DARKSTORM |Warriors| PLEASE READ AND COMMENT!

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1. Cliffpaw
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2. Otterstar
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3. Leafpaw
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4. Darkface.
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5. Meadowstar
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6. Sweetpaw
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7. Mossflower
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8. Whitepaw/storm
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9. No one, I like all!
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10. NO CAT, YOU WEIRDO!
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Re: Dark Storm |Warriors| PLEASE READ AND COMMENT!

Postby -Frost- » Mon Feb 06, 2012 11:36 am

Thank you, Megaham ^^

It's not really written almost exactly like Erin Hunter's type of writing, like yours is, but I guess it'll have to do.

Anyone has a new name suggestion for the story?
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Re: Dark Storm |Warriors| PLEASE READ AND COMMENT!

Postby Malédiction » Mon Feb 06, 2012 12:05 pm

I have one on my story. "The 4 Clans' Trust"? Because they trust their deputies to care for the clan with them, but then it is broken. I added a chapter to my story. Can't wait till you comment on it! And I luff it so far! I know I already said that, but I felt like saying it again! Please note that I am probably the most random person you have ever met on CS. In real life, everyone says that about me. Becuz it's true..... :twisted:
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Re: Dark Storm |Warriors| PLEASE READ AND COMMENT!

Postby -Frost- » Mon Feb 06, 2012 1:51 pm

Haha, don't worry, 'Everyone's weird in their own little weird ways.' XD

My RL bestie and me created that phrase. We're completely random too. So, don't worry, you're in good company *Nods*

Not sure about that idea....only wanted Darkface to be..umm..evil but I might make DarkClan's deputy evil too XD

If you noticed, I use XD alot XD
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Re: Dark Storm |Warriors| PLEASE READ AND COMMENT!

Postby -Frost- » Tue Feb 07, 2012 9:44 am

Chapter 3: The Gathering

"Former LakeClanners, I gather you here to discuss about the problem in our clan. Does any of you remember what happened?" Lakestar sat next to the other former leader of LakeClan, Beverstar. Of course, Lakestar knew, but he wanted to hear from the cats that had been recently killed. "Those, foxdung traitors! I knew Foxheart was acting funny. I was killed by Darkface, Meadowclan deputy. As we all know, he stripped Otterstar out of most of his lives! He only has three lives from that tresspasser." Cliffpaw growled, her green eyes flashing with fury. "Calm down, Cliffpaw. It's bad enough we had to die already, but cussing isn't going to help." Lionpaw sighed, his pelt touching Cliffpaw's. "We were all drugged. I remember dozily awaking up and a black cat was on top of me. Just because I could do anything, he killed me." Lionpaw softly meowed, looking away. "That's almost the same with me, only I tried to fight my attacker off." Moonfeather, the former medicine cat, added. "What can we do? How is LakeClan going to survive with so many of us in StarClan?" Cliffpaw asked, not realizing yet that starclanners could see into the future. "We'll soon find out enough." Beverstar sighed, looking into a pool of water. The rest of the Lakeclanners/starclanners looked and gasped. Something definitely dark and terrible was going to happen to the clans.

Otterstar tiredly jumped onto the meeting branch. An old weeping willow stood near the middle of the camp with a large branch which LakeClan leaders sat on to make an announcement. His clan has just buried their last fallen lakeclanner. Otterstar didn't even have to call out to tell his clanmates about the meeting. They were all gathered around. "LakeClanners, I know it has been rough for us this past day. But we have to trust in StarClan for the future." Otterstar meowed confidently to his clanmates, trying to cheer then up. "Who will go to the gathering tonight, Otterstar?" Raventail quietly asked. "Jane, Leafpaw and myself will go." Otterstar meowed. "Raventail, I need you to stay and guard the entrance. It seems like Mossflower and Jane, you will have to be considered warriors for the clan to survive."

Meadowstar flickered her tail impatiently as she waited on the High Stone on Sliver Island. The island was small, but big enough to host the gathering. It was a rocky island, only a few plants dared to try to live on it. many sliver-colored stones were on the island, giving it the name, Sliver Island. The clans could reach it by what was similar to the Stepping Stones. MeadowClan had been the first to arrive on the island. "Hey!" Dawnpaw excitedly meowed, more to her brother Foxpaw. "The LakeClanners are here!" Meadowstar pricked her ears forward and jumped off the High Stone, padding over to meet the lakeclanners. MeadowClan had always been strong allies with RiverClan, or so she thought. Meadowstar looked to see if there were more LakeClanners coming from the water, but there was no more. It was just Otterstar, the medicine cat apprentice Leafpaw and a she-cat she had never seen before. Sharp glares came from all three of them and that made Meadowstar wonder what had happen to their strong friendship with LakeClan.

