Welcome to my thread with the story I currently write.
A few things about the story before I begin:
I know this story won't be something special but just thought to have it here, too. (It's a copy-paste work, so if you want the actual link to it, PM me)
I'm a teenage girl so don't judge harshly. I have big imagination but I sometimes stuck between simple things.
I have written some books but in my country's language and some have find them pretty good so I just would like you to comment and critique on this story. It's my second story in English so... yeah..
I will write some forms about the characters, information about the species and a abstract of the story/book.
Each Chapter is a day. And yes, the days are huge at the beginning..! DX
New book, still writing. 2 months ago I started so not a lot yet.
Just comment telling me your opinion about it..! :)
Abstract:
These book tells 2 different stories.
In the first story, a 15-yeard-old girl gets a scholarship in the elite school Solis. This school accepts only a few scholarships a year so she's one of the luckiest. She meets new friends that are more than human. At first, she finds it hard to understand them but as the time goes by and she meets them better, she finds it hard to believe such myths and legends. In the end, she learns that these are the best friends she could ever find.
The second story is about a 17-yeard-old vampire girl with a long and sad history. Everything starts when she finds out she is pregnant. She has a current home and has no money. She is definitely not going back on the streets and is forced to make a big choice between her lover's happiness or her 'father's' agreement. She has to choose under a huge pressure when at the same time she has a team of demons, from her long past, after her.
Species information:
Human:
They are common people that live as well as they can.They have never been Vampires/Shapeshifters/Werewolves. They can become Changed Vampires, might born with the ability to change into anthro-wolf or change into another animal (shapeshifting).
But the chance to be born as a werewolf is 0,5 in 10 and born as a shapeshifter is a little more common, 1 in 10.
Vampire:
Purebred: These vampire have never been humans. They come from at least one royal and ancient blood lines. A Purebred vampire has 2 parents that are both Purebreds. There are only 3 different blood lines- of which, each is unique. These vampires do not need a lot of blood but time to time, they should have some. They have beautiful characteristics and sometimes speak as they are old. Their eyes are often dark brown mixed with red and in more uncommon cases it can be soft or dark blue or soft or very dark purple. But in most rare cases, it can be a soft green color that has the ability to glow under the moonlight. Purebred vampires can turn a human into a vampire but that new vampire, won't and never, be as powerful as a Purebred. Many hunt Purebreds for they sweet and blue blood but it is rare to win such a powerful species.
Genetically different/Mixed Race: These vampires are a mix of Purebred Vampires with another species. For example, if a Purebred and human have a child, it will be half human, half Purebred and it always depends from whom it got the most genes. If the child takes more from the Purebred, then it will be, for example, immortal and might need to drink blood. If the child takes more genes from the human parent, then the child will not age normal but slower but will be a normal human child.
Changed/Common: A Changed vampire used to be a human but got bitten and changed to a vampire. When a human gets bitten by a Purebred, there is a 40% that the poison will kill the human and even if it doesn't, the mutation keeps torturing the human's body and mind for 2 consecutive days. Unlike Purebred vampires, they need blood frequently and their blood has a dark red color that is toxic. They have always a color mix in their eyes. After the change, the eye fills with old blood and it mixes with the eyes' actual color.
Shapeshifter:
Shapeshifters are human looking creatures that have the ability to turn into animals. The shapeshifter is not a type of gene, it's randomly appeared. The most common case is when a shapeshifter can turn into any animal the person has seen. In more uncommon, is when the shapeshifter can turn into 3 to 4 different animals and in rare, when s/he can turn into only 2 or 1 animals. It is rare because the bond that appears between the shapeshifter and the animal is very deep and unbreakable and sometimes hard to see. This way, the shapeshifter of only one animal, can last more as an animal than a shapeshifter of 3 or 4 animals. The shapeshifters of one or two animals, have often the eye color of one of the animals.
Werewolves:
Werewolves are human that can turn into anthro-wolves. Werewolves can change anytime they want but they can also change when they get very angry. Each time there is a full moon, the werewolves are stronger and more dangerous. Most of the times, the werewolves are calm people that can be relaxed and patient. The anthro-wolves' coat colors are a big variety from white to gray to black and yellow to dark brown and any combination between them.
Demons:
Demons are very rare (Only 1 of 100 is a demon) and immortal. They are feared by everyone else and they used to be natural enemies of the Purebred Vampires. They do have wings but they can unite with they demon's body so they can't be seen. Demons look like a mysterious human, that doesn't talk a lot and doesn't tell anything about it's past. They like to wear black clothes, not catch the attention and the don't like the sun's light. Demons are naturally stronger than a Purebred Vampire and ofter hunt them. However, this has stopped by now as the Purebred's number have fallen down and demons have lost their interest in them.
Characters: (You don't have to read them as there are descriptions in the book, but read if you want to know more.)
Human
Name: Angel Cross
Age: 15
Personality:Pretty calm and very clever. She is sweet and studies very hard. She's sometimes very shy and can become very hard about some subjects. She is often sarcastic and might hurt others without wanting to.
History:She comes from a poor family. Her mother died in a car accident and she lives with her father in a small apartment. Because Angel was only 6 years old when her mother died, her father bought her a puppy for companion. Her studies are going very well and she hopes to become a successful doctor as her mother was. The private school Solis accepted her as her grades are very high.
Looks:She is an average girl-she's not too fat or too thin and she isn't too talk or too short. She has short dark brown hair at the length of her chin. She has big dark brown eyes and a beautiful smile. She likes to wear casual clothes everywhere except school, where she wears the school's uniform. She will rarely wear a skirt outside the school. She also wears rarely formal clothes.
Pets(?):Anastasia. She is a 9-yeard-old white borzoi.
Vampire
Name:Nyx Lacusta
Vampire Type:Old Purebred
Age & Real Age:17 & 17
Personality:Sometimes very selfish. She is social but with a limit. She is very flirty but almost all times, that doesn't mean anything to her. She is very moody and if something is said that she doesn't like, she'll stay alone and will not talk about it.
History:She grew up in an orphanage. She was adopted at the age of 6. The couple that had adopted her was actually going to kill her(they were demons). They tortured her and beat her but she managed to escape. They were after her for about a month so she stayed in a dark, narrow path behind a trash bin with no food. She lived in the streets for 4 years. After that, she had to walk a lot until she found this high school. When she met the principal, at the age of 10, he offered her an apartment and everything she needed but with the exchange she would have to study in this high school and avoid any serious trouble. She agreed. Now she is living in one of the rooms in the high school.She is with William for around 2 years.
Looks:She is a thin, tall girl with black hair in a bob haircut that has long tips in frond and goes too short behind. She has dark purple eyes and loves to wear black emo-like clothes and orange with black plastic skeleton.
Vampire
Name: Ambers Norton
Vampire Type: Purebred
Age & Real Age: 16 & 16
Personality: He's a dark person boy when he tries to hide something but is always happy and hyper. Very clever and wicked sometimes. Will do a lot for something he wants. But he can fool around when he is with his friends. He is very flirty with every girl in the school.
History: He comes from a very rich and old family. His parents are old purebred vampires. He has had a great life living in a big mansion. He's half French and half Russian so he has grown around each country's rich. His father, Michael, owns the Solis High School and he's the principal so Ambers is quite popular among the school and very popular among the girls in the school. But even tho, he flirts with each girl, he hasn't find the one who will steal his heart. And that's kind of sad and annoying for him.
Looks: He's a tall thin boy with messy blond hair that are not too short. He has soft green eyes and a sweet and flirty stare most of the times. He likes to wear suit-like clothes.
+More to come, just feeling tired now...