Warrior Cat OC Review Thread

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[abxy]

Name:Echostrike
Age:Around 30 moons
Rank:Warrior
Personality:She's usually sweet and kind, but has a short temper and is also easily surprised. Echostrike is fiercely loyal and will do anything to protect her Clan.
Gender:Female
Skills:She's very good at fighting, as well as can jump higher than most other cats can.
Any powers? Tell me them.:HAIL NAW
Appearance: (include eye colors, number of scars, etc):Echostrike has soft, light grey, long, fur. Her eyes are a bright misty blue, and both ears are torn.
Backstory: (includes: born a rogue, parents died, siblings died, prophecy, etc):She has a pretty normal Clan Life, born and raised ThunderClan, the only significant events was that both of her parents died when she was young.
Accessories: (includes: necklace, special item, etc)nu.
Other:..I ACCIDENTALLY CREATED THIS CHARACTER ONE TIME AND IT'S THE NAME OF ANOTHER PERSON'S OC SO THERE'S A SHIP CALLED ECHOECHO (both Echostrikes)

[bronzebones]

Name: Not sure about it. What would "echo" signify? I guess -strike might work for fighting, but -claw would be better. Suggestion: Fogclaw

Age: Nothing wrong here.

Rank: ^


Personality: The "fiercely loyal" part is a little cliche


Gender: Nothing wrong here


Skills: ^


Powers: Good, none.


Appearance: I don't think there's anything wrong with this, besides the fact that it was hard to find a prefix for me to suggest


Backstory: Not much wrong here, just a little iffy about the parents dying thing.


Accessories: None, good.


Other: Cool.



I'd rate the character:








7/10.

[Simonpet]

Name: Gingerstar (Gingerstorm)
Age: 38 moons
Rank: Leader
Personality: Gingerstar is the classic -storm cat: her mood changes with the wind. As a younger cat, the whole clan thought that she was unstable, until she proved her worth by saving a cat now long dead. As she got older, she became mellower, preferring to think things out rather than fighting them out.
Gender: She-cat
Skills: Gingerstar is an average cat, with her only advantage being that she is leader. She is equally good at hunting, fighting and climbing, and so earned her suffix instead for her stormy personality. That is, her personality changes with the wind.
Any powers? Tell me them: None.
Appearance: Gingerstar is a ginger tabby with bright yellow eyes. She has a black spot over her left eye and a white locket on her chest. Her ears have nicks in them, and she has some small scars on her body.
Backstory: Gingerstar was born into Cherryclan, and had the normal clan life. When most of Cherryclan died from a disease, Gingerstorm the deputy became leader. She accepted kittypets and loners into the clan, in hopes that she could rebuild it to its former strength.
Accessories: None
Other: Cherryclan shares borders with Windclan and Stormclan, and is made up of all four clans after a disaster struck. Go to Cherryclan's page in my siggie for more info.

[Silxe]

Name: Rabbitstar (Rabbitstripe)
Age: about 60 moons
Rank: Leader
Personality: Rabbitstar is a total extrovert, who loves socializing with her clanmates. She is very clumsy and extremely slow, however. Her fighting skills are fine in some ways, as she can hit super hard and take a hit very well, but she isn't exactly graceful or quick. She always looks for the best in a cat, and she isn't experienced in being a leader. She needs advice from her betters all the time, but she boasts about her abilities none the less. As a young cat, she got everything her way and thus she hasn't learned what to do in tough situations.
Gender: Molly
Skills: Large and powerful, and despite her less than good skills at hunting regular prey, she is the best badger hunter in the clan (It's a Hillclan thing, where they roll boulders up a hill, lure a badger out of a set, and smush them with said boulder. It is very risky and dangerous, but the payoff is great).
Any powers? Tell me them.: Just the regular 9 lives because she is a leader. Nothing special. She's already wasted a few on her many badger hunts.
Appearance: (include eye colors, number of scars, etc): Large and muscly, With normal grey short fur and white on her paws, stomach, tail tip and most of her face. Common green-yellow eyes and a pink nose. No extremely noticeable scars.
Backstory: (includes: born a rogue, parents died, siblings died, prophecy, etc): She was more or less born into the position, with her mother being leader and the father deputy. She was very spoiled by her parents. She always admired them, and wanted to be just like them, so she begged her mother, Petalstar, to give her stripe as a suffix like her father, Oakstripe. Her father mentored her, even though it was against the rules, but Petalstar made the argument that her word as leader was law. When her father retired to the elders den, her mother made her deputy, and a lot of the senior warriors started giving her a hard time. After a good while, her mother died of greencough, and she became Rabbitstar. At least 3/4ths of Starclan disapprove of her being leader, but there was enough that she could receive her 9 lives. I'm later making a subplot in which the clan finds out about her not really deserving to be leader, and she leaves for a while until they find out the new leader is kind of evil. They accept her and she is determined to be a better leader to the clan.
Accessories: (includes: necklace, special item, etc): Nope~
Other:

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I have 2 characters for you to evaluate!

