The Artist Army

[TheSilverfeather]

Thanks for the feedback, sketchi! I'll definitely work on righting the things you listed, and I definitely need to work with the shading to make it less flat. Hopefully I'll manage to do that! As for your piece, I can't say anything but that it's lovely! <3 I really like the art style you've used, it's really unique and I think it looks neat. c:

the awkward one.@: Adorable! Just curious, but is it supposed to not have any pupils? Also, I'd really recommend adding highlights, some shading really brings life to your drawings! Otherwise I think it's adorable.

Clowesia@: Amazing colours chosen! I think perhaps the muzzle should be a bit more defined, it looks kind of flat right now... I really do love the colours though, and especially the eyes! I really wish I could draw eyes like that... ;w;

Linking to a WIP piece, click to view!
It's supposed to resemble three birds, and I have only made the body and it's colourations. I haven't shaded it that much yet either, so it's pretty unfinished as of now. I also need to figure out the legs and the branches/tree they'll be seated in, as well as a suitable background. I'd love some constructive critisism on the shape of the birds/colours and other things you might notice that isn't correct. c:

[meowool]

@clowesia
I love it!! If you look at a cats muzzle side on it looks like they are smiling, and you'd see that a tiny bit from the front I agree with friskusis on the nose as well... Also pay attention to the fur direction on the neck and body, it looks a bit of that it's all in the same plane... I love the colours that you've chosen and how you're coloured the eyes!!

@the awkward one... Maybe change the rock colour, as it's a similar colour to the foxer fly so at a glance it looks like it is part of the foxer fly

[Ciriun]

@Clowesia
The anatomy looks great to me and I love the delicate little ear fuzz. But I think the shading effect you use coupled with the very clean lines make it look like it has super short hair, like a Rex or one of those almost hairless breeds. It could probably benefit from some tufts of fur, especially around the edges of the face.

@Friskusis
I wish I could give you constructive criticism, but honestly I cannot find a single thing wrong with it. Those don't resemble birds, they look exactly like birds to me.

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I've got a WIP today, too. It's a very rough outlining job, but I want to make sure I've got the anatomy right before I move on. It's in an anime-ish style so it won't have loads of detail, but I'd like to get the proportions believable and the features in the right spots.



Apologies for the size. I tried making it smaller but one of the eyes got really wonky. I'll have to fix that later. And the arm pose is not final so if you can think of one that looks more natural please let me know! Redlines would be a huuuge help! (Expect to see this guy back again when I inevitably need advice on shading.)

[Catastrophic Blend]

#ciriun:: Sorry I can't do red lines, on my phone. Lmao. I really like the pose, but if you age going for more of a relaxed look, try Either dropping his hands to his side or have one on his hip? The proportions look good as far as I can tell. Can't wait to see the finished outcome!

[Ciriun]

I was trying for something a little more dynamic than just having his arms hang at his side, but I don't know what else he would be doing with them.

[CaptiveLegacy]

@sketchi
eee I really like the style that you used, very fun and colorful!
I have to say I really like the shading and highlights, really makes it pop out more with the colors!

@Clowesia
Gorgeous! I love the colors you used, its gives it a warmer feeling that blends well with the expression. Those eyes are lovely as well, I love how this all looks ;3;

@the awkward one.
Cute! Though, I do agree with what the others have said on the shading, make sure to pick a light point!
I'm also wondering about the black lump to the left of him, im thinking its his back end or hind leg?

@Friskusis
Goodness, that is looking wonderful! I don't having anything to critique on, I can't wait to see the finished product!

@Ciriun
I don't think i'll be much help here, as humans and snakes are not my best abilities ;3;
but so far its coming along nicely! though his left arm seems a bit stiff and smaller than his right, but it could be just me!

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been working on a piece of art to put on a hoodie for me, and I finally got it done!

[Solarizing]

carrie911 @ Oh that looks neat! And that's really cool that you design apparel, the style looks good on clothing.

Ciriun @ Usually you can find poses simply by typing in something like "Male Arm Poses" on Google Images or deviantArt. I quickly brought one up for you and it might give you some ideas, it's nothing too extreme but it's definitely dynamic.



Friskusis @ Holy snap your artwork is great! ouo I wouldn't recommend changing much at all, it looks excellent! Maybe slightly define the shading at the bottom of the birds' bellies? Also keep bounce lighting in mind. For the background I would recommend something like desaturated pink flowers or something semi-colorful that would make the dull colored birds pop. Keep composition in mind and remember to have the birds be the first thing your viewer's eye wants to glance at. Don't change the birds at all though, they look fantastic.

Clowesia @ Whoa that looks great. I need to step up my game, all of you guys are going to knock me out of the art field with your gorgeous pieces. XD I love the colors in the eyes – that alone makes this piece look fantastic, I would really try to keep using that technique in other works too –and A+ job for getting out of your comfort zone!

I'd recommend knocking out the lineart altogether (except around the eyes, just blend that into the piece a bit) and make this a lineless work. I would try to work in details and more defined shading in the cat. Also I'm assuming that the gray background is just unfinished, but I've been looking at it for awhile and I actually kind of like gray against the subject. Maybe make that unique/add the cat's cast shadow and keep silver in the background?

the awkward one. @ I agree with everything the others stated. Don't worry, I had trouble with light sources too when I was a beginner. Just keep practicing and look for tutorials. It's probably harder with this piece because a) the subject is small and b) the subject is dark colored and knowing how to put shading and highlights on dark brown/black subjects is trickier. If you're motivated and willing to practice you'll get it soon. ^_^

sketchi @ I like your style! ^_^ It's really unique and the highlights looks really nice on that blue color.

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Could I have some constructive crit on these two pieces? <3

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[Ciriun]

@Solardemon

As you have seen I'm no expert, but I can try. With your lion, I think the shading on the face is a little odd. It's hard to figure out where the light is meant to be coming from. For the squirrels, the girl's right eye is a bit too dark, it draws focus to that one tiny spot instead of both of their faces. Everything else looks really amazing, you do a wonderful job with the fur in particular.

[meowool]

A little draft of something I'll be doing!
http://monotsleigh.deviantart.com/art/d ... -481063266
In the description I have written out is on the page in case you can't read it, as it is a bit wild today!
Edit: This is after cleaning it all up and drawn over digitally. (I did correct the head right after this!)
http://monotsleigh.deviantart.com/art/C ... 1410209402
Anything else you can see? I think there might be something with the chest on the higher up cat...she'll have to change anyway, as she'll be walking on top of the other cat

@SolarDaemon -
First:
I think the nose is slightly skew-whiff towards the front...and the mane doesn't look very fluffy, but that might be what you're going for!

Second:
The girl squirrels paws look quite big...and it seems a bit weird that she isn't looking at him. I do love the shading on the fur though! XD

[Ciriun]

@meowool

You already caught the head being small, but I think the paws on the second cat might be a little too small as well. And the first cat looks a bit long to me, but I live with the little teapot of cats; short and stout.

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Got a new one to share and hopefully get some help with. Feet are the new bane of my artistic existence. The hands will probably stay mitten style and the whole thing is meant to be very cartoony to match what I'm already selling in my shop. I'm trying to make her a little on the pudgy side. Apologies for the unfinished shading. Redlines would be so appreciated! (See also my previous post if you're really in a redlining mood :3)