x1 HM stubs wrote:G1 SunstreakerI love the character you had going on for Mara! How unforgiving she was to leave home, how greedy she was, and her quest for power. I found the story for how she acquired the three tails to be very interesting. The memories just added to the character, and let me get to know her more. It’s unfortunate your form was unfinished, it has a ton of potential I think! C:
kiffellThe origins for Karasu was really sad IMO ;^; How he had to go through all of that, but at least he had ended up with someone who would care about him! I like the idea of how tri-tails were born to fight evil, and how they have a given power as well. Even though your form is unfinished, I do see a lot of potential in the plot!
x3 HM stubs wrote:NurseGlowButtI really like the yin-yang theme going on with the past and present lives of Jinx/Pandora! As soon as you explained the personalities of each, I could get a good understanding of who this character is. I also really like how you showed the personalities of both lifes through your art, with Jinx looking more sinister and Pandora looking more peaceful.
I found myself despising who Jinx was, with her manipulating ways and no remorse for killing. I pitied Pandora, having a bit of a rough childhood with a father who didn’t care about her and a mother who was dying. Even though she was going through these troubles, she stayed strong and even made friends, and I was happy for her. I really like how you connected Jinx to Pandora, with the after rebirth character not knowing who she is, but being determined to find a cure for the plague. Although a couple of grammar errors, you told your story well. From the manipulating and cunning personality Jinx has, to the caring and nurturing personality Pandora has, I can tell that the story you have going on and the character you’re establishing is pretty solid. ♥ It sucks that you had to leave off on a TBC, the story you had going on so far was great and left me wondering what would happen next ^w^
Rare RU wrote:lexAhh the coding of this form is just wonderful! I love how you organized every individual section, and the stats were a nice addition. The way you sorted the story out in google docs made it easy to read, and the added sketches just made the story more vivid. I love the in depth look we get into the world Idalia lives in, with the factions and all. How her heart is in the right place, but she has to steal to keep on living. The necklace was a very interesting accessory, and I like how you associated it with how she got her fire powers! I also sympathized with Idalia when she accidentally killed one of her friends using her powers, and she falls into a depression because of it. I also really liked her relationship with Kazumi, how she helped her get over her fear of fire, and how it relates back to Idalia. The cat was a nice and cute addition as well <3
The ‘afterlife’ is where it got very interesting for me. I never expected the necklace to have that type of significance, how it cursed Idalia like that. I also would have never suspected that ending, when she becomes the Huntress. It left me wondering if she would ever revert back to being good again ;^; Overall it was a very solid form with a very solid character!
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Event Rare RU wrote:SilverSamuraiFirst things first, I really like how you tied each life to each tail! It was an adventure to read through every life, the roles he took on in each, and how they all tied up with each other in a cause-and-effect way.
How caring the first life was, for his mate and soon-to-be child. When he made the mistake to encounter Lilith, who makes him immortal and curses him. The way his personality takes a cold turn in the second life, where he has to become king. It was really interesting to see how he reacted to everything in this particular life, seemingly desperate to get his way at every turn. And in the third life, where he becomes Luken’s experiment. It engrossed me to see how Atlas regrets everything he had done in both in his first and second life, where it all started when he met Lilith. The relationship he shared with the shinigami was very interesting as well, for the most part he seemed to hate them, but could have conversations with them as well. The ending left me wanting more, wanting to know what happens next, because I just feel like Atlas would one day finally leave Luken ^w^ all in all a very solid character with a beautifully written story!
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winner! wrote:juice box.The origins of Adriesta was very interesting! I like how she seemingly came out of nowhere, and how confused/fascinated she was at her new life. I felt pity for her when she got attacked and had to attack back, but the blame was put on her and she was banished from Ethereal. I absolutely adored her relationship with Kishi and the others in the mortal realm, and I felt really sad to see her leave her friends. I found so many plot twists I wasn’t expecting (Nakir came back! I did a little hoot in my head XD) and how she thought she would be better off on her own, keeping her friends safe. I loved the little quirks about her, how humble and shy she was, I thought the fact that she was too hot to handle (literally, as the others would get burned when they touched her) to be a fun and interesting little idea. I just really like the idea of how she became a new realm leader/goddess etc, and the journey she went through to get to where she is now. I just felt really happy to know that she is finally content with her life at the end of the story ♥ The accessories are intricate and amazing, and fit her well for her job. The extra info at the end of the form just helped to establish the character even better, especially the info on her powers and personality. And poor Nakir getting friendzoned by Adriesta
Your character is very solid, and the form was wonderfully written. I couldn’t say that I found anything I didn’t like in this form <3
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