Name: Whisperwhisker (Whisper for her pale-ish colored, fluffy pelt, and 'Whisker' for her soft, gentle nature)
Age: about 14 moons (young warrior, still a bit fresh from apprentice-hood)
Rank: warrior (kind of a Brightheart - is a warrior, but knows some medical practices)
Personality: A shy, sweet and caring cat. She will always try to do what's best, even if it means breaking the rules (a little )
Gender: molly
Skills: she has a fair knowledge of herbs and other medicine cat-ty things, and is a fair hunter.
Any powers? Tell me them.: nope (unless being UUBER kind and caring counts *coughcough* FLUTTERSHY *coughcough*)
Appearance: (include eye colors, number of scars, etc) A lilac lynx point/bengal mix (she's my avvie!) she has one ice blue eye and one lilac/purpley eye. relatively few scars.
Backstory: (includes: born a rogue, parents died, siblings died, prophecy, etc): (this is coming directly from the RP that created her) was found lost in the woods [as an older kit (almost apprentice age)], came from a nearby clan that was wiped out from an attack.
Accessories: (includes: necklace, special item, etc)n/a
Other:The RP that inspired me to make her is here: Dreamclan

Name: Foxhowl (Fox: orange coloration. Howl: her amazing voice)
Age: 20 moons
Rank:warrior
Personality:quiet, lonely and downright depressed. she used to be bubbly and fun-loving, but something happened...
Gender:molly
Skills:she has great stamina, and can run for great lengths of time
Any powers? Tell me them.: she has a very strong set of lungs ^ and can 'sing'
Appearance: (include eye colors, number of scars, etc)a Flame lynx point with emerald green eyes. she has a large scratch under her left eye from the fight with the badger that killed her mother.
Backstory: (includes: born a rogue, parents died, siblings died, prophecy, etc) born into the tribe of Falling Feathers. Her mother was a powerful warrior, and her father was the deputy. They went out in a hunting party with a few other cats one day, and her mother (who is nameless as of yet) went on to scout ahead. she had stumbled upon a badger set and was killed. When Foxy found her body she shrieked and sang a heart wrenching song of grievance. and that's where she got her name and she's been depressed ever since.
Accessories: (includes: necklace, special item, etc) N/A
Other: (I know it's not traditional tribe naming, but I made it up a LOOOOOOOONG time ago)

here's some art of them: x Made by the amazingMoyasune

[bronzebones]

Name: Gingerstar (Gingerstorm)
Age: 38 moons
Rank: Leader
Personality:
Gender: She-cat
Skills: Gingerstar is an average cat, with her only advantage being that she is leader. She is equally good at hunting, fighting and climbing, and so earned her suffix instead for her stormy personality. That is, her personality changes with the wind.
Any powers? Tell me them: None.
Appearance: Gingerstar is a ginger tabby with bright yellow eyes. She has a black spot over her left eye and a white locket on her chest. Her ears have nicks in them, and she has some small scars on her body.
Backstory: Gingerstar was born into Cherryclan, and had the normal clan life. When most of Cherryclan died from a disease, Gingerstorm the deputy became leader. She accepted kittypets and loners into the clan, in hopes that she could rebuild it to its former strength.
Accessories: None
Other: Cherryclan shares borders with Windclan and Stormclan, and is made up of all four clans after a disaster struck. Go to Cherryclan's page in my siggie for more info.

Name: Traditional, so is the warrior name. Good.

Age: A bit young.


Gender: It's rare to have a ginger she-cat.


Skills: Fits with the name.



Powers: Phew. None.



Appearance: I already mentioned the ginger she-cat thing, so I kind of think the black spot is strange.


Backstory: I don't see much wrong here, most cats would gather rogues and loners and try to rebuild a Clan, if they had any honor.


Accessories: Phew. None.


Other: Okay, I guess.



I rate your cat 6/10. C=

[Simonpet]

Considering Cherryclan is near Twoleg territory and occupies all four clans' territories, it wouldn't be too surprising to meet kittypets and loners. Also, a little thought about her parents: could her mother have been a tortoiseshell and her father a ginger? That might explain her coloring.

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Name: Bluemist
Age: 32 moons
Rank: Medicine cat
Personality: Bluemist is a light hearted individual. She prides herself in her skills with herbs, and immerses herself in her own studies and practices rather than spending time with other cats. She has a naturally lone and shy personality and enjoys the quiet much more than being with large groups. Despite this when she is healing any cat she will take on a motherly personality and any shyness will sink away. She's a bit of a temperamental she-cat though, and will often end up sulking around clan territory if anyone bothers her.
Gender: She-cat
Skills: She has an almost impeccable memory
Any powers? Tell me them.: None
Appearance: (include eye colors, number of scars, etc) A light silvery blue pelted she-cat with soft foggy/misty blue-ish eyes. Her fur is slick and silky. Her paws are dappled white. She is smaller and scrawnier than most other she-cats. She rarely is ever dirty and has almost no scars.
Backstory: (includes: born a rogue, parents died, siblings died, prophecy, etc) Although born a kittypet with the name of Scarlet, Bluemist had escaped the soft life and joined a clan. She never knew her parents, and her only friend as a kittypet was a scrappy stray calico cat named Allex who she left when she ran away from the two-legs house. Upon joining a clan, the leader recognized her for her strong memory and skill with herbs and allowed her to become a medicine cat. Since then she has worked her way up to one of the better medicine cats the clan has seen.
Accessories: (includes: necklace, special item, etc) A small pigeon feather that she wears behind her ear. It was the only thing she brought from her kittypet home.
Other: N/A