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[Fichester]

Dramatic ending to Chapter 7! Chapter 8 is definitely going to be short; very short.

[brunsmeier]

I love it. It's really good, one of the best Warrior Cat fanfiction's I've ever seen ^.^

[Fichester]

Thanks! Since I'm going on vaca, the next chapter might be slow to come up.

[Fichester]

The crunch of pebbles underpaw alerted Northstar of her approach. When she saw the shore, she took off, not wanting to face it. She had been able to forget about what happened to Wolfcall-and the rest of her Clan-out of her mind. She ran until she found a spot in the trees where she couldn't hear or see the ocean.
"Northstar?" She was surprised when she recognized the voice of Runningleap. "Northstar are you ok...?"
"Of course I'm not," She replied. "Tell the Clan were heading back into the Valley."
"You are crazy," Runningleap stated bluntly. "You think we're all ok with this? We all lost our friends and family. Not even Talonclaw can say there's no one he misses that was swept of shore. I do agree, you were the only one who lost their mate, and you may be leader, but that doesn't give you the right to force us back into the valley of death because you're afraid!"
Northstar turned around, surprised, and angered. The resentment burning in Runningleap's eyes faded. "You have to let go of the past so you can have a future," she meowed more gently. "It's to late. Wolfcall is gone. But you have to move on. Lingering over him will only hurt you, and everyone else in the Clan, and it won't bring him back. It's to late to save their lives. But you can save our, by letting go. Like it or not, we're going to stay on this shore.
Northstar didn't know what to say, so she nodded vaguely. "We're going to look for Heatherfur," she added, turning away. "Then we're going to meet on the shore. We hope you'll be there," Then she was gone.
Northstar looked after her, remaining silent. Eventually she got to her paws, and headed into the forest. She was playing what Runningleap had said in her head. I agree saying that we would leave was a hasty decision, but why does it matter whether or not I still miss Wolfcall? I'm not hurting anyone. She thought.
"That's right," a voice spoke from behind her. "You're hurting everyone."
Northstar whirled around, to see the white starry tom standing behind her. "Wolfcall?"
"Runningleap was right you know." He meowed.
"I know she's right!" Northstar hissed, turning away.
"I don't just mean about going back to the valley," This brought her attention back to him. "I was talking about letting go."
"But I-"
"You can't bring your Clan down by dwelling over one cat! You can't do it Northstar!" Wolfcall cut her off.
"I'm not dwelling over one cat, I'm morning my entire Clan!" She snarled back.
"No you're not. You didn't morn the cats killed in the avalanche like this. You didn't sit on that peek, desperate to talk to any cat that was swept of the beach. You missed them, same with Snowpatch, Bluelight, Foxtrap, Longfang, Leopardpaw, Cleo, Oliver, and Darkmask, but you didn't keep their deaths in the back of your mind. You are killing you're own Clan, by missing one part of the old one." Wolfcall meowed gently.
Northstar didn't say anything because the StarClan warrior was fading. When he was gone, she turned, to see a cat was watching her. She was a white-and-ginger tabby with heather-colored eyes, and wad crouched down, somewhat trying to hide in the undergrowth. "Him, that tom, he was from StarClan." she said, her soft voice shaking.
Northstar nodded. "You speak with StarClan?"
"Not usually," Northstar replied. "He was my mate. I talk with him, and sometimes a few other cats, but normally medicine cats speak with StarClan."
"Who are you?"
It took Northstar by surprised the she-cat didn't as about medicine cats or anything. "I'm Northstar."
"I'm Heatherfur," She said, stepping out from under the bushes.
"You're Heatherfur? You're the medicine cat from that Clan in the Valley?" She nodded. "Come with me, I know where the rest of your Clan is."
Heatherfur unquestioningly followed Northstar through the forest and onto the shore. They padded in silence on the edge, and soon the gathering Clan appeared on the horizon.
"Heatherfur!" Someone shouted, seeing them coming.
The medicine cat raced ahead. "Snaketalon! Cactuspaw! Owleye! Ravencall!" She shouted excitedly as she ran towards her clanmates. They all greeted her and Northstar, and Larkkit and Cinderkit were bouncing around her, no matter how many times Owleye told them to get out from under her paws.
Once the reunion was over, Birdsong and Snaketalon padded over to her. "Did anyone find a suitable spot for a camp?" Northstar asked them.
"Actually, Icecloud found a perfect spot, but you have final word." Snaketalon meowed.
Northstar turned to the white she-cat, who didn't meet her gaze. "Then by all means Icecloud, lead the way." Icecloud nodded and padded off into the forest, and Northstar padded beside her.
Happy Wolfcall? Northstar thought resentfully. I'm letting go, and moving on.

