I decided to trust him when he said he didn't hear anything. The door opened and a young man walked in, I looked at Mike and he seemed to be as surprised as I was to see him,

"hello?" Mike stood uncertainly, a frown plastered on his forehead, "can we help you?" the man definitely wasn't a doctor, that much I could tell, but I didn't recognize him at all,

"Yes Mike, I'm sure you can help me" I was surprised, I hadn't realized Mike knew this man and evidently neither did he,

"how do you know my name?" Mike sounded suspicious,

"why Mike I know a lot about you, I know that you and Kisha here are together, and I also know that you are both who I am looking for" I frowned

"you're, looking for us?" it seemed strange that this man I didn't even know had been looking for me

"well, I was looking for you, I've found you now, so theoretically speaking I'm no longer looking for you" I shook my head

"you think we're stupid or something? You haven't even told us your name since you already know ours" Mike helped me to sit up as he spoke, I could hear the anger in his voice, and gave him a look telling him to calm down.

"stupid? Oh no, Mike, you have me all wrong, if anything, I think you two are the smartest kids I've ever met!" I glared at him

"kids? I'll have you know mister, that I am seventeen years old, not even close to being a 'kid' as you call us" I crossed my arms angrily at his smirk,

"yes Kisha, I'm sure, anyway, back on topic. My name is Dr McKoy and, like I said before, you two are just the talented people I am after" I heard Mike scoff beside me,

"and why would you be after us, might I ask?"

"Mike, I know you like to be protective over yourself and Kisha, but please hear me out will you? I came to ask if either of you would like to join my....... Organization, you might say" Dr McKoy confused me, at times his speech resembled that of a teen like Mike and myself, and at other times he spoke like a sophisticated 'gentleman' of sorts.

"what kind of organization?" I spoke up, cutting in front of Mike as he went to protest.

"thank you Kisha, Brenda?" I looked up as a young, tanned woman walked through the door, she smiled at me as she spoke.

"we call ourselves the 'Rebellion'" the rebellion? I frowned, I hadn't heard of anything like it before, "the Rebellion is a group of mutants who have come together, myself included"

"if you're a mutant than what is your special power?" I rolled my eyes at Mike, he was so untrusting, but then again, I was probably too trusting.

"I will show you, do you see that bag in the corner?" she pointed to Mikes backpack, and we nodded "well, if you watch it, you will see what I can do" we looked towards the worn bag, and Brenda put two fingers to her head, apparently concentrating. I gasped when I saw Mikes bag begin to lift off the ground, and he walked over to it, I could see the skepticism written plain as day over his face as he waved his hand above the bag, presumably looking for strings, the bag dropped to the ground at Mikes feet, and I looked over to Brenda as he began to search his bag over.

"you're a...." I couldn't think of the term and Brenda filled me in

"Telekinetic" and I nodded, Mike just grumbled, something about 'less reason to trust them' or some such nonsense

"brighten up Mike, they could be bad guys kidnapping us"

"yes Kisha, they could be, and that's exactly what I'm worried about, we don't know them, and they seem to know an awful lot about us, it's all just a little off, if you ask me" I rolled my eyes,

"you know I was being sarcastic"

"and you know I'm not, I mean it Kisha, we don't know we can trust these people, even the name suggests something more than just a group of friendly mutants" I sighed, he was being melodramatic, I smiled apologetically to Dr McKoy and Brenda, who nodded in understanding

"don't worry, we've had worse reactions before" Brenda walked up to Mike, who scowled at her and curled his fists threateningly "and you, though you do not trust us, you have not given us an inkling of what you think of the idea" I thought Mike had given a pretty clear impression of what he thought, but apparently not.




Kay so I want opinions! Who do you think is the best Charrie so far, who do you like best and do you hate? What do you think of Kisha (person telling the story if you hadn't guessed) and Mike? And again I love creative criticism so please leave a comment!

[Caster_HD]

Well I dis-like kisha's mother for not liking her own child even when she loved her before...And I would have to say kisha would be my favorite since she catches my interest more then the others. I'm not sure what i think of mike yet but he sounds nice and pretty cute