Ok I made my edits. So, you can just see which ones you like. I tried to include a little more dialogue. It makes all the difference in an animation. I also managed to add another two scenes, one short, one longish. Anything in red is just my own notes. Also, I haven't included any dialogue for Rainbow Strike in the last scenes I wrote. I figured I would leave that for her owner to fill in? I don't want to mess around with other people's characters, in case I get something wrong. I know two scenes isn't a whole lot compared to what's already there but I've been super busy with homework T_T And it's quite late where I am now. xD At least we're getting somewhere though!
https://docs.google.com/document/d/1AkZOkFdZ2a7cMYZ6RC04zK2QwjCbOBCSSWLkZXtS9Og/edit