RENAMED~ A Caged Phoenix (dropping whatever comes 2 mind)

[kanni]

Ok so plot twist on Avalon meeting Jackson lol. Anywho, I tried to be less repetitive this time, how does it sound now?

[Ranger of the North]

Ok so plot twist on Avalon meeting Jackson lol. Anywho, I tried to be less repetitive this time, how does it sound now?

Nice! It does read smoother imo c;

[kaz(:]

^ I agree, it is a smooth read! I just got the chance to read the most recent 2 posts. I really like them! Sometimes my favorite scenes in books are where the author just takes time to describe the setting or a specific person (generally the wiser, love interest or best friend). So maybe the next scene is a description of the train station, and the kind of day it feels like as her last day here in a long time, maybe ever if she dies? I don't know, but I'm a sucker for details (as long as it's not over done, and gets boring if you know what I mean).

Just a little reader preference, I don't know if other people feel the same, but, just, ya! Again, I really like the 2 new posts!

[kanni]

@raven @north thank you to both!

@raven There's this thing called nanowrimo, i'm not sure if you've ever heard of it, but I decided to enter A Caged Phoenix in their writing challenge(50,000 words in one month). I actually have the next few scenes already written out and ready to go. I do have the train station explained to some extent, but the only times i'll ever really go into detail with something will be whenever Avalon is looking in a proper mirror for the first time, Jackson's "death", and the end scene of the first book.

[Ranger of the North]

NaNoWriMo! Good luck!!

[kanni]

@Ranger Thanks so much!! Have you participated?

[kaz(:]

@Beefy ooh ok, i think that's cool the only time you go in to deep detail is during really important parts! i haven't seen that in a book before. and no, i haven't heard of it but good luck!

[Ranger of the North]

@Ranger Thanks so much!! Have you participated?

Noo way; way too intense for me XD
I have participated in Camp NaNo a few times, though! c:


Ooh, well Gondu's being rather mysterious... I'm trying to trust him, but this really isn't helping XD

[kanni]

Noo way; way too intense for me XD
I have participated in Camp NaNo a few times, though! c:


Ooh, well Gondu's being rather mysterious... I'm trying to trust him, but this really isn't helping XD

Thats the point ;)

[Ranger of the North]

Noo way; way too intense for me XD
I have participated in Camp NaNo a few times, though! c:


Ooh, well Gondu's being rather mysterious... I'm trying to trust him, but this really isn't helping XD

Thats the point

...not reassuring XD: