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[maximum entropy]

@wolves+horses: Could I just call you wolves? And yes, seahorses are actually fish... I don't remember the name, but I'm pretty sure it didn't have a hippo.

@Stina: Did you know Narwhals are actually true creatures? I read an article once about them in a magazine, true fantastical creatures! They have two theeth where the males' one grows out long and the other is normal. Some rarities and two "horned" Narwhal males, or a one/two "horned" female. They aren't horned, they're just teethed! (haha)

[Dr. Mirtachu]

as I promised I will finnaly post now...so this is following the thing i posted last friday...
But he was tortured by the problem will I accept his idea. He thought that, from us 4, I'm the only one who can even consider it! He didn't wan't to underestimate rest of the girls, but...They just didn't seem like material for his brilliant plan. Or was it really brilliant?
Next morning I woke up still sleepy, allthough I was acting that I had a great night full of sleep. That day it was very windy, so we were at home playing card games. Trough the day, the wind just passed and as we were in Kasteli we decided to go to Trogir in the evening to drink some coctails and buzz around. The whole group was having so much fun, except of course me. I had a feeling that every moment Unknown will come, and tell me the worst news I could find out. After a short walk we came to one bar on an old tower. You could see whole Trogir from there!
We came home after 22pm and decided to spend rest of our time on laptops. Some would think that this is nightmare vacation. But not for me! I just loved to hear sea and be at my laptop, or some other tehnical marvell...Weird, I know.
-You are worried about something the whole day...-my friend said while we were playing pool over the internet.
-Nope...
-Then maybe about someone...-she smiled.
-No, I just...Maybe I miss Zagreb...
-You think?
-Wll yes, i't logic.
My friend Arijana had a good soul. Although she was 2 years older than me, we were getting along good. Her sister was married to my dad's friend, so he was the best man at their wedding. That's how we actually met.

ok, now i need some comments what to change and how does it sound in english?
and p.s. Zagreb is my home town...

[Brightpaw]

I want to join the Writing Army!
Username: Brightpaw
Do you promise to write something at LEAST once a week? Yes when I am on - if I can't get online I'll let you know.
What's your favorite color? Blue. Then black, then silver, then purple.
Animal? Dog or Amur/Snow leopard.
Fish? Clownfish because they're cool.
Type of mythical creature? DRAGON!!!
Do you like fairies, elves, or evil creatures? Who doesn't? Love them!
Anything else (do not leave blank): I tend to write a lot of description, or move the story along too fast, and miss bits out, so excuse some long posts that may be coming!

[OCeanic Vista]

I want to join the Writing Army!
Username: OCeanic Vista
Do you promise to write something at LEAST once a week? Yeah.
What's your favorite color? Poiple.
Animal? Kitten.
Fish? Neon tetra.
Type of mythical creature? I guess a dragon.
Do you like fairies, elves, or evil creatures? Elves.
Anything else (do not leave blank): I've got a writing shop :3

[Foxanna]

as I promised I will finnaly post now...so this is following the thing i posted last friday...
But he was tortured by the problem will I accept his idea. He thought that, from us 4, I'm the only one who can even consider it! He didn't wan't to underestimate rest of the girls, but...They just didn't seem like material for his brilliant plan. Or was it really brilliant?
Next morning I woke up still sleepy, allthough I was acting that I had a great night full of sleep. That day it was very windy, so we were at home playing card games. Trough the day, the wind just passed and as we were in Kasteli we decided to go to Trogir in the evening to drink some coctails and buzz around. The whole group was having so much fun, except offcourse me. I had a feeling that every moment Unknown will come, and tell me the worst news I could find out. After a short walk we came to one bar on an old tower. You could see whole Trogir from there!
We came home after 22pm and decided to spend rest of our time on laptops. Some would think that this is nightmare vacation. But not for me! I just loved to hear sea and be at my laptop, or some other tehnical marvell...Weird, I know.
-You are worried about something the whole day...-my friend said while we were playing pool over the internet.
-Nope...
-Then maybe about someone...-she smiled.
-No, I just...Maybe I miss Zagreb...
-You think?
-Wll yes, i't logic.
My friend Arijana had a good soul. Although she was 2 years older than me, we were getting along good. Her sister was married to my dad's friend, so he was the best man at their wedding. That's how we actually met.

ok, now i need some comments what to change and how does it sound in english?
and p.s. Zagreb is my home town...

Ohmai *D* This is very good! I think it sounds really awesome on English! :3 (And btw, it's of course, sorry for saying that out.)

[Dr. Mirtachu]

oh...edited that xD...and thanks for comments!

[Foxanna]

oh...edited that xD...and thanks for comments!

xD Your welcome. ^^

[brinh]

Hey, have any of you heard of Figment.com? It's a writing website. I have an account on it, and it's ok. you guys should check it out. :3

[maximum entropy]

Sounds interesting! Accepted...

[Brightpaw]

Thanks! I'll post later...