Leafpaw wasn't feeling too happy. Sure, just before this all happened, Moonfeather said she was almost done with her training was recieving her full name just the day before. But she missed Moonfeather. Moonfeather had been like a mother to the orphaned she-cat. "Leafpaw, where's your mentor, Moonfeather? Is she not feeling well?" Tansyfur, MeadowClan's medicine cat, anxiously asked Leafpaw. "You'll find out soon enough." She rudely meowed. Leafpaw was angry at the meadowclanners but the hurt look gave by Tansyfur made her feel bad. "I'm sorry. I can't talk right now." She whispered as she padded over to a corner of the island. She just wanted to mope around in the medicine cat den, not go to the gathering.

Otterstar tried not to glare at Darkface, just thinking about the MeadowClan deputy made him want to rip the fur out of him. But something gnawwed at him. Did Meadowstar know what had happened? More importantly, why would she send her deputy to kill LakeClan's leader?

Meadowstar followed Otterstar back to the High Stone. Uncomfortable silence followed as the DarkClanners padded into the island. Normally, the old leader would of talked to Otterstar, they were friends. But she was beginning to wonder if Darkface had done something terrible to the LakeClanners. Nightstar jumped onto the High stone. "Greetings, Meadowstar, Otterstar." The black she-cat purred. Otterstar gave her a strange look as well, it was a hurtful look, Meadowstar could see. Nightstar, too, was confused. Obviously, something had happened behind Nightstar's back as well between her clan and Otterstar's.

The chatter of the gathering grew louder as the ForestClanners padded in. Sweetpaw excitedly bounced over to a group of apprentices. "What are talking about?" She asked a cream tabby apprentice. The other apprentice smiled. "Hi! I'm Dawnpaw. We're just hanging around. That's Foxpaw, my brother and that's Robinpaw and Goldpaw of DarkClan. What's your name?" Sweetpaw grinned. "My name's Sweetpaw." She purred. A yowl above the chatter could be heard. Nightstar had called the gathering.

"Cats of all Clans! Otterstar wishes to speak first. I'm sure all of you, and myself, are wondering what news LakeClan has for us." Nightstar meowed, glancing at Otterstar. Otterstar stepped forward. "I don't like to make accuastions, but a few days ago, we were attacked by Darkface of MeadowClan and DarkClan warriors. Most of the clan had been drugged. Two of our warriors had betrayed us. If you ever see Halfsight and Foxheart's faces, kill them. They are not worthy to live." Otterstar growled.

All cats, except the LakeClanners, gasped. What a horrible accuastion. Was it really true? Meadowstar glared at her deputy, Darkface. She believed it. She was going to have to deal with him on the way back to MeadowClan. Meadowstar believed that LakeClan was vulurable, if they only had this many cats, that either not wounded or dead, to bring to the Gathering, the story must be more horrid than Otterstar wished to tell. No leader liked to blurt out their clan's weaknesses, it would be a danger to their clan.

Darkface growled. "Are you sure it was me? Are you really sure? Because, it could of been one of those DarkClanners, everyone knows they hate LakeClan for severily hurting their deputy in that battle a quarter moon or two." Meadowstar hissed. Thank you Darkface for now enragening the DarkClanners. All the clans knew that no cat dared make DarkClanners angry because you are on their hate list forever. "For your information, my warriors OR apprentices were never near LakeClan territory." Nightstar hissed. Darkface chuckled. "Why don't you ask Moonhunter and Sparrowsong?" Moonhunter, the only warrior mentioned by Darkface that was at the gathering to represent DarkClan, looked down at his paws.

Meadowstar felt sorry for the ForestClanners, they were stuck right in the middle of a three-clan argument. "Moonhunter would never do that!" hissed Horsefoot, a ForestClanner. "The reason he left ForestClan for DarkClan was after he thought he killed one of his clanmates, a young apprentice she-cat named Frostpaw. He didn't. A young MeadowClan apprentice named Darkpaw was the one that murdered Frostpaw, not him! Everyone knows that Moonhunter and Darkface has a friendship, but no one knows what Darkface does to his so-called "friend."

Cat's voices grew louder as one bickered with another. "QUIET! EVERYONE! CALM DOWN!" Meadowstar yowled until her voice was hoarse but no one heard her.

