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omg so pretty and yesssssss
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asl;djkldsklaj; YES.
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Re: ❀ (( our little cherry blossoms )) posting allowed :3

Postby ʞ ɔ ǝ ɹ ʍ d ı ʞ s » Fri Jan 22, 2016 9:36 am

    skipwreck cove. yes. that is my domain. it is where all the things happen.
    Ohh believe me, I wouldn't hesitate to offer critique if I had any
    I really can't think of anything that could be better
    For a short chapter, poetic story with a fairly mellow storyline, its just perfect
    There's a real talent in making things sound so elegant :D

    published ha hahaha hahahahaha ha no
    HOWEVER COMMA I am in the process of actually planning which means I'll likely finish this draft this time woot
    ... though it will be going on wattpad instead of cs because... of... things
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Re: ❀ (( our little cherry blossoms )) posting allowed :3

Postby Asherwy » Fri Jan 22, 2016 2:34 pm

      correction: Skipwreck Cove™
      heh
      duuuuude i'm so goshdang flippin frickle frackle paddle wackle flattered just from that
      uugh I'm so glad you think so >m<
      thank youuuuuu~~~


      skippy my girl
      I'm expecting big things from you, and that draft better be finished by the end of summer
      wattpad is good, cuz you can't copy and paste the chapters and the text on there
      good
      this is good
      the road to publishing; sponsored by Skipwreck Cove™
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Re: ❀ (( our little cherry blossoms )) posting allowed :3

Postby type. » Wed Jan 27, 2016 5:26 pm

      luff luff luff luffley <3
      i'd seen this before many times but hadn't committed to reading it
      i am so glad i did
      this is gorgeous, i love your descriptive style and how everything goes together
      february will be worth the wait ;u;
      xxxxxxxxx'also hi ash
      xxxxxxxxx'lowkey fangirl of your work
      xxxxxxxxx'sorry
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Postby Asherwy » Fri Jan 29, 2016 6:23 am

      -wheeze hack cough wheeze-
      type, thank you from the bottom of my heart for taking the time to read this, I appreciate it so so much ;w;
      thank you again for the wonderful compliment <333
      i'll try and make february's chapters extra special
      I'll be releasing case's chapter on valentine's day~
      though for some of you, you might see the update on January 31st or february 13th since the timezones are different xD


      yo wut you sayin' sorry for
      the fact that you even like my stuff makes me feel amazing <3
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❀ (( our little cherry blossoms )) wait

Postby Asherwy » Tue Feb 02, 2016 4:40 am

thirteen. wait
FEBRUARY (( LARK ))


An affectionate blanket of powdered snow lay peacefully across the school's courtyard, although dented
with the unrelenting boots of countless students, the matured ice crystals endured. I resigned within
the sharpened shade, abstractly contemplating youthful children frolic through the snow as white plumes
danced before me after each breath. Flames shuddered in the corner of my eye, and I captured a glimpse
of the subdued, blazing wavy curls atop Valerie's head from across the courtyard, her hand fervently
clasping the woollen fingers that belonged to the boy. An excruciating yet vigorous pulsating began to
reverberate from deep within my chest. My mind, void of all consciousness and logic, unwittingly allowed
my instinct to envelop my thoughts, growing stronger and stronger, harmonising with the throbbing of my
beating heart until it was all manifested in the form of a singular whisper.

"Wait."

It was as inaudible as a mosquito's wingbeat, yet the boy's angular head turned despite everything. Despite
the sun. His eyes, as if fuelled with a desire that shone with the light of a thousand stars, incandesced like
a prolonged lightning strike across the bleached courtyard, soaring closer and closer until - it dissipated.
The desire vanished, and his charred irises were relit with the luminescence of Valerie's scintillating candle.

"Case, go on ahead, I'll catch up."

Valerie's vibrant voice immaculately matched her charming smile as he nodded submissively and continued
walking. I sat, rigid, on the bench as I struggled to resolve the event that occurred just moments ago,
violently shaken to the core and disconcerted at how to reorganise my disarrayed emotions. Suddenly,
Valerie's exemplary smile morphed into a turbid mien of displeasure, flickering grey eyes scorching with such
intensity that was so viciously intent on burning my wings.


Leave.






But I refused.



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Postby Asherwy » Tue Feb 02, 2016 4:45 am

OHOHO IT'S DONE
WAIT TILL THE NEXT CHAPTER GUIS >:D
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Re: ❀ (( our little cherry blossoms )) posting allowed :3

Postby raey » Tue Feb 02, 2016 4:55 am

awwwwwwwww
Thank you for this beautiful chapter my dear <3333333
It's perfect
I especially loved the ending
You are so amazing
And your skills are just ahdbaiabfvduwbsgdk
Love everything about it
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Postby Asherwy » Tue Feb 02, 2016 5:00 am

      rae my bae if you keep giving me praise I'll become way too arroganttttt
      but thank you so much anyway, you know I always appreciate everything you say <3
      hnnngggg i'll try to make the next chapter even more captivating
      emphasis on try
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Postby raey » Tue Feb 02, 2016 5:21 am

      ...
      ...I smell the sweet scent of revenge....
      ...
      ...
      ...


      pfft, you could never become arrogant
      you are a little teddy-bear of fluff
      and fluff can never be arrogant xD
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Postby Asherwy » Tue Feb 02, 2016 8:11 pm

      ohoho we'll see about that rae~

      but any critique would be really appreciated either regarding the flow of the story or just my writing techniques/style/skills :3
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