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Re: Pinnacle

Postby DRdoctorlady » Sat Jan 29, 2011 11:56 am

Geezus, I was freaking out for a moment when I read teh plumber part XD
Anywho, thankie much, this was important information. Smoof.
ANYwho (again), I suppose I'll give you guys some more stuff to read.
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Chapter 1o
-------->Continuation
I'm cramped, squished against the window so Grasswhistle has room to work her magic. I see her growling and pulling at some wires, shaving the end off of one of them. I look back up and see our four legged friend come trotting around the corner, lips pulled back in a growl. Behind him a few others step out, eyes bright yellow. I notice that they are all big dog breeds and mutts. No purse dogs there.
Rosethorn snaps her head around and leans over to look out the window, crushing me into the cracked up seats.
"Get off of me!" I grunt, trying to shove her off. She scowls and sits back, RIGHT as the dogs reach the car. They're scrabbling at the doors, barking and snarling. I flinch instinctively as they hurl themselves at us. Looking to the left I see the window I came we all came through is still down.
"Grasswhistle, window!" I hiss. Grasswhistle grunts and does nothing.
"Grasswhistle, they're going to jump in!" I say, waving my arms for empasis. I end up smacking Thorns upside the head but she doesn't respond, just shouts at the dogs outside.
Grasswhistle still isn't concerned.
And then I hear the wonderfully blessed sound of an old truck starting up. Okay, it sounds like an old man choking to death, but meh.
Immediatley, Grasswhistle sits up, not bothering to stick the panels she's dismantled back into place. She stomps on the acceleration and we roar out of the parking lot, the dogs howling and attempting to give chase. We manage to get out without being eaten by Mr. Growly and friends, and are soon soaring out of dog territory.
* * *
"That was... interesting," Rose yawns, stepping gracefully from the vehicle. I stumble out after her, trying to get the feeling back into my legs. I had been squished on the way out, seeing as the car was made for two people, not three.
"Interesting?" Grasswhistle says skeptically. "A new book is interesting. An art museum is interesting. Seeing Dagger run after Coon with a fishing pole is interesting. Having to mangle the inner workings of a smelly van and escape from dogs is not interesting."
Rose scowls and walks towards our final waiting place, the chinese takeout I hid in with Coon. If anything, this would be the best place to begin looking for our enemies. Grasswhistle and I follow. Rose looks even more paranoid now, stalking carefully around the building before shooing us inside. Grasswhistle stakes out one of the booths as a sleeping place and reclines on the wall.
"You get first watch," Rose says, pointing at me before crawling into a corner to sleep. Joy, I get to be alone again, possibly attract a bear this time instead of a dog. Looking back, I see Rose is already out, Grasswhistle still relaxing.

((I type more tomorrow. But not now. As usual, I suffer from PPP and plain ole lazy authoritis, so mrrf :P))
Glancing out the window, I see hints of light in the horizon, signalling morning.
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Re: Pinnacle

Postby Ser'reth » Sat Jan 29, 2011 12:06 pm

Yeah! More words! =D I love words, especially when they are combined into an awesome story such as this x3 Oh, and if your dA info is correct, I must wish you a happy birthday!
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Re: Pinnacle

Postby DRdoctorlady » Sat Jan 29, 2011 12:32 pm

Tis not unfortunately *hears imaginary gasps*
See, my mother has ingrained in mah head that internet stalkers exist and should have many precautions taken against them.
So I use fake b-days XD
July 30 would be teh real one...
And mah DA is poorly disused XD never even done a thing on it. Grrf. Ah well, meh.
AND YES! WORDS :D
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Re: Pinnacle

Postby AngelInWaiting » Sat Jan 29, 2011 12:37 pm

Haha, the plumber thing freaked me out for a second there too xD

You always end with suspense 0.0 That's a good thing, but it still annoys me 'cause I want to read more... xD
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Re: Pinnacle

