❛ the lazy writers ❜ V2

[Ranger of the North]

Maybe I'll shuffle something up, just to satisfy you.

Yess, that would be great! cx

Soooooo, um, hi I suppose. You might remember me, but probably not. I don't really want to get into why I was gone for....a long time- mostly because real life stuff happened and I was too awkward to come back after I had gone for a while.

Sorry.

I don't even want to post this because I don't know what the replies will be, but I need to grow up and just do it.

*spews hot chocolate across the keyboard* KRENKO!!!! OH MY GOSH I LEGIT THOUGHT YOU MUST HAVE DIED, I'M SO RELIEVED — wELCOME BACK, DUDE!! *thumps shoulder* You're always welcome here, you should know that


It's looking good, Dev! I like the rhythm; you can tell it's a song rather than a poem Sadly, I have no experience with writing songs, sorry, so I'm no help... :p

[Krenko]

I've missed you all

[TheSongOfTheStars]

I've missed you all

I missed you too... I think. You know to stay away from carrots right?
(btw I was probably FiveSecondsToFly when you where here and had an otter in my profile pic)

[winged-backpack]

Eyyy, I came up with maybe half an idea for a chorus of the song i'm writing, and I was wondering what you guys think? It's really kind of bad and cliché but this is the kind of idea I'm trying to get across (also, the dotted line is where there would be more lyrics which I haven't worked out yet))

You and me, we’re awesome on our own
Yeah, you and me, we don’t need no one
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But you and me, girl
We make one amazing person together

(I'm in the midst of making a playlist of the songs that are my inspiration for this, so if you guys have any suggestions, that would be awesome!)

[Krenko]

I've tried my best to stay away from those pesky orange veggies- believe me.

The song looks good so far (even if a bit cliche), keep working on it!

[Ranger of the North]

Oh! Guys, I wrote a thing. Thoughts? c:

One beat — two beats — thunder through the floor.

The toxic air, rasping like poison, stuck fast in her throat.

Three beats — four beats — pounding at the door.

She couldn't look out, couldn't open it, must not unlock it.

Five beats — six — ‘Don't open, ‘tis the law!’

She had been trapped here in Hell for countless hours, air running dangerously low.

Seven beats — eight — what will win this bloody war?

S H ExC O U L D N ’ TxB R E A T H E

Nine beats... ten. Your heart is slower than before.

Eleven beats...

Twelve...

Come and open up the door...

Half-mad with exhaustion, she stood.

[KawaiiPanda58]

Oh! Guys, I wrote a thing. Thoughts? c:

One beat — two beats — thunder through the floor.

The toxic air, rasping like poison, stuck fast in her throat.

Three beats — four beats — pounding at the door.

She couldn't look out, couldn't open it, must not unlock it.

Five beats — six — ‘Don't open, ‘tis the law!’

She had been trapped here in Hell for countless hours, air running dangerously low.

Seven beats — eight — what will win this bloody war?

S H ExC O U L D N ’ TxB R E A T H E

Nine beats... ten. Your heart is slower than before.

Eleven beats...

Twelve...

Come and open up the door...

Half-mad with exhaustion, she stood.

I love that style of writing! It's just so difficult to fit into a story. That's the annoying bit. Styles like it are usually used at the beginning of a story, like a prologue. (Yes Im bringing up a prologue again but you can do some really cool things with them. I've never used one before maybe I should.)

[winged-backpack]

Oh! Guys, I wrote a thing. Thoughts? c:

One beat — two beats — thunder through the floor.

The toxic air, rasping like poison, stuck fast in her throat.

Three beats — four beats — pounding at the door.

She couldn't look out, couldn't open it, must not unlock it.

Five beats — six — ‘Don't open, ‘tis the law!’

She had been trapped here in Hell for countless hours, air running dangerously low.

Seven beats — eight — what will win this bloody war?

S H ExC O U L D N ’ TxB R E A T H E

Nine beats... ten. Your heart is slower than before.

Eleven beats...

Twelve...

Come and open up the door...

Half-mad with exhaustion, she stood.

I love it! It kinda reminds me of the whole "One, two, Freddie's coming for you" thing from a Nightmare on Elm Street. I agree with what kawaiipanda said, it would be great as a prologue to a story, or at the very beginning. Style doesn't necessarily have to be consistent if it works within the story. It kinda sounds to me like a chanting that your character is hearing, with the descriptions in between. It's really good, I'd love to see what you do with it!

[Krenko]

Oh! Guys, I wrote a thing. Thoughts? c:

One beat — two beats — thunder through the floor.

The toxic air, rasping like poison, stuck fast in her throat.

Three beats — four beats — pounding at the door.

She couldn't look out, couldn't open it, must not unlock it.

Five beats — six — ‘Don't open, ‘tis the law!’

She had been trapped here in Hell for countless hours, air running dangerously low.

Seven beats — eight — what will win this bloody war?

S H ExC O U L D N ’ TxB R E A T H E

Nine beats... ten. Your heart is slower than before.

Eleven beats...

Twelve...

Come and open up the door...

Half-mad with exhaustion, she stood.

I love it! Especially the cliffhanger...what's going to happen next?

[Silver Pandorica]

Oh! Guys, I wrote a thing. Thoughts? c:

One beat — two beats — thunder through the floor.

The toxic air, rasping like poison, stuck fast in her throat.

Three beats — four beats — pounding at the door.

She couldn't look out, couldn't open it, must not unlock it.

Five beats — six — ‘Don't open, ‘tis the law!’

She had been trapped here in Hell for countless hours, air running dangerously low.

Seven beats — eight — what will win this bloody war?

S H ExC O U L D N ’ TxB R E A T H E

Nine beats... ten. Your heart is slower than before.

Eleven beats...

Twelve...

Come and open up the door...

Half-mad with exhaustion, she stood.

Ooh I love this! Really well done, wow. It’s super intense and I want to know more, haha.