[Fichester]

Sorry guys, but instead of writing chapters for a while, I'm going to write the short bios for all the characters on the cast page. Though it may not be the story itself, if you catch up with this stuff, you'll find juicy secrets buried away. I've already done Snaketalon's, and have added to Birdsong.
(at the most, the next chapter will come up sometime after vaca ends for me. I promise that if I haven't already, I'll start working on chap. 9 when I get back)
I'll be making a new poll soon, so get your anwsers in while you can.
P.S. ~yes, we need a deputy

~no, Wolfcall isn't deputy because he is dead

~Foxtrap is also dead.

No dead deputys! They don't work! Trust me...

I'm not deleting thoose choices, I'm just going to say, if you vote for one of thooses, you do not care who is deputy. When this poll is over, I will take either all the choice deputys or the ones with the most votes, to be put in a second poll. Then you guys pick your favorite. (I haven't yet decided who I want to be deputy, and I probably won't make up my mind )

Ok, I changed it. If you don't care, don't vote.

[Fichester]

FINALLY! I finished the Cast. You can decide whether or not to read it, but I suggest you do. I must warn you, there are spoilers and secrets, so if you want to play along with the cats and be kept in the dark, be my geust. Chapter 9 will be up soon.

[Dark Moon]

I love this story!More please!

[redkuchen]

I love this, it is way better then some, keep it up!

[Fichester]