Postby DRdoctorlady » Sat Jan 29, 2011 1:26 pm

*explodes*
XD lol
I'm fanspasming (cuz when people say fangasm I feel the urge to slap them) because mah favorite band of all time is releasing their new album in three days and some people have already put some copies up on youtube *which may or may not be illegal ._.) and I have been making the noises of joy.
GAAAHAHHAAHHAHA

So, because I'm happy, I'm going to spend long time writing tomorrow. At least I'll try. But mrrrrf
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Re: Pinnacle

Postby Ser'reth » Sat Jan 29, 2011 1:27 pm

xP I feel all awkward now... *curls up in a corner for no apparent reason*

That's four days after mine. :3
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Re: Pinnacle

Postby AngelInWaiting » Sat Jan 29, 2011 1:32 pm

who's your favorite band, Dragon?
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Re: Pinnacle

Postby DRdoctorlady » Sat Jan 29, 2011 1:54 pm

Ser- Daw, its okay *pats head and feeds some Ser treats*
Angel- Red is the name of teh band. Yup. Just one three letter word ^-^
Three songs that apply to Pinnacle are by them :3 Since I'm bored and realize i have more time before bed, I describe for no apparent reason. Spoilers I shall bleep out with * * and insert a message in between teh asterisks. Song lyrics would be between " "

Shadows (by Red :P)- Would be sort of like Dagger reminiscing over the Regime Chance and their involvement in Jarrah's death + her last painful days and begging to be put out of misery. Pretty grim stuff in the end of mah book. Most lines would be flashbacks... meh meh meh.
ex. of teh chorus XD
"There's a hate inside of me like some kind of master-" Dagger hates teh RC and it guides his life now.
"I tried to save you but I can't find teh answer-" I can't entirely reveal cuz that would spoil more than anything I've said before, but he (Dagger) feels teh guilt over said Jarrah's death
"I'm holding on to you, I'll never let go-" Would be when Jarrah is begging for someone to hold on to her and save her whilst she's dieing her slow sad death, and Dagger responding in semi-comforting fashion
"I need you with me when I enter the shadows" Jarrah needing Dagger on her way to death

So mrrr.
And then teh next would be an IcexGrasswhistle sorta song. This one isn't officially released yet so you might not find it on youtube, but its Who we are by Red :D
Sorta like a pep-talk to Ice to get him out of being a reclusive butthead sometimes, describing their past in a *insert spoiler here that I shan't tell*
"We can be who we are now we are alive-" Speaking of how free they've been since the escape from said spoilery place
"We can fight they cannot contain us-" Sort of talking about the RC and how nobody can stop them now
"Its who we are, we are undying-" Ice was feeling pretty depressed... Ironic how Grasswhistle *spoiler insert :P* later
"We are forever-" Speaking of her dream to leave a legacy on the world too.

I realize this makes no sense right now for you guyses so mrrf.
Ah, well, onwards to the last one

Hymn for the Missing (which also is a song that hasn't been released yet >.<)
For poor Dagger and Ice, who are missing their dead ladies.
Cow crap, that was a spoiler. Ah, well, meh.
Ex. Dagger n Ice are wondering if Jarrah and Grasswhistle have found a better place now that they are dead
"Where are you now?
Are you lost?
Will I find you again?
Are you alone?
Are you afraid?
Are you searching for me?
Why did you go?
I had to stay,
Now I'm reaching for you.
Will you wait?
Will you wait?
Will I see you again?"

I found that entrancingly sad.
So now that I'm done boring you, I shall go.
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Re: Pinnacle

Postby AngelInWaiting » Sat Jan 29, 2011 2:25 pm

Omggggg Grasswhistle dies TOO? NOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOO!!!! D: I'm gonna cry. And then when you're done writing the story I'm gonna sob and flood the house and make my family confused.
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Re: Pinnacle

Postby King Abi » Sun Jan 30, 2011 5:26 am

i just literally cried. my mom thought it was because i cant do my math homework ( DAMN YOU ALGEBRAIC EQUATIONS D:!!!) actuall hate my life. i'm mathmaticly dyslexic and i'm in our set 2 higher ability class cause i got full marks in my last two exams. because they were foundation :'( ahhh math is makingh me want to kill myself metaphorically.
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