[obsolete dream]

OK! It's done, and here is the story: "Hi, I am Moonpath"*dodges blow from cat*" rrrrooowww close one! There is a battle-YOUCH! going on! WATCH WHERE YOU SWIPE, YOU DUNNO WHO YOU ARE DEALING WITH, MOUSE-BRAIN! Sorry. Apprentices, just too hyper, they think they are stronger than warriors like us! Oww! STOP YOU MOUSE BRAINED APPRENTICE! One sec! GO BACK TO YOUR DEN, THRUSHkit! YEAH, KIT! Ok. Sorry about that! This is me, after the battle, it has ended. My ear is torn, eye bleeding. Tail has fur and flesh torn out. I am going to the medicine cat now. Bye, Moonpath." OK, you will be hearing a lot more from my main character, Moonpath. She is awesome!

[obsolete dream]

Please comment and tell me what you think of her! I NEED FEEDBACK! Anything I should do next time, please tell me!

[Onew~]

Perhaps you should put a little more time into the coloring(Use different layers for the color and the lines so they don't overlap :3) so you can't see the white pixels in between the lines and the cat. Perhaps you should turn the smoothing up when your drawing so the lines are a bit smoother.

And your story is nice, but it's extremely confusing. Who's saying what and what's even going on? Quotation marks around the speech and description in between dialogue would be great.

As mentioned before using layers is a great privilege as if placed correctly nothing will overlap and everything will make the drawing look much more attractive. :3

[obsolete dream]

Thanks, I will remember that next time!