[sunnyzhp2]

This is my first time drawing MLP on the oekaki... I don't think I failed too much... except for the fact that I made it a cross between a pony and an alicorn, and the Background is terrible.

Please comment on how I can improve

[ArizonaT3a]

I think it looks awesome :3

[sunnyzhp2]

Thanks, but I still have a ways to o before my art can really be called awesome.

[ArizonaT3a]

Well your definitely better at art than I am ^^

[sunnyzhp2]

thanks, but your art is amazing!

[raptorgrrl2]

I love it! My own first attempt was a bit worse than this, but I've always been a 'copier'; I'm best at copying the lines of pictures I have around and adding details.
I suggest working on details; the colors are wonderful, nicely blended. Details such as strands of hair in the mane and tail (just a few to accentuate the curve) and some individual tail-feathers of the Phoenix would work wonders - you've got the wings well in hand ^_^ I'm TOO detail-oriented sometimes, so don't go too overboard at first.
The wings should probably be bigger if this is ultimately an Alicorn, but it's a great first attempt in my opinion.

[born again]

REALLY?!? THIS ?IS ONLY YOUR FIRST ATTEMPT?!?! *flails* *dies*

[sunnyzhp2]

Well, when I first drew it, the wings were longer but it would go where the front legs would have started at and it would have looked really disorientated. I will try and fiddle with the wings so that they will look larger though, and detailed feathers are hard to do since I use a mouse. And thank you Flare.