Entry One (Critique wanted) by Scourge_Bloodclan

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Entry One (Critique wanted)

Postby Scourge_Bloodclan » Mon Jun 12, 2017 2:57 am

My first entry
I'd like to hear your critique on it c:
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Re: Entry One (Critique wanted)

Postby hou5159 » Mon Jun 12, 2017 3:07 am

ello so im sorry if my critque isn't good or correct.
first of all the hair looks very rigid and the shine on it isn't vv visable or correct.
the 2 marks on the tail seem to not fit because they are too straight
in my opinion I think that the green paws stand out too much and don't fit with the ashthectic.
I dont know if the first paw is like that in the lineart or if you redrew it. Either way the paw dosen't look vv correct and it looks a bit awkward. The 3 markings on the back look alright and and pretty fitting. Overall i give this pet a 6/10 because i feel like there should be more reconizable features for the pet instead of the pet just having a lot of gradiants usend on it especially the tail and the ears. This could use more work but this is just my opinion.
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Re: Entry One (Critique wanted)

Postby Scourge_Bloodclan » Mon Jun 12, 2017 3:14 am

thrjholly wrote:ello so im sorry if my critque isn't good or correct.
first of all the hair looks very rigid and the shine on it isn't vv visable or correct.
the 2 marks on the tail seem to not fit because they are too straight
in my opinion I think that the green paws stand out too much and don't fit with the ashthectic.
I dont know if the first paw is like that in the lineart or if you redrew it. Either way the paw dosen't look vv correct and it looks a bit awkward. The 3 markings on the back look alright and and pretty fitting. Overall i give this pet a 6/10 because i feel like there should be more reconizable features for the pet instead of the pet just having a lot of gradiants usend on it especially the tail and the ears. This could use more work but this is just my opinion.
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Okay
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Re: Entry One (Critique wanted)

Postby Takk » Mon Jun 12, 2017 4:04 am

For the line problem, when I'm doing growths I always start with pencil size 1 so I get the shape right and then go over it with pen size 2. This looks a lot like the kalon lines and adds a smooth look to the finished product and the pen allows you to go over the same spot two or three times before looking dark (if you don't chance the occupancy? Unsure if that's the right word).
The color choice is really nice tho and while much isn't going on with the markings, it doesn't have to either! Not bad for a first try
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Re: Entry One (Critique wanted)

Postby Scourge_Bloodclan » Mon Jun 12, 2017 4:06 am

Takk wrote:For the line problem, when I'm doing growths I always start with pencil size 1 so I get the shape right and then go over it with pen size 2. This looks a lot like the kalon lines and adds a smooth look to the finished product and the pen allows you to go over the same spot two or three times before looking dark (if you don't chance the occupancy? Unsure if that's the right word).
The color choice is really nice tho and while much isn't going on with the markings, it doesn't have to either! Not bad for a first try


Okay, thank you c:
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