Illiterate to Literate [closed - new instructors hired!]

[city;]

No, Glu. [almost spelled that with an e ... 8|] I would die to have your writing ability. c:
TAKE THE COMPLIMENT, DURNIT.

[abandoned.]

Pie wants to be a writing idol ono
And yeah...I seem to like that face a lot x3
Choey, your writing is awesome. Our characters must interact more :U

-goes back and looks through pages-

[rose;]

Username: The Burning Rose
What You'd Like Help With: I want someone to critique and give ideas for making my description and history better for a character. this character
Preferred Instructor: It seems Kiro, smamm, and city are the instructors that are doing stuff close to this, but I really would like help from every one x3
Activity or Time Zone: sh. x3 I'm pretty sure ya'll know.
Sample of Writing:

[city;]

ROSIE. PM MEH

[you don't have to ask with me c: ]

[eden .]

.///.
thanks guys, but I'm not that great. there are other people in the irl world and people on this site that are much better than me. =3=

BUT since we're on the subject of my writing...
this is probably super low of me to do on a school thread, but I was wondering if a few of you passerbys would be willing to take a look at this contest entry that I did? as a prize I'll get a reading by an editor. and 1000 dollars. but I kind of actually want the editor more, and I know I sound not-sincere but that's how it is. if I saved up I could get 1000 dollars by working. I can't get an editor by working 8 hours a day. |:
anyways, voting ends THIS FRIDAY and I'm seriously in need of more votes. I know a lot of you don't know me, but I was hoping you might extend a favor to me. Please, if you go to the link, click the "heart" button AFTER YOU'VE MADE AN ACCOUNT.
THE VOTE DOES NOT COUNT IF YOU DO NOT MAKE AN ACCOUNT
I REPEAT
THE VOTE DOES NOT COUNT IF YOU DO NOT MAKE AN ACCOUNT
so you can connect w/ facebook or twitter if you have either, or you can make an account from scratch.
thanks guys for your time and help

[placebo.]

Username: Wolfdoglover12
What You'd Like Help With: Using the Mobile Site [Apple Products]
Maintaining a Role Play
Animal Roleplaying
Developing Your own Form
One on One role play Tutoring
Developing Detailed Physical Descriptions
Preferred Instructor: I would like, Eighteen for my Mobile teacher and the rest are just opereated by one person…I think.
Activity or Time Zone:I am on every day for at least an hour. I am currently in Mountain Time.
Sample of Writing: Mandy glanced up her bright blue eyes surveyed the grassland. As she stared a flash of brown caught her eye. Something was coming towards her. Mandy’s muscles twitched with the urgency to run but she held them still with her mind. As her heart pounded faster her ears flicked. The noise was like a thrashing of brittle grass. Mandy was greatly confused by this, nothing had ever sounded like this.

Suddenly a strange creature slammed into her side. Mandy withered under the creature’s great mass. Her long lean legs thrashed around as she broke into a cold sweat. Her mind was whirling wildly as she struggled to dislodge this strange thing on her. When she finally succeeded she stared at this enemy. It look like a large cheetah but with thicker spots. Mandy only had an instant to stare before she tore off across the grassland. Her only motive was to get away.

[zippyzoo77]

Ah, I see you are interested in Maintaining a roleplay, which would be my area of expertise. Please do PM me, and we will get started.

[owl,]

Username: owl,
What You'd Like Help With: writing more and using the apple products/mobile site
Preferred Instructor: anyone who can help ^^
Activity or Time Zone: um I think new york? I am on mostly all day on weekends [sometimes well into 1-2 in the morning xD], and on weekdays, im on my ipod while on school so im on and off.
Sample of Writing: if you're looking for improvements in writing in particular, please give a sample of writing for instructors to work off of. If this is not applicable, strike this out.
^will add that in a moment^

[team free kick sass]

Username: uh rural. :P
What You'd Like Help With: using apple products. I don't even have an iPod or iPhone so it's worthless but if you don't mind, I'd still like a bit of know-how on the subject, if you even know what I mean. xD
Preferred Instructor: City or Pie. Whoever is the most ninja like and posts first. xD
Activity or Time Zone: EST and... just look at my other form. D;

[abandoned.]

Username: uh rural.
What You'd Like Help With: using apple products. I don't even have an iPod or iPhone so it's worthless but if you don't mind, I'd still like a bit of know-how on the subject, if you even know what I mean. xD
Preferred Instructor: City or Pie. Whoever is the most ninja like and posts first. xD
Activity or Time Zone: EST and... just look at my other form. D;

I'll let city take you. I haven't worked with my apple products as much.
Plus, city knows a lot more...she needs to teach me first XD