Darkside of the Moon POETRY(comments welcomed)

[studio killers.]

I love them You have a lot of potential. I just see a few spelling and grammar errors, but I like the ideas behind them.
I'm jealous of people that can write poetry and such. xD I prefer to stick to fantasy writing. Anyways excellent work.

P.S I'm flamingwarsgirl on deviantart if you wanna look at my profile. I'm definitely checking out yours.

[Mavric]

cool I am so looking you up ^^

[geinkotsu]

I still admire your literature <3

[Mavric]

lol thanks <3

[Mavric]

O.o I haven't been on this thread in ages . I updated the poems so they aren't unformed blobs anymore and I will be adding more soon ♥
♪♥Finished getting it all done!♥♪

[pisgah]

Hello Mavrick, you can call me Crow, and I love poetry too.^w^
I like your creations. I think you have a lot of potential, and you certainly have the mind of a poet, to shape words into feelings. What you've created is definately art.
The only thing I can see that bothers me is that all of them seem kind of dark. Don't get me wrong, I love art that explores the dark side of things, heck, Poe is one of my all-time favorite poets. But the continual theme of death in all of your works is sort of painful to read. Maybe it's just me, being a legitimate optimist, but while your poems were beautiful, they made me feel kind of bad... and not in a desirable way.
My intent is not to offend or insult you, I'm just offering up some critique where I think it's due.

[Mavric]

Why thankyou, I know its dark but it is my style and I write what my heart tells me to >< and ya I love Edgar Allen Poe also!

[pisgah]

Well if it's what's on your heart, then I suppose you can't help but write your heart. :3 And you know what, you do quite a beautiful job of it.

PS what's your favorite poem by Poe? I think mine is Annabel Lee, everytime I read it it gives me goosebumps. XD
Oh and also The Raven, because ravens are very similar to crows.

[Mavric]

I would have to say the Raven as well, but I also love the ones he wrote right after his wife died... they are so amazing

[pisgah]

Yes, he was a genius. *sigh* I tried to write dark poetry, but you see, my soul if actually full of sunshine at the very core. XD I did write a sort of Gothic-style short story, and the plot was good, but I just can't do horror. When I try to write it, no wonder, it always comes out sounding ridiculous. XDXD