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Cat Snarl

by BlueCynder » Sun Sep 05, 2010 7:37 am

Pretty much a fail....drawn with a mouse, please comment.

Evening walks among the orchard,

She greets the dancing dusk,

A spirit of the air;

A lady, if you must,

Her dress a robe of twilight,

Her eyes awash with sun.

She places gems of water,

Along the grass, among

The apples fallen, withered

By her master, Autumn Sire,

Coloured in the lilac glow

Of Winter’s sharp satire.

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Re: Cat Snarl

by The Last Raven » Sun Sep 05, 2010 7:43 am

It looks good to me. the only thing that you might want to fix is the tail.

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Re: Cat Snarl

by BlueCynder » Sun Sep 05, 2010 9:59 pm

Edited the tail ^^, looks worse though. Meh, I think ,on the whole, it looks ok.

Evening walks among the orchard,

She greets the dancing dusk,

A spirit of the air;

A lady, if you must,

Her dress a robe of twilight,

Her eyes awash with sun.

She places gems of water,

Along the grass, among

The apples fallen, withered

By her master, Autumn Sire,

Coloured in the lilac glow

Of Winter’s sharp satire.

BlueCynder

Posts: 1049

Joined: Fri Jun 19, 2009 5:23 am

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Re: Cat Snarl

by The Last Raven » Mon Sep 06, 2010 5:03 am

it looks much better! Really, it looks good.

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❝ raven|she|adult ❞
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███░█████████████████ █
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███░█████████████████ █
──-────────────────────
❝ hi! i’m a long time player
who loves to hoard chameleons
and anything else that tickles my fancy.
i am a huge nerd and love to cosplay!❞

────────────────────-──
███░█████████████████ █