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by Solanum » Thu Jul 07, 2011 5:36 am
I really enjoyed some of the forms this round ^^ Sometimes they're good but not my taste etc but I really enjoyed quite a few this time. I'm just annoyed at myself that I couldn't finish mine.
I know it doesn't really matter now, but could someone crit mine?
I will be here
when you think you’re all alone
Seeping through the cracks
I’m the poison in your bones
My love is your disease
I won't let it set you free
Til I break you
You’ll never know what hit you
Won’t see me closing in
I’m gonna make you suffer
This hell you put me in
I’m underneath your skin
The devil within
You’ll never know what hit you
I tried to be the lover to your nightmare
Look what you made of me
Now I’m a heavy burden that you can’t bear
Look what you made of me
Look what you made of me
I’ll make you see
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by Solanum » Thu Jul 07, 2011 5:38 am
Alright. Cya Dawn ^^
I will be here
when you think you’re all alone
Seeping through the cracks
I’m the poison in your bones
My love is your disease
I won't let it set you free
Til I break you
You’ll never know what hit you
Won’t see me closing in
I’m gonna make you suffer
This hell you put me in
I’m underneath your skin
The devil within
You’ll never know what hit you
I tried to be the lover to your nightmare
Look what you made of me
Now I’m a heavy burden that you can’t bear
Look what you made of me
Look what you made of me
I’ll make you see
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by kivr & fireflii » Thu Jul 07, 2011 5:45 am
Pix, I wouldn't mind critiquing your form.
Also, a little advice for forms: Make it unique, especially the history. This may not go for other judges, but for me (because I'm picky), cliche personalities/histories are a big big turn off. Make sure to give flaws to your character and try not to have contradicting personalities (ie: super nice and compassionate character, but if angry "will mercilessly attack you like a raging bull at the rodeo"). Also avoid cliche histories, mainly being cheesy love stories, abandonment, abuse, etc.
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by Solanum » Thu Jul 07, 2011 5:51 am
That would be great. Thanks guys ^^
Yeah. That's always the part I struggle with... Originality O.o I can write a pretty good story, but if it isn't original... Well... Doesn't count for much.
I will be here
when you think you’re all alone
Seeping through the cracks
I’m the poison in your bones
My love is your disease
I won't let it set you free
Til I break you
You’ll never know what hit you
Won’t see me closing in
I’m gonna make you suffer
This hell you put me in
I’m underneath your skin
The devil within
You’ll never know what hit you
I tried to be the lover to your nightmare
Look what you made of me
Now I’m a heavy burden that you can’t bear
Look what you made of me
Look what you made of me
I’ll make you see
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by Keriae » Thu Jul 07, 2011 5:56 am
The Madd Mini-Mod has arrived! -Jumps around with flailing arms-
Thanks for making this. It'll be so much easier to talk and stuff.
I'm contemplating whether to go for a character, but my creative juices are going into making my wand and, as much as I can spare when I have muse, to my fanfiction. And that muse has gone for a holiday somewhere.
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by keydemon » Thu Jul 07, 2011 8:15 am
Hey everyone, I'd love to join. ^^ (RainbowUnicorns ;3)
Anyway, I tried for Yahara (Juniper) and Meiji (Kai) this round. ^^ I worked really hard on their personalities, but I was rather pressed for time and I can't say I'm too thrilled with how their story turned out. Despite all of that, I wish everyone luck for the code drop. :3
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by Solanum » Fri Jul 08, 2011 10:14 am
Woot! Finally a code drop <3 And... I got Epsilon

Happy Pix is happy, even if my form was suckish :3
I will be here
when you think you’re all alone
Seeping through the cracks
I’m the poison in your bones
My love is your disease
I won't let it set you free
Til I break you
You’ll never know what hit you
Won’t see me closing in
I’m gonna make you suffer
This hell you put me in
I’m underneath your skin
The devil within
You’ll never know what hit you
I tried to be the lover to your nightmare
Look what you made of me
Now I’m a heavy burden that you can’t bear
Look what you made of me
Look what you made of me
I’ll make you see
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