What do you think? (looking for people's opinions)
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Re: What do you think? (looking for people's opinions)
by TPDebate » Wed Nov 30, 2011 10:54 am
Good, not enough to critique on yet.
Three Rings for the Elven-kings under the sky,
Seven for the Dwarf-lords in their halls of stone,
Nine for Mortal Men doomed to die,
One for the Dark Lord on his dark throne
In the Land of Mordor where the Shadows lie.
One Ring to rule them all, One Ring to find them,
One Ring to bring them all and in the darkness bind them
In the Land of Mordor where the Shadows lie.
Seven for the Dwarf-lords in their halls of stone,
Nine for Mortal Men doomed to die,
One for the Dark Lord on his dark throne
In the Land of Mordor where the Shadows lie.
One Ring to rule them all, One Ring to find them,
One Ring to bring them all and in the darkness bind them
In the Land of Mordor where the Shadows lie.
The Stormlight Archive by Brandon Sanderson - Lord of the Rings by J.R.R. Tolkien - Harry Potter by J. K. Rowling - Sherlock Holmes by Sir Arthur Conan Doyle
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Re: What do you think? (looking for people's opinions)
by TPDebate » Tue Jan 17, 2012 10:26 am
Can you write more?
Three Rings for the Elven-kings under the sky,
Seven for the Dwarf-lords in their halls of stone,
Nine for Mortal Men doomed to die,
One for the Dark Lord on his dark throne
In the Land of Mordor where the Shadows lie.
One Ring to rule them all, One Ring to find them,
One Ring to bring them all and in the darkness bind them
In the Land of Mordor where the Shadows lie.
Seven for the Dwarf-lords in their halls of stone,
Nine for Mortal Men doomed to die,
One for the Dark Lord on his dark throne
In the Land of Mordor where the Shadows lie.
One Ring to rule them all, One Ring to find them,
One Ring to bring them all and in the darkness bind them
In the Land of Mordor where the Shadows lie.
The Stormlight Archive by Brandon Sanderson - Lord of the Rings by J.R.R. Tolkien - Harry Potter by J. K. Rowling - Sherlock Holmes by Sir Arthur Conan Doyle
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Re: What do you think? (looking for people's opinions)
by Lizzie:) » Tue Jan 17, 2012 10:28 am
I think it's pretty good. Only when ever a person talks it should be a new paragragh.
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Re: What do you think? (looking for people's opinions)
by NinthWolf » Tue Jan 17, 2012 10:32 am
I really like the plot. My crit would be, when expressing numbers use letters not digits and, describe her surroundings in more detail, for example describe exactly what it's like in the nuclear plant, does it smell? Any cool gadgets that look strange?
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Re: What do you think? (looking for people's opinions)
by Lizzie:) » Wed Mar 14, 2012 9:07 am
Yeah don't you hate it when you forget.
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Re: What do you think? (looking for people's opinions)
by TPDebate » Mon Mar 18, 2013 2:03 pm
bump.
Three Rings for the Elven-kings under the sky,
Seven for the Dwarf-lords in their halls of stone,
Nine for Mortal Men doomed to die,
One for the Dark Lord on his dark throne
In the Land of Mordor where the Shadows lie.
One Ring to rule them all, One Ring to find them,
One Ring to bring them all and in the darkness bind them
In the Land of Mordor where the Shadows lie.
Seven for the Dwarf-lords in their halls of stone,
Nine for Mortal Men doomed to die,
One for the Dark Lord on his dark throne
In the Land of Mordor where the Shadows lie.
One Ring to rule them all, One Ring to find them,
One Ring to bring them all and in the darkness bind them
In the Land of Mordor where the Shadows lie.
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