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I can see right through you... by yankees324

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I can see right through you...

Postby yankees324 » Thu Jan 13, 2011 11:19 am

Well,, the first Oekaki drawing actually drawn by me (I always color the editable ones!), so I need some critique. I drew this on a trackpad on a laptop, I don't own a tablet. So, comments, please??
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Eliza
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Vincent
Oh, this is how it starts,
Lightning strikes the heart,
It goes off like a gun,
Brighter than the sun.
Oh, we could be the stars,
Falling from the sky,
Shining how we want,
Brighter than the sun.


Brighter Than The Sun -Colbie Caillat

**To My Fellow RPers!**
I'm taking a leave off RPs, probably for the next month or so. I'll still be on CS adopting pets and whatnot, but my creativity is drained for some reason and I don't want to give you bad posts, especially since they're all going so well. Sorry for this slight inconvenience, but its for all our benefits.
Sincerely, Yankees324
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Re: I can see right through you...

Postby k o i j o y <3 » Thu Jan 13, 2011 2:00 pm

The eyes look [very] close together, they are also very angular.
The color of the fur looks odd. try coloring a base color with a pencil/pen tool, then use the air brush tool to shade it in.
Hope i helped <3
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Re: I can see right through you...

Postby yankees324 » Thu Jan 13, 2011 3:45 pm

Thanks! Well, I really didn't know what animal I was drawing, so I didn't think of fur, scales, texture, etc. Thanks! I'll try out the suggestions soon!!!! :D
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Eliza
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Vincent
Oh, this is how it starts,
Lightning strikes the heart,
It goes off like a gun,
Brighter than the sun.
Oh, we could be the stars,
Falling from the sky,
Shining how we want,
Brighter than the sun.


Brighter Than The Sun -Colbie Caillat

**To My Fellow RPers!**
I'm taking a leave off RPs, probably for the next month or so. I'll still be on CS adopting pets and whatnot, but my creativity is drained for some reason and I don't want to give you bad posts, especially since they're all going so well. Sorry for this slight inconvenience, but its for all our benefits.
Sincerely, Yankees324
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