[ShadyBro]

(Second Entry)

This is my first entry. I remember trying out for the last artist search (or something similar, I cant remember, it was a while ago this one from 2014, I won second place <3) and it was a lot of fun so I figured Id give it another go. Iv been a part of a lot of adopts but none quite as interactive and interesting as this. Im really hoping for some strict and descriptive critique to help me create a better design next time around, if I ever get to it.

Thanks for the opportunity <3

[KathrynKat]

Imo
the stripes stand out to much, they are better off a darker shade of the base coat imo or white maybe.
The white spots at such a angle is a bit strange and I myself just don't really see it for neravontiis.

The stripes are to bold and imo to long and weird angles.
I have done a few with stripes.

Imo best just shorter stripes otherwise looks you maybe trying to make a tiger or zebra.

I honestly don't feel any of the white fits. White blends or cloudy the bold black stripes as a pattern then still some blue between... It is a bit odd. I myself have done neras I wish I never has posted. x.x

But an idea to make this better

Shorter stripes not to bold and perhaps a darker shade of the base color. Aka in this case darker blue then the blue you used but for the stripes.

Don't blend or make the white fuzzy ubless blend to where u can see i color end and is a fade but just at one end and not striped fades. So say you wanted the end of the tail and bottom of the legs/feet to be. Color white then turn the mist down low and color over the blue making the white thick by the white and so lightly going into the blue and looks really faded.

Take a look at some of the multicolored and striped to get an idea.

Stripes do not need to be samw color but in this case darker blue imo or find way to fixed up maybe not so bold or long? Hard for me to think of a good way... As for there are neras of all sorts.

[ShadyBro]

Thanks hun, Im definitely redoing this. Your ideas make sense and sound a lot better than what I was trying to do XD

Edited. I like it a lot more now honestly.

[KathrynKat]

Thanks hun, Im definitely redoing this. Your ideas make sense and sound a lot better than what I was trying to do XD

Edited. I like it a lot more now honestly.

Wow... I am impressed with the improvement
looks much better I agree