The Critique Cafe- Need Active Critics!

[! october]

I would like some critique please!
Username: booklover789
Link to your form: viewtopic.php?f=10&t=152373
Adoption Agency you are applying for: I really don't know........
Deadline for your form: Whenever you get to it....I can wait.
Would you prefer to get feedback here or by PM? Either. I'd prefer PM... just so you know.

I'm not sure if this is the place for asking for critiques on art, correct me if I'm wrong. ^^"

[Desmond]

The CC is for forms or other written media, I think. It started for adoption forms, then poems were added recently, but I don't think art has.

[Papyrsatyr]

XD Well to be honest I don't see anything wrong with asking for critiques...except I think critiques on agency forms hold up higher priority.

I don't really think it's suited for art...but I don't really mind.

[! october]

This is a critique for 3B!
Who the critique is for: 3B
What you had to say about it: As you competitor, I thought it was great. I like that it was written in first person, and that it showed what Polyphemus's views of your other Goeys. You could almost feel his anger and dislike for them.

Please don't hate me for bringing this up, but I think you may have missed this. ^^"
No Affected Goennec can feel anger, as it says here.

Fortunately, there are a few positive effects, all of which are always present.

Increased intelligence
inability to feel anger
sturdy bone structure

That was the only thing that I could find wrong, I adore the picture you included at the end. :3

[Desmond]

In my odd head, anger =/= resentment/hate, but thanks! :)

[c00kieguirl]

I would like some critique please!
Username:
c00kieguirl
Link to your form:
viewtopic.php?f=10&t=118117&start=2480#p4209355
Adoption Agency you are applying for:
Goennec
Deadline for your form:
Sunday but deadline for critique preferibly friday
Would you prefer to get feedback here or by PM?
Pm

[SilverHund]

I would like some critique please!
Username: Smoky
Link to your form:
[url]http://www.chickensmoothie.com/Forum/viewtopic.php?f=10&t=150745&start=120[url/]
Adoption Agency you are applying for: The Agency
Deadline for your form: I don't know
Would you prefer to get feedback here or by PM? here

[Soccerlvr]

I would like some critique please!
Username: Soccerlvr
Link to your form: here
Adoption Agency you are applying for: Goennecs
Deadline for your form: Saturday, but I'd prefer to have feedback by Friday so I can revise my form. I am going to keep editing my form, so it might get bigger.
Would you prefer to get feedback here or by PM? here, please^^

Yes'm, I'm back^^

[Rosalind]

I would like some critique please!
Username:Rosalind
Link to your form:http://www.chickensmoothie.com/Forum/viewtopic.php?f=10&t=53904&start=3360
Adoption Agency you are applying for:TAN, Tough As Nails
Deadline for your form:I don't really know...
Would you prefer to get feedback here or by PM? PM would be best so I can keep track of it.

[Kheisa]

I would like some critique please!
Username: Kheisa
Link to your form: [link]
Adoption Agency you are applying for: TaN
Deadline for your form: ... In a week, I guess?
Would you prefer to get feedback here or by PM? Either or. ^^

I haven't added the background yet, but I have all the required fields filled out, so I figured that until I get his history nailed down, I'd request critique on the rest of it. :3