"Hey, Northstar!" The grey she-cat looked down, and saw Snaketalon waiting for her. She leaped down from the branch she was perched on to stand beside the calico she-cat.
"What's wrong?" Northstar asked.
"Have you seen Larkpaw?" Snaketalon panted. She looked worn out, and Northstar could help but smile. Ever since she made Snaketalon Larkpaw's mentor, she had been chasing the white apprentice around. It wasn't like Larkpaw didn't like to train, but she loves to run off out of camp without having anyone come with her.
"I haven't seen her, have you checked with Cinderpaw and Cactuspelt?" She suggested.
"Heatherfur said he's getting herbs, and I saw you before I saw Cactuspelt." Snaketalon replied.
"Did someone say my name?" The two she-cats turned to see the spikey-furred warrior.
"Have you seen Larkpaw?"
"Well, I, uh....how urgent is it that you find her?" Cactuspelt stammered.
"Very!" Snaketalon hissed. "We're supposed to be battle training right now!"
"Well...she said she was going to the drop-off..." The drop-off was a rather high sandy bank that overlooked a section of the beach, and then ended in a steep wall. It could be dangerous, if you were to fall, and land in the wrong spot, you could break your neck.
"Why in the name of StarClan would you let her go there!" Northstar hissed.
"I don't think you give her enough credit! She can take care of herself," Cactuspelt replied.
"I don't have time for an explination, I have to go find her," Snaketalon pelted out of camp, turning towards the drop off.
Northstar turned back to Cactuspelt. He was looking at his paws, and his tail was drooping. "I'm sorry Northstar, I shouldn't of let her go."
She knew she could argue with that, he should've made her come back and wait for Snaketalon. But she knew he didn't mean any harm to come to her, he just didn't want to step on her fun. "Don't worry, I'm sure she's fine. She would've figured out a way to get there anyway."
Cactuspelt brightened up a bit. "Hey Cactuspelt!" They both turned to see Birdsong. "Rabbitcatch, Runningleap, and I are going hunting. You want to come?"
Cactuspelt looked back at Northstar, seeing if she wanted him to stay. When she nodded, he bounded over to the three warriors. "Sure!"
Northstar smiled to herself. The Clan was finally pulling together. Maybe, one day, things will become normal. The horrors of what happened will just disappear. She then saw Icecloud and Ravencall padding across camp towards the fresh-kill pile. Well, as close to normal as we can. Some cats, like Icecloud and Cactuspelt, still showed effects from them. Cactuspelt was starting to become more care-free, but it sometimes seemed like something was on his mind. Icecloud wasn't spewing what sounded like prophecies and omens anymore, but she was still rather, strange.
"Northstar!" She turned to see Heatherfur standing at the entrance to the medicine cat den.
"What is it?" The silver tabby asked, padding over.
"Can I speak with you?" Northstar nodded, and followed the ginger-and-white she-cat into the medicine cat den. "I just had a vision."
"Really? What...what happened?"
"I was taken to StarClan's forest, but I was awake. I saw the outlines' of lots of cats. I recognized a lot of them from RockClan, and I assume the rest were from ArcticClan." Heatherfur began. "Then some of them stepped out. That white tom you were talking to when we met, Wolfcall, Foxtrap, Longfang, Leopardpaw, Darkmask, Bluelight, Snowpatch, Oakstar, Thrushfeather, Meadowflower, and Cloudshadow; plus some kittypets. They said their names were Cleo, Oliver, and Angel. They said they lived with Ozzy, and that Cleo and Oliver came with the Clan."
Northstar nodded, curiousity pricking her pelt. "So, Wolfcall said straight out front that just because you'd found a safe place for the Clan doesn't mean your finished. He said that you still need to find the sun cat, so you can put the moon cat at rest. He said you'd know what that meant."
She felt her pelt start to bristle. Why can't he just leave me alone! It's not my problem anymore!
"Um, Northstar, Heatherfur..." The to she-cats turnted to see Ravencall pushing his way into the den. "Before you say anything, just hear me out. I overheard you two talking, and I have something to confess."
Northstar took a deep breath and paused before responding. "Well, go on Ravencall."
"I...I am the moon cat. Snowpatch and I have kept it a secret since I got the necklace. When we found out we'd be moving, and since Snowpatch was going, I had her take it there and hide it. But the whole disaster happened, we went the other way, and she was killed before she could tell me where the necklace was." Ravencall replied quietly, almost inaudible.
"But...you...you mean you don't know where the necklace is! This is bad, this is very bad. The three of us are going to have to go search for it. We have to find it!" Northstar panicked.
"It's not over," All three cats turned to see Icecloud standing in the entrance.
This was one of the times when the strange side of Icecloud came out. Ravencall got to his paws and padded towards her. He always could tell something was up when Icecloud was like this.
Before Northstar could ask, to cries split the air. "Northstar!"
"Mom!"
Northstar recognized Snaketalon and Larkpaw's voices. She shoved past Heatherfur, Ravencall, and Icecloud and burst into the clearing, scared out of her mind by her daughter's terrified tone. "What's wrong?" she demanded.
"Owleye is dead!" Larkpaw shrieked.
"What?"
"His body is by the drop-off, come on!" Snaketalon hissed, turning tail and charging out of camp.
"Larkpaw, go find Birdsong's hunting patrol. Tell her what happened." Northstar turned, and turned to her medicine cat. "Come with me,"
"Larkpaw, Cinderpaw should be out looking for herbs. Get him to come with you, and then have him come to the drop-off with Birdsong." Heatherfur meowed before following Northstar out.
"There's something else, I didn't want to say this infront of Ravencall, but there was one last thing Wolfcall said." Heatherfur meowed to Northstar once they had left the camp behind. "He said there was danger. There are two cats lurking. They don't know Clan loyalty or forgiveness. Both are willing to do anything to get what they want. There won't be peace with them here."
Before Northstar could respond, Snaketalon called back to them. "Talonclaw was the one who told us. He said he found Owleye's body at the bottom of the drop-off. He was pretty beat up."
Northstar skidded to a hault at what she saw as the burst through the trees. He really is gone.

[Fichester]

This is still a work in progress, so check back often to see if more was added.

Chapter 9 has been finished! Chapter 10 will soon make an appearance!