While chaos ruled, Darkface chuckled. No wonder Frostpaw had called him, "The King of Chaos." Frostpaw had agreed with his plan, that is, until that mousebrained StarClan regilion claimed another believer. The black tom creeped up to the loud-mouthed Horsefoot. She would pay for telling the truth. Darkface aimed pounced. Horsefoot struggled, but the kill was an easy one. "Stealth." Darkstorm had told him. "Is a cat's best ally." Darkface agreed with his Dark Forest mentor. Darkface jumped off and yowled. "Look! Horsefoot's dead! I bet one of those cocky DarkClan warriors killed her!" Darkface was good at changing his voice.


Meanwhile, in StarClan, four cats watched the chaos from a poud. Darkstar, founder of DarkClan, growled. "Lakestar, Foreststar, shouldn't we cover the moon? Perhaps some faithful starclan believer will recoginze it." The brown tabby she-cat bristled her tail in anger. How dare that Darkface cause this chaos! "Calm down, Darkstar. Even I wish so, but we must wait a little, you know about the prophecy." Beverstar, the second leader of LakeClan, hissed. "Forget the prophecy! We must make sure Otterstar, Leafpaw and Jane survive this! We never realized what was going on with this Darkface until it was too late, the prophecy won't help. We'll just have to make another one." Foreststar growled, his fur sticking out.

Sweetpaw uncomfortably avoided Dawnpaw's attacks. She couldn't believe that a few minutes ago, that she-cat had been friendly towards her. Suddenly, a clouds loomed over the sky, covering up the moon. A bolt of lightring hit Sliver Island, narrowly avoiding all of the cats. The fighting stopped as the cats shivered in the suddenly cold wind. Raindrops came down, faster and faster. "Cats of all the clans! This gathering's over! Perhaps you, cats of all clans including MY clan, will think next thing about attacking on the night of peace." Meadowstar hissed as the clan cats scattered off quickly back to their clan camps. Meadowstar jumped down, but with the increasing muddy sand bank caused her to slip and twist her paw. The wild waves lapped at her, tormenting her to come into the lake's waters. Meadowstar groaned and struggled to stand up. Through her blurry vision, she saw Darkface. "Darkface, help me." She croaked. Darkface evilly grinned. "You know, I think the fishes are hungry for catmeat and it looks like this old bundle of fur and bones ready for its forever rest." He whispered into Meadowstar's ears as he pushed her into the water.

Meadowstar's eyes flashed with horror, Ravenstar's prophecy had come true! 'I'm afraid your death will be a sad one in which no one will mourn.' The words flashed through her mind as the old red tabby she-cat struggled to stay above the water. Something tucked at her leg, something was eating her alive! Meadowstar screamed with terror but no one could hear her, the storm was too loud for them to her. Meadowstar groaned as she woke up in a peaceful meadow. "Hello Meadowstar. You're in StarClan now." a voice that sounded so young and beauiful told Meadowstar. She looked up to see a red tabby apprentice-aged she-cat padding over to her. "I'm afraid that was your last life." a shadow seemed to cloud the young red tabby's eyes. "My name is Cliffpaw and I was killed by Darkface only a few days ago." Meadowstar's jaw dropped. So the accuastions made by Otterstar about Darkface was true!
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Re: Dark Storm |Warriors| PLEASE READ AND COMMENT!

Postby -Frost- » Tue Feb 07, 2012 9:45 am

Finished! LONG chapter. Not the best ending (Suck at endings :P) but I'm thinking about doing a part two to the chapter.
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Re: Dark Storm |Warriors| PLEASE READ AND COMMENT!

Postby Malédiction » Tue Feb 07, 2012 10:19 am

I luff it!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! And ya, my title doesn't really go with your story. But, what do you mean my writing style is like Erin Hunter's?
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Re: Dark Storm |Warriors| PLEASE READ AND COMMENT!

Postby -Frost- » Tue Feb 07, 2012 10:21 am

Thanks!

I don't know, you have more the feel of the orinigal warrior books. Mine, are kind of like that, but not as much as yours is.
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Re: Dark Storm |Warriors| PLEASE READ AND COMMENT!

Postby Malédiction » Tue Feb 07, 2012 10:40 am

Oh. Well, I will take it as a compliment, because I have no idea how to take it, so thanks!
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Re: Dark Storm |Warriors| PLEASE READ AND COMMENT!

Postby -Frost- » Tue Feb 07, 2012 10:54 am

You're welcome, I meant that way ^^
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Re: Dark Storm |Warriors| PLEASE READ AND COMMENT!

Postby Malédiction » Tue Feb 07, 2012 10:59 am

Ah ha, I see......... I need an idea for my next chapter in mine. Do you have any?
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