The Advanced Writer's Club

[princess pudding]

Hey everyone. I know I haven't been around much, but school has been awful.

Anyways, I'm in the process of writing a Loki fanfic.
Definitely not my best, but it's my first canon-based story.
/I tend to avoid fanfics, but all these feels had it coming.
I'd love some critique. Loki Trouble

@nocturnal wolf. That sounds really interesting, though I don't usually go for group roleplays.

[indebted]

Hey everyone. I know I haven't been around much, but school has been awful.

Anyways, I'm in the process of writing a Loki fanfic.
Definitely not my best, but it's my first canon-based story.
/I tend to avoid fanfics, but all these feels had it coming.
I'd love some critique. Loki Trouble

@nocturnal wolf. That sounds really interesting, though I don't usually go for group roleplays.

I critiqued it on the Inklings thread.
well, more like showered it with praise. simply too epic to describe.

[indebted]

I'm writing a book called Insanity.

actually, it's not about experiments.
You know all those sci-fi books and all about AUs? I decided to write a book about how the universes are all bleeding together. This is, of course, catastrophic, so there are various oddities about and the main protagonist is struck into a different world where she's a criminal. bear with me. I'm excited and I may have missed some details.

ooh and i be writing a story about the queen of france during the nazi periods.
i know my history is horrible. AU.

[aphelion ✧]

Hey guys! I've finally finished my contest entry that my friend is running and if anyone has a bit of time, I'd love for someone to point out any basic mistakes (grammar and spelling not done by Word please). Nothing in depth though since this has a word limit. ;-;

Here it is right here

Later on, I'll be posting the extended version since went very well over the 5000-5200 word limit. By at least 1000 words before I started hacking away at it. ;u;

(And it was exactly 99 paragraphs! How did that happen?)

And, I have a question!

What do you think of stereotypes in writings?
I'm currently wanting to write about a stereotypical gay man, meaning extremely flamboyant and all that good stuff, that's also a superhero. It would be just for fun and nothing worthy of publishing, but still, the idea of poking fun at stereotypes makes me wary of actually writing it. All the characters would be the typical stereotype though, minus the villain. I know this could ruffle some feathers, but this story is meant to be humorous and draw attention to how ridiculous stereotyping is. So, yeah...just a bit curious

[eden .]

I think satyric writing, if it's done right, is hilarious. Poking fun at things, if it's done in a way where it's clear the author is trying to make a point of something by being amusing, are great, I think. If you want to do it, I think you should try it. You'll have to watch your tone, though. You don't want to be timid but you certainly shouldn't go over the top. You know? /:

[vulturous]

Username: » sureile. «
Nickname: sur or any variation of sureile.
Writing Preferences (Poet, Novelist, roleplayer...): novelist, roleplayer.
Example (Can be anything; must be a good length): {x}
Links to stories / roleplays: {x}, {x} (this one's dead).
Other: i'm sort of museless lately, so i haven't written much. ~ not to mention school and such. i'm really a recovering writer, if you will; i'm recovering from a writing drought that's lasted months. ;-;

[Artesian]

*gasps for breath* I liiiive! Hi.

So, how do you all feel about past perfect tense? (The past perfect combines had (the simple past of have) with the past participle of the main verb: We had shouted.) Recently, I had to write a past-tense section in a portion that was already in past-tense, and had to write a long, long section entirely in past-perfect. It felt so clunk, and I was sooo tired of typing had over and over again. Have any of you written a section like that, and how did you lighten up the stiff prose caused by it?

Also, how do you feel about changing perspectives among viewpoint characters. Can you do it in the text of a story without an overt break to signal a perspective change, or can you do it within a section? Within a paragraph? How do you make the perspective shift less confusing, if done within a section, without an obvious break?

[Make_a__Scene]

It's funny that you mention this now, because I just did both of those things in this story I just finished.

I struggled with past-perfect tense a lot when I was in high school, and one day it kind of just clicked for me. One way to un-clunk your past-perfect tense is to use contractions: We'd shouted. Combining the helping verb with the subject subtracts a syllable and makes the flow better, less formal.

Also, in the story I posted I switched between first and second person at the end. I'm not really sure how/if I pulled off the second person POV section, but...

[Rolly-chan]

@Artesian
I've mostly written in German, but even then I don't remember how it was with past perfect. Kind of. x"D

About the perspective switch - I've read a story that switched perspectives within each scene (sometimes from paragraph to paragraph), but it still flowed perfectly fine, and I wouldn't have noticed if I hadn't been so attentive XD
I don't really know how the author did it... but I think it's partly because she changed the perspective when the actor changed. Meaning, she only changed the pov to a character who was acting somehow (or reacting to something).
In general, I wouldn't change the perspective within a paragraph, since one paragraph contains one idea, and a pov change within the same idea would come off a little strange.

[indebted]

i sort of use perspective switch::
she'd seen the bullets raining from the sky
etc etc