❛ the lazy writers ❜ V2

[winged-backpack]

@morioh
Wow, that's a really powerful poem! If I didn't know the backstory to it, you could interpret that in so many ways! The only thing I would say though is your third to last stanza could do with some tweaking - the two longer lines seem really out of place to me. I would recommend a little bit on enjambment and possibly removing the "because" from the line?

I cannot tell where I sit or walk or stand
With only a singular force to guide me,
I do not know whether it is sea or land
I can’t feel the texture of the ground through leather soles.
I reach out into the maw regardless.
Maws of teeth and thorn and sunken ships and broken dreams—

That's just my personal opinion, I honestly think it's really good!!

@ranger
Agreed! I'm loving the good vibes coming from this thread right now!

@anyone interested in that advent thing
If I were to post my list of prompts/chapter encouragements, would anyone else be interesting in using them? I wouldn't want to post them here needlessly but if you guys are interested (I'm adding songs and stuff which would be easily edited and personalised to different people so whatever really)

[~Teya~]

okAY SO
My creative writing class started a poetry unit and basically, our first assignment was allowing a partner to lead you all around the school while you are blindfolded. We had to touch, listen and smell to try and figure out where we were and write a poem about how we felt later on. I finished my poem, and I'm kinda proud of it so I'm gonna share. I'm also turning this in for marks so if anyone thinks there's anything to improve upon, please do tell!!

There is no moon amidst the darkness,
But I feel light cascade down upon me
As a wave of insecurity would do the same.
I feel the walls rise higher and higher until they tower,
But this deprivation is the only one to blame. Sensory,
Gone.
We traipse mindlessly.

There is dust lining the distance that spans ahead,
But as my fingertips dance along a shelf ridge,
Rustles, they tickle my ears and shape the picture before me. Railings
span vaster and vaster until they dip with the staircase,
They try to trip me, discreetly, dastardly. I climb—
Heedlessly.

I cannot tell where I sit or walk or stand
With only a singular force to guide me,
I do not know whether it is sea or land because I can’t feel the texture of the ground through leather soles.
I reach out into the maw regardless. Maws of teeth and thorn and sunken ships and broken dreams—

Pull
Pull
Pull
The force of my only guide begins relenting relentlessly.

Stretch
Stretch
Stretch
I am dauntless.
Yet the darkness is daunting.

Ohh, what a nice poem ! I suck at poems, so any poem is amazing to me, lol, I hope your teacher likes it! ^.^

[Ranger of the North]

Guys! School gave me writing material that I ended up happy with!! I'd really appreciate it if you could check the two short-stories out and give me some feedback, I'm really proud of them also I need titles XD Aziz and Gareth

Yikes. I looked back at the earlier chapters of my current novel and had a weird mixture of cringe and nostalgia. Also...there’s some characters I threw in during more recent chapters *cough* June *cough, cough* Terrace *cough, sputter, cough* because I hadn’t thought of them until then, and I need to go back and add them into earlier chapters. Oh gosh. There are so many things I need to go back and rewrite and scrap and completely redo and change and fix and AGDKLRJKJL I can’t do that yet!

Somebody slap me. I need to write.

~snip~

Everyone's so fired up and inspired atm, it's great :.D

HA not me. But I like seeing everyone else get inspired c’:

#RELAAAAAATE
*slaps for good measure*

Hehehe XP


Woah Morioh, that's awesome! I love it, it's really good!
There was just one piece: 'The force of my only guide begins relenting relentlessly.' and I'm not sure, did you contradict yourself purposefully, or...?

@anyone interested in that advent thing
If I were to post my list of prompts/chapter encouragements, would anyone else be interesting in using them? I wouldn't want to post them here needlessly but if you guys are interested (I'm adding songs and stuff which would be easily edited and personalised to different people so whatever really)

If I'm completely honest, I don't actually know XD It could go either way, but I personally would be interested in seeing them to see if they give me ideas! c:

[TheSongOfTheStars]

@Backpack, I'm a sucker for prompt lists, so definitely.

[winged-backpack]

Hey all, so I finished creating my prompt list. There's 4 days which just say "new chapter" and that's for 10,000 Doors, so they could be your own works or just replaced with sommat else. Also, there are 3 days that are a few of my favourite songs, so you can chop and change those as you like. I'm posting it now so that if anyone wants to plan or anything, you can! I've also posted it on deviantART, which is also where all the days will be posted (I tend to use not-safe-for-cs topics and language so making a thread on here isn't ideal ^^')

1. Winter
2. New chapter
3. Yesterday
4. In the walls
5. Gift
6. Ritual
7. November Rain – Guns ‘N’ Roses
8. Comfort
9. Life Of The Party- All Time Low
10. New chapter
11. Lie
12. Your younger self
13. Poison – Alice Cooper
14. Apocalypse
15. Countdown
16. Labyrinth
17. New chapter
18. Future
19. Coffee
20. Rat
21. Museum
22. New chapter
23. Rooftop
24. Rockstar
25. Present

Do tell me if you do choose to do this! I'd love to read what everyone does!
Dev out

[TheSongOfTheStars]

Looks cool! I'll make my own thread on here real quick, and fill in the 'new chap' and songs with my own things!

[passione]

Thanks for the feedback guys!
I did mean to contradict myself but the more I read it, the more I realize it doesn't make sense XD
I'll be fixing everything up based on your suggestions before handing it in on Tuesday.

By the way, Dev, the prompt challenge seems like a lot of fun! I'll be participating on wattpad :)

[Woogwoo Wren]

So I am in a perfect carrot situation... my villain is waaaay to powerful and I don't know how to get rid of him... and I feel chocking on a carrot would be a little anti-climactic... any suggestions? I also really want to write ~2,000 words in two hours, which I can do as long as I know what I'm writing...

[danheng]

So I am in a perfect carrot situation... my villain is waaaay to powerful and I don't know how to get rid of him... and I feel chocking on a carrot would be a little anti-climactic... any suggestions? I also really want to write ~2,000 words in two hours, which I can do as long as I know what I'm writing...

have him be tricked into imprisonment or death by his own mistakes- this only works if your charries are somewhat clever but always my favorite way to end a villain <3

[TheSongOfTheStars]

So I am in a perfect carrot situation... my villain is waaaay to powerful and I don't know how to get rid of him... and I feel chocking on a carrot would be a little anti-climactic... any suggestions? I also really want to write ~2,000 words in two hours, which I can do as long as I know what I'm writing...

No please. Kill him with a carrot, but make it dramatic. You can do it. Utterly humiliate them by killing them by choking on